Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 23 2025 10:55 AM Title: PART 22

I wonder how long it'll take for Amber to realize she's destroying/has destroyed the most meaningful relationship in her life.

That whole segment was intense, and you did a masterful job of mixing smut and character development here! Amber not understanding why Rebecca was hesitant to go up her ass, that this was what she did to Rebecca at the most abusive point in their time together, makes a lot of sense to me. Amber vaguely thinks back on the bad times and fears that Rebecca will want to leave her because of them, but she doesn't actually comprehend what about them was so bad for Rebecca, even when Rebecca said something to that effect a couple chapters ago in the food court. Amber just can't see it, but she knows that she wants Rebecca up there.

There were some real signs of how far Amber had come in this segment. The voice in the back of her head telling her to challenge her mother's beliefs on tiny people, the one reprimanding herself for what she was doing, was what I think was Amber's logical side. Deep down, she knows this "tinies are meant to be ruled' stuff is bullshit. And the guilt she felt for a while about what was happening to Rebecca, the effort she went to in order to first let Rebecca out then make her more comfortable when she sat down was actually pretty sweet.

But then those sexual urges took over, and that master-slave stuff crossed over from the bedroom into daily life. She started spouting her mom's nonsense before Donnica could herself. That primal feeling inside her started calling the shots, and it may end up costing her everything.

When Amber finally took Rebecca out in the bathroom at the club and saw only devotion in her tiny girlfriend's eyes, she missed a lot, I think. Even backing up before that, we saw how long Rebecca hesitated before she finally started licking like Amber wanted. This wasn't a case of Rebecca finally getting the message; it was a case of Rebecca giving up. The slave inside her has taken over. That's why Rebecca was so mindless when she was finally freed. Rebecca's mind is gone, replaced by the desire to please her "master."

And Amber thinks this is a good thing. She was fighting with herself, trying to tell herself that she's the giant so she can do what she wants, but if Rebecca had come out with a "What the fuck?!" I have no doubt that façade would have crumbled in a minute. Amber doesn't realize yet. It turns out that she's a better breaker than Annabel. She built trust with Rebecca, only to unwittingly betray that trust, not totally unlike the mind game Annabel played with Rachel and Tega- er Lisa, although obviously not the same thing either.

But what happens when Amber wants the Rebecca who talked her through her abuse issues? Or was so eager to hear about how much she improved as a soccer player? Or that she wanted so much to make feel cherished? Or take to prom? That Rebecca isn't there right now. Hell, who knows if/when she'll be back.

Amber has Rebecca's complete and total devotion, her unwavering obedience, and nothing else. And whenever Amber realizes that, it'll kill her.

Or I've completely misread the situation and this is a case of the old "accidentally get stuck up the butt but it all works out" scenario. I doubt it though. It seemed pretty clear to me that the Rebecca that came out of Amber's ass wasn't the same one that went in.

Oh, and Donnica being insufferable by trying to "spend time" with her daughter by controlling and micromanaging her was fitting and paired incredibly well with the therapist segment. Donnica is so obsessed with control that she's pushing the people she loves further and further away from her, and she can't even see it. Yet another reason why Amber sharing her mom's philosophy on tinies is most definitely a bad thing!

Speaking of the therapy session, that certainly was filled with interesting tidbits. If I read correctly, it looks like my previous thought of Donnica having faith in Trevor to succeed as office manager was actually wrong. She actually set him up to fail, expecting him to learn that he doesn't have a place in the world giants, which she assumed would make him "understand" that he needs to give himself to her completely. It seems she's actually frustrated that he was determined and found a way to do the job and do it exceedingly well, actually.

I was actually a little disappointed in Donnica after reading that. She should have expected more from Trevor after everything he's managed to do for her, and she should be grateful that he's made things at work so much better rather than be bitter at her plan not working. But that's pretty consistent with how a true believer would interpret the situation, so maybe I should have seen this coming.

Trevor calling her out for the registration stuff was hilarious to me. I loved seeing her on the defensive throughout that exchange. She kept that air of authority in her voice, but it did jack shit to deter Trevor! I love that about him! He was in the right, and he wasn't letting go. That "I had no idea my enslavement was an option" line hit hard. And it's not that I didn't believe Donnica when she said she'd never do that, but it does make you wonder what exactly it is she wants from him at this point. Is it just the symbolism of sharing his registration rather than her just having it herself? Is there anything to that other than symbolism?

