Reviewer: lightwing Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2025 6:16 PM Title: Epilogue C - New World

Woo hoo! This was s fun ride of a story.  I love the concept, I love the artwork sprinkled in to help get a sense of the characters and their scale.  The descriptions of the world from the perspective of the goddess and the humans.  I did feel like the sense of scale was a little skewed at times given that people can climb such gigantic bodies so quickly or travel across the planet from city to city on foot so quickly but the rest was great!  I'm a sucker for the difference in scale between humans and gigantic beings and giga sized super powered goddesses interacting with the world is the best form of that.

Not much I can say on the various endings that hasn't been said by others already.  On that note, given Ryemi's power couldn't she get the other goddesses to demonstrate theirs so she can learn them?  Then she can create planets, transfer humanity to the new world and finally live among her friends and family.  What a cathartic moment that would be! Bonus for a later story where she and her mother combine their unique abilities and possibly revive Genesis.  You did hint that she's still around in a spiritual form watching everyone.

One critique is that I did want to see more of the other goddesses, like Alluria, both as goddesses and while they live as humans but I guess that what side stories are for.  Anyway, great work! I hope to see you again!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review!

Like what you said, I think I could have handled the sense of scale a lot better, I'll try to do better in the future on that part. For Ryemi's power, she can definitely learn by replicating other goddesses for sure, but whether the other goddesses have the powers to do such feats(like create planets) is a different story. Given her infinite potential, Ryemi will eventually learn how to do something of that scale at some point, but there's no telling how many eons that could take.

As for the other goddesses, the cast is really huge and I may find it hard to give everyone a chance to be featured. The first few after stories planned still focus mainly on a limited cast of goddesses, so not all the goddesses will be featured for now. But that may change in the future.

Reviewer: Coolman30000 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2025 11:08 AM Title: Epilogue C - New World

Okay, review of the three Endings, ill be going in what i think is the weakest to the strongest endings

And i think the weakest ending is.... unfortunately Ending C with Ren.

I get that this is the good ending but i still feel this is the weakest just due to the fact that it felt a bit like deus ex machina, even though it really isnt. There was a feeling of betrayal when ryemi got this tool to fix the issue she was faced with ( relatively speaking ) ease, i just think the payoff wasnt there for a "good ending", the things i did liked something about the ending, its the epilogue which i think is about as strong as B and A, it gave a time skip to show how everyone is doing and how ryemi is now doing as her job as essentially God. This ending isnt bad, infact, its good! its just that i felt like there could have been a bit more foreshadowing on what ryemi was capable of doing... that and the fact that due to this being the "good ending", and is probably where most of the side stories will be held in, it had a lot of weight on its back to carry unlike the other two, still, 7/10!

Next is Ending B!

Ending B is intresting, as we have a ending where the villain ( layla ) won, and... it doesnt look that good for her. I feel like due to this ending not having as much weight to carry as ending C, it got a lot more freaky, which doesnt really have much substance for story and i think its fine, it showed two bad endings, bad ending for our casts, and bad ending for layla herself, which is an interesting take on the villain winning, showing that even if she won, that doesnt actually meant *she* won. 7.8/10

And for my favourite ending, Ending A, i swear its not bias.... mostly

i just think this ending was the best of the three as it gave us an understanding of how fucked this world is if ryan isnt here to keep mimi in check. Ryan will act on reaction and forced through problems with his problem solving skills and luck really, and mimi is the problem everyone will have to deal with if Ryan's shit doesnt work.... and well, this is what could happen. honestly, not much to say, 8/10

Endings are incredibly hard to make, and honestly even with all i said negatively ( about ending C ), its still a perfectly acceptable ending that captures what you want us to see ( which is ren and ryemi's relationship ) 

Anyways for a side story i think it could be fun ( in the Ending C timeline ) if lucy decided to tell ryemi and/or mimi ryan's freaky desires from the first part LMAO 

Thats it! Congratulations on finishing the story! and as always, thanks for the chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review!

For ending C, it is understandable that you would have preferred more foreshadowing about Ryemi's true capabilities. My intention was for her Domain to be an overpowered extension of her mother's Domain of Origin, seeing as she was her direct offspring, but that was not really set up in the story at all. I will try to keep this in mind in the future.

For the other 2 endings, I'm glad that you enjoyed them as I spent an equal amount of effort on them as well.

For the side story, it's interesting that you mentioned this of all things, because something similar to that actually does happen! (although it's kind of different as well) I won't spoil too much but do look forward to it once I upload it.