Date: March 13 2025 10:09 PM Title: Chapter 11 - Gross Negligence
Really great to see this chapter after the wait! I greatly appreciate your distinct tone and writing style. It's not easy to find work so well fleshed out and realistic. It's impressive to me that you think about how his situation would differ from the fantasies we've all read so many times in the past, and it makes your story stand out, and feel much more immersive to the reader. I really loved the fart section, and would love to see more of that in the future, but I am always glad to see this story get another addition
Author's Response:
Thank you!! I'm glad somebody picked up on the attempts to draw a contrast between the fantasy we all imagine and the cold reality of it. I've seen other stories on here use to great effect, so I can't claim credit for it being a new idea or anything. But I was definitely making the effort, so it's appreciated that it was noticed.