But even though I (and I suspect she) don't know what Donnica wants from Trevor, I do understand why it's so important to her that she gets it. This whole thing is driven by her love for him. She's terrified that this "thing" inside him is going to pull him away from her, and she feels like him submitting to her is the only way to stop that from happening. Ironically, I think it's this push to own him completely that's starting to drive him away from her.

But Trevor went too far when he told Donnica she wasn't as smart as she thought she was. Holy shit! That was crazy! But I love that, even despite that, Donnica still stood up for Trevor against old Stella. She didn't just say to never threaten him again, she told the snake oil therapist to never talk down to him again. That's, like, her whole schtick! Donnica brought Trevor in there to convince him that he needed to submit to her because she's a giant, and she even let Stella talk down to him a bit in pursuit of that goal. But the fact that Donnica mentioned that in that epic telling off at the end of the segment shows that even that bothered Donnica. She's just desperate to save her relationship, despite the fact that it's her efforts that are putting the most stress on it right now.

I don't blame Donnica for not paying for that session, either. Any "therapy" that is framed to guide patients to a particular viewpoint isn't really therapy at all. I believe the word for that is pseudoscience. But man did Stella have a silver tongue. She did a solid job of making her points sound really good. Even Trevor had doubts for a second there. I can see why she's been successful in the past. But Trevor's will is too strong and his mind too sharp to fall for that shit. He sniffed it out and him calling her a quack was fucking awesome!

Oh, and Donnica orchestrating the therapy session to try and manipulate Trevor into seeing things her way is such a Donnica thing to do. I can't remember if Trevor called her out explicitly for that, but I'm pretty sure he figured it out, and that was part of why he was getting upset with her. But still, he said he thought things were good overall between them. The man knows who he's dating, that's for sure! And I kind of like that his tolerance for the shit she pulls has been recalibrated for her need to control everything! What? You tried to steal my registration, making me a de facto slave? Oh, you!

But even though I think Donnica's heart is in the right place with Trevor (and Amber, for that matter) the shitty way that she's managing those feeling is making me seriously consider jumping over to Team Annabel!

God, that opening segment was fucking perfect! I got so caught up in her emotions, her love for Trevor; that shit is contagious! Her being naked and unable to focus on her work was a great way to convey this, too!

And Goddamn if I Wanna Know What Love Is isn't the perfect song for that scene.

The way this scene balanced out Annabel's love for Trevor and her disdain for tinies in general was so satisfying to read. Her pretending the tinies were Trevor, smothering them with her love, only to come back to reality and realize that this was just some worthless tiny in her hand was so well done. The way she went from loving them to eating and crushing them were such brilliant quick transitions.

I also loved the backstory about Annabel and that song so much. It reminded her of a time she was loved, when she was with her father (I wonder whatever happened to him, if anything), but it was also a reminder of her inability to find that romantic love she wanted so much, that she could only experience in her vampire romance novels. That was such a powerful little piece of information.

The lunch scene was so beautiful! I love how super gentle Annabel is being, making good on her desire in the previous segment to hold him close and protect him the way he protected her before.

And these two have real chemistry together, too! Reading about them talking about books is something I feel like I could do all day! The look Annabel gave Trevor when he asked her if the violence and gore were really her thing was as hilarious as it was hot!

Annabel's extreme concern for Trevor in the rain was fucking adorable! I'm falling for this psychotic sweetheart, I swear!

And that moment when Trevor saw (read Annabel revealed) her love for him? Fucking gold! I figured a lot of his getting along with her was at least partially rooted in office politics and needing her on his side to do his job. A clever strategy on his part, but little did her realize how irresistible he is to broken yet powerful women. Him briefly being at a loss for how to navigate that was a great moment of tension.

But then Annabel bailed him out! And I was a little surprised when it was revealed near the end of the chapter that both that devoted look and that bailout were intentional on her part. She's very clever. I don't even know if I'd call either of those moments manipulative. She chose that moment to indirectly declare her love for him, and bailing him out was meant to calm him down and make him realize that she would never hurt him despite his "tiny size." It was a reassuring gesture, and I love that!

And hey! Shoutout to historical non-fiction! Whoop Whoop! Fucking amazing genre! Dark Roses actually sounds amazing! I actually tried to look it up online, but it looks like you're just teasing us with your fake books, ya jerk!

Trevor being so into the discussion after that, after learning about just how deeply in love with him Annabel is, was certainly interesting! It almost makes me wonder if those problems with Donnica are starting to really weigh on Trevor. Or maybe the magnetism of his natural connection with Annabel is just too strong to resist! I don't know for sure, but we may well have an honest to God love triangle on our hands here! Just like Annabel's books!

Tegan being broken was even more brutal than I suspected it might be. Granted, I was holding out hope that her defiant demeanor might hold up, I can see why she broke here.

It's easy to be defiant when you have nothing to lose. But Annabel didn't just give Tegan a friend or someone to share experiences with; she gave the tiny someone to invest herself in. Tegan suddenly had one singular connection in this world, and she put everything she had into that connection.

We saw this throughout the escape attempt. Tegan altered who she was to meet Rachel's needs. She wouldn't leave without Rachel. Tegan, who, up until now, had been seen strictly as a bundle of negative emotion and resistance, was soft and gentle as she guided Rachel past her fear and brought her back from the being broken.

So when Annabel crushed Rachel, she crushed everything that Tegan was. When Tegan called herself Lisa in an effort to save Rachel's life, she took the first step toward becoming Lisa. Because after Rachel was dead, what was the point of resisting? She was never going to be free. Rachel would never see her family again. And the one person that Tegan cared about was brutally murdered in front of her.

It was just easier to become Lisa, to give up hope and give in.

And the way you described Annabel's footsteps here was fucking stellar! I loved the force of those steps on that floor so much! Throwing around the tinies like that. Fucking hot!

But perhaps the most interesting part of the scene and the entire next segment is that Annabel appears to have broken herself! Like Lisa, she saw that she needed a true purpose, and she seems to have found it. Also like Lisa, accepting this has "freed" Annabel. Both of them are now freed from the burdens that were binding them before, giving in to a new purpose. For Lisa, that came from crushing defeat and the "death" of Tegan. For Annabel, that came from yet another realization from her, this time from watching Tegan become Lisa in real time.

Now Annabel has a real purpose in her life, and knowing her role has freed her, left her feeling almost literally lighter than air based on how she felt on that walk.

I was also intrigued by her reflecting on both Donnica and Trevor. Donnica is her goddess and Trevor is the man she loves. She'd never take Trevor from Donnica because he belongs to her. And Annabel belongs to them both. That's what she's meant for. That could mean a lot of things.

It was also reassuring to see Annabel confirm again that she could never hurt Trevor, pretty much dismissing the notion that he'll end up in her workshop anytime soon (at least not until this love of hers fades, I think). Not that the workshop would do much for Trevor anyway. He already does all the things that Annabel trains tinies to do better than pretty much any tiny out there, except maybe for Rebecca! And I don't think she could break his will no matter how hard she tried, honestly. Because if push came to shove, I think Trevor would rather die than become a mindless slave. Not that Annabel would want that for him anyway.

I'm not sure what to make about Annabel spreading the love like that, either. That kiss on Mia's cheek was kind of sweet. Weird as fuck, but sweet. As was telling Mia that she loved the her. Really interesting stuff, and I'm so curious to see where this is going.

Fucking fantastic chapter overall. Once again, you covered so much ground, and I'm really getting into these Annabel-heavy chapters!

Author's Response:

 Alright Mr. Sunday morning, let's get this started!

Ambers/Rebecca

Thanks for the comment on the balance of SMUT and character development… I know you’re not primarily an ass guy, so I was definitely curious about how you’d take it. Writing it felt a little iffy at times, just because the heavy sexual undertones could easily bury the nuance, but it was a necessary scene. It had to convey the loss of control for both girls and hint at what those ramifications might mean for their relationship.

Will there be clear-cut consequences from this, hard to say but one thing that’s for sure is that it’s undeniably a major shift for them. The master/slave dynamic flirt with the line… now the question is, will they acknowledge it? Does either of them actually think it crossed the line, or was it just blurred? Did it move the line? Those are questions that will demand answers soon.

The biggest question of all, of course: Do either of them actually want this? Or does one of them want it more than the other? And you make an excellent point; what happens when Amber wants the fiery Rebecca, the one who pulled her from the brink? Is she still in there, or have they both changed into something else entirely?

It’s also fascinating to look at Amber as a character… her development has been incredible, but at her core, who is she really? People can grow, they can evolve, but some things stay the same, some foundational personality traits don’t just vanish, they linger, sometimes suppressed under the blinders of love. So, is this just that? Or is it something way more complicated?

In my opinion, relationships always strive toward some kind of homeostasis, and the farther apart two people start, the more chaotic that process becomes. And Amber and Rebecca? Oh man, they started veeeeeery far apart. Hurdling into one another at blinding speed, they careened into each other and that sent them flying apart only to be pulled back again, and now they crash again and again until they are either one, or they are undone.

 

Donnica/Trevor

Are you entirely sure you were wrong in assuming Donnica was happy about Trevor’s progress as office manager? Because I don’t think it’s that simple. Donnica is way more fragile than she likes to believe. I do think that when she put Trevor in that position, she genuinely believed in him, wanted him to succeed (and, of course, wanted him closer to her). But at the same time, I also think a part of her wanted him to fail… just enough to make him realize how much he needed her.

I know that sounds contradictory, but honestly, humans are walking contradictions. We don’t always have to believe just one thing at a time. Donnica can be proud and happy for Trevor’s success one moment and then, in the next, quietly hope he stumbles just a bit, enough to keep him tethered to her. It all comes down to this simple truth: we are all, whether we like it or not, slaves to our emotions. And Donnica, self-proclaimed goddess that she is, is absolutely no exception to that.

I think this same push-and-pull applies to what exactly she wants out of her relationship with Trevor. One thing we know is that she wants him; fully and completely. But the specifics of what that means. That shifts with her fears and desires, moment to moment.

Also, I love that you caught Trevor going too far with that jab about Donnica not being as smart as she thinks she is. That’s exactly what I was going for, but I wasn’t sure if people would pick up on it. Since most of us naturally self-insert with the tiny protagonist, it would have been easy to just see Trevor as completely in the right during that scene, since he was standing up for his autonomy. But he let his anger boil over, and you could tell it got to Donnica. (Or at least, I hope that came through with the way her tone shifted after that.) He made great points, stood his ground, but he also hit a nerve, and for someone like Donnica? That’s not nothing.

And man, I really appreciate the comments on Stella’s silver tongue. That scene was hard to write… I actually rewrote it twice and even considered scrapping it entirely because of the whole pseudoscience bit was hard to convey in dialog. I wasn’t sure if it would actually be engaging on the page. But I think most people enjoyed it in the end, and I’m so glad I kept it in. Still, it was definitely the scene I was the most worried about leading up to release. From what I picked up in your review, though, it worked for you, which is a huge relief!

And yes… Trevor definitely knows exactly who he’s dating. And let’s be honest, he kind of loves it. But the real question is… does he have a breaking point? Guess we’ll find out.

 

Annabel

Team Annabel, huh? That’s an interesting way to put it…

That opening scene was such a blast to write, and funny enough, it actually came from the ending scene of the chapter. I had this vision of Annabel floating through the city, her life’s purpose revealing itself as she drifted through a sea of rose petals, all while listening to I Want to Know What Love Is. I got so lost in the sound and imagery of it, that I had to put it in the story… and from there, I worked backward to that first scene.

Speaking of Annabel, I guess I should tell you where the idea for her arc came from. It all started with a simple question:

What if I took the most cruel character imaginable; a breaker, someone who tortures and enslaves tiny people… and gave her the most beautiful revelation imaginable? Not just falling in love but also finding purpose. But the twist? That revelation would not change her views on tiny people.

What would that character look like? What events would have to unfold for her to function properly on the page? Did I nail it? Miss the mark? Come close? Who knows! But I definitely had a hell of a time writing it, that’s for sure.

I really like that you singled out the tenderness of the park scene. A lot of people have told me how worried they are for Trevor (which, hey, maybe some of that concern is warranted…), but there were real moments of connection there. The way she protected him the same way she thought he had protected her. How she shielded him from the rain… writing that dynamic was so much fun.

I really enjoy blurring the lines between love and manipulation. Annabel frightens Trevor with her love, yet she reveals she’s read Dark Roses to calm him. It’s both her sharp, calculated mind at work and a genuine expression of love and care. It’s beauty and the beast, a deep dive into the inner workings of her character. That’s why I love writing her. She’s all contradictions, all layers.

Also, I love that you pointed out that reaction Annabel had when Trevor brought up the fact that Eternal Hunger was violent and gory, like I was thinking about expanding the passage to make it stick out more (I really wanted people to notice it) but when I did it just didn’t feel right. It seemed to work better as a shorter, subtle passage, but I was worried it would fall to the wayside. So, to have you point it out was awesome… and it was sexy, wasn’t it?

And dude, I actually did start researching Victorian mourning ceremonies looking for a book I could use for this arc, but at some point, I was like, "What am I doing? Just make some book up and get on with the writing!"  Still, it does sound like an interesting read. Who knows, if this erotica gig doesn’t work out, maybe I’ll pivot into historical non-fiction...

Oh, and you think you’re falling for that psychotic sweetheart? Welcome to the club.

 

A moment of silence for poor little Lisa… errrr, I mean Tegan.

You absolutely nailed her connection with Rachel. That segment was hard to write because I had one scene to make that connection land, and you picked up on exactly what I was going for. She’s full of negativity and resentment (and, honestly, who can blame her?), but the way she softened with Rachel, even when she was getting frustrated with her reluctance… it was almost like family.

Like a sister.

And that’s exactly what Annabel knew would happen when she picked through that box of expendables, looking for a female that resembled Tegan, knowing she had three sisters in real life. Annabel was the master Breaker in that moment.

And wow… your insight on Annabel being ‘broken’ too really hit me. I didn’t write it with that in mind, but you’re right… when Tegan became Lisa, Annabel had her own moment of clarity. It was the moment her love and purpose became one. The breaker becomes the broken. Err… okay, maybe that wording isn’t quite right, but you get what I mean :D

Also, did you like that little kiss she gave Mia? Because I fucking loved writing it. Annabel is such a true believer in everything she does. She’s so unhinged in the craziest way.

I’m glad you enjoyed these Annabel-centric chapters. Now that she’s been thoroughly established, she won’t be dominating quite as much of the story, but as a main, she’ll still be a regular presence moving forward.

 

I fucking LOVED this review from you this week.

Although… please don’t make Sunday morning a regular thing lol

 

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2025 3:06 PM Title: PART 22

Oof, Trevor is getting into a dangerous place. There’s no telling what Annabel will do once she gets her hearth broken!

Also, I didn’t see it coming that Donnica would stand up to the therapist. On the other hand, Trevor is on a roll it seems so maybe it’s not that surprising.

I hope that Donnica will accept Rebecca soon. Poor amber.

thank you for writing!

Author's Response:

Annabel can be pretty volatile, can’t she? Yet somehow, at other times manages to stay in control. But heartbreak… if that ever happens, could be catastrophic.

Trevor’s been on fire ever since he got back from vacation, makes you wonder how long that winning streak can last…

And as for Donnica accepting Rebecca if she ever finds out about her? Well, that’s the million-dollar question, isn’t it?

Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2025 4:25 AM Title: PART 22

Ok so Annebel is very interesting. First off, you introduce her by breaking in a tiny. She is very methodical and wonderfully brutal about her night job. There is no weakness or hesitation. She is strong and confident. She has no rival in breaking tinys. Even others pail in comparison, or at least they do from the few things told about breakers. The fact that Lisa (Tegan) had multiple breakers before Tegan shows that Annebel has a thorough understanding of psychology. She gets humans in away alot of people dont. Which means she understands that tinies are human.

Maybe its endemic of this genre. But she probably sees poor people and homeless and the week in general the same way or very close to how see sees tinys. After all one of the best ways to get the measure of some one was give them power. So your very first inroduction of Annabel was in the very throws of her power. She was cold, ruthless and wtithout mercy or compassion. She killed a tiny just because he was satisfactory but not excellent. That is cold, and in my opinion waste full. 

It is the one thing that always frustrates me about this genre. JUst cause you are small doesnt mean you arent a threat. There are ways even some one only a few incshes in size could hurt or kill a big. But you dont come to this genre for a small turning the tables on the big. This is power escapism and one of the absolute best repesenations of bondage.

Sorry for the segue.  

So next we see her in office. She is trying to be that strong and confident girl we saw when she was in her element. But here she comes across as small and petty. Also here she is evidently very young. Hell she acted younger than her 24 years. She acted like a teenager who had been told no. So when she is around her peers she presents herself as well pathetic. Then there was the way she handled george. Trevor was right. Most men later in life arent interested in games any more. Honestly I wish he had been right about george.  ANyway she played games. She is still acting like a child.

 Then she has fallen for Trevor. At first that should be completely contradictory to her nature. She sees teh week as beneath her. Some thing for her to rule. And do with as she pleases. Well Trevor hasnt acted like a broken tiny. He fights back.But not in away that she is familiar with. He is patient, kind, and yet authoritive. He also defends her, which is what triggered her falling for him. He also saved her career. She was heading to a firing eventually, if she didnt change her ways. She was being so petty. She was causing the businees to fail. And Donnica would have eventually realized that. Then she was complient and week to those office ladies. 

She is a classic bully. She loves and revels in the power over tinies. Is week and sallow to those more powerful than her. I called her a mirror of Donnica in an earlier review. But after this and thinking about it. No, she is not a mirror. Donnica was strong before her peers. When she put that one lady in her place. Donnica brooks no equal, except perhaps Trevor. Donniica is what Annebel strives to be. 

It will be interesting to see where she goes from here. I am really liking her character. Also, I love her job. Though, She might one to get in touch with Amber. Amber seems to have a good handle on breaking reluctant tinies. Without the murder. It might just take longer.

Author's Response:

Damn bro!

That analysis was worth the wait. Excellent breakdown of the character.

So, I’ll give you a bit of background on my line of thinking when I created Annabel—or rather, when I decided to make her a main character. It all started with a single thought: What if I took one of the cruellest characters in the story — a breaker, someone who exists to torture and enslave tiny people — and gave her one of the most profound and beautiful revelations a person can have… but this revelation didn’t change her view on tinies at all? I wanted to explore what that would look like on the page. What kind of person would that even be?

She had to be completely dominant over little people, but at the same time, vulnerable among her fellow giants—because that vulnerability was necessary to trigger her revelation. That line of thinking is what set her character into motion… her role as a breaker, her office struggles, and her history of being bullied as a teenager.

Did it all come together the way I envisioned? Maybe. The feedback has been very positive, and I had a ton of fun putting it together, but either way, I love the character that’s come out of this. And I can’t wait to show you where I’m taking her.

Now, onto a couple of things in your review:

"So your very first introduction of Annabel was in the very throws of her power. She was cold, ruthless and without mercy or compassion. She killed a tiny just because he was satisfactory but not excellent. That is cold, and in my opinion wasteful."

I partly agree—yeah, you could definitely argue it was wasteful. But I also think there’s more to it. Annabel herself acknowledges in the story that she could have sold the slave separately but crushing him in front of the female was a key part of her breaking method… a final test to see if the female could hold her composure.

Annabel is a perfectionist, and as you pointed out, she’s damn good at what she does. Seeing that the female didn’t break after that moment confirmed to Annabel that she was in perfect condition. Sure, she could have sold the male after the fact, but to her, this was about perfection, and the test mattered more than the profit. Was that the right call? Did the pros outweigh the cons of selling/crushing? I guess that’s up to the reader to decide.

"She is a classic bully. She loves and revels in the power over tinies. Is weak and sallow to those more powerful than her. I called her a mirror of Donnica in an earlier review. But after this and thinking about it. No, she is not a mirror. Donnica was strong before her peers. When she put that one lady in her place. Donnica brooks no equal, except perhaps Trevor. Donnica is what Annabel strives to be."

I love this take—that Annabel strives to be Donnica. Spot on. She adores her, idolizes her. Makes you wonder what lengths she’ll go to in order to please her…

 

Thanks for this! I’ve made it no secret in these responses that I love writing Annabel, so getting a deep breakdown like this was a treat to read. And that last comment about her pairing with Amber? Very interesting. But I wonder… is there another character in the story she could end up teaming up with? :O

This was an awesome review man, same as your breakdown of Trevor/Rebecca, please feel free to send along any more thoughts you have on the story… they’re fantastic!

Reviewer: GiantessLover122 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2025 12:57 AM Title: PART 22

Interesting chapter, really enjoyed it as always. For me, the most difficult part was reading that therapist scene - just imagining the discomfort that Trevor must have felt having every single one of his points shut down, ganged up on by the two women there, it all seems a bit much. It also shows how Donnica's desire for control is almost overwhelming, almost making it seem like her concern for Trevor's well-being is just a mask in front of her wanting to just own him. 

In the scene with Annabel and Trevor, I was not expecting Trevor to catch on this quickly about Annabel's infatuation - or "love" as he calls it - with him. You did a really great job at showing Trevor's happiness when he realized Annabel also enjoyed the historical non-fiction (yuck - sorry.). Although I doubt Trevor would ever cheat on Donnica, who he sees as his goddess as much as he may hate to admit it, I wonder if there is a budding emotional affair, or maybe Donnica might not like how close he gets with Annabel. 

Author's Response:

I agree, Donnica’s desire to control Trevor definitely borders on possessiveness. But where does it come from? He already admitted back in Chapter 18 that he has a habit of submitting to dominant women, only to eventually break away from them. Could that be what’s happening here? Is Donnica’s anxiety based on something real, or is it just her innate need to control everything around her?

“In the scene with Annabel and Trevor, I was not expecting Trevor to catch on this quickly about Annabel's infatuation - or "love" as he calls it - with him. You did a really great job at showing Trevor's happiness when he realized Annabel also enjoyed the historical non-fiction”

Thank you for saying that! I felt like that moment worked as a great pole reversal, shifting Trevor’s emotional state from negative to positive while also setting up intrigue for how he might handle Annabel’s feelings moving forward. Will he cheat on Donnica? Would Annabel even allow that? Who’s to say...

Also, excuse me?? Yuck???? Historical non-fiction is clearly the best genre :P

Thanks for the comment, man!

Reviewer: breastclimber Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18 2025 4:27 AM Title: PART 22

Good job!

Author's Response:

Good review!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18 2025 12:11 AM Title: PART 22

So, first off, how do you keep putting out quality chapters like this. This was really good. Very thought provoking. Also I knew it w2as a trap, but damn it, I was rooting for Tegan and Rachel (pours out a drink for the dead). to get away from Annabel.

So Annabel has gone almost full coocoo for Trevor. Like girl please remember who her partner/owner is. Donnica would destroy you, not that you don't deserve it. Watching this from her pov has really shown her, to me at least, that that girl is not right in the head. Or she is way to high on the power trip. Like she needs to come back down to earth.

That "therapist" needs to lose her credentials. Now. That is not a person that is interested in helping a size mix couple find a proper balance. Even if she was a legitimate profession, she is only damaging her clients. It is know way healthy for a relationship to have such power disparity. Good for Trevor to really stand up for himself. You know, if he was full size, I have a sneaking suspicion that he would dominate Donnica. I really think he would rule her like she wants to rule him. Just a guess though. I mean Trevor may be small in stature, but damn if his character doesn't rule all.

     I am very glad he realized Annabel's feelings for him. I am curious to see  what he does to steer that minefield. I having a feeling that Annabel want take no for an answer. 

Now on to my favorite dysfunctional couple. Amber and Rebecca. First off I loved the ass scene. I am an ass guy, so that was wonderfully written. Now, there was one minor hiccup for me, but really its still enjoyable. That hiccup was the fact I cant decide if what happened constitutes as betrayal of trust. I need to see Rebecca's thoughts on the matter before I judge one way or the other. Both girls let there lust drive each other. In my opinion neither were very wise. Amber is almost excusable, she is a teen, but Rebecca should have known better. When your mother is rushed, you don't take time to get off. Sorry. You just dont. 

Rebecca has really stumped me. Just how consumed by Amber is she now. I love that she loves Amber and wants her happy, but what about Rebecca's happiness. I know what loves Rebecca but she also almost always has that in the context of Amber being happy, If Amber is happy than so is Rebecca, if amber no happy, that Rebecca no happy. Kind of thing.  I feel those two really need to talk. Like the night that Rebecca and Amber genuinely fell for each other. Rather that will happen or not, remains to be scene. But honestly Rebecca, learn to love ass, it wont disappoint you. Ass is awesome.  Ass is life. 

So now for Tegan, if her part in this story is done, then I hope for the best for her, and her owner will be a decent person, aside from being an owner. I really hope her part isnt done  thought, like I really want to get to know her, and see her struggle, but I do believe she may be done. But also really mean to tell us that Rachel wanted to get home to her mom, missed her mom, only to kill her. That was mean.

So another awesome chapter. This story has become a high light of my week. I am now always looking forwaryd to monday (why is monday so far away). Also helps monday is my day off, one of the reasons I can read it so fast and review right after you drop it. Incase you were wondering. So catch you next time, also still need to do a proper r thoiguths on Annebel. 

Really, atleast until Breaking in a pet has updated, this story is now my favorite ongoing story on this site.

Author's Response:

How do I keep putting out chapters like this? With lots and lots of time and effort lol I basically spend all my free time doing this. And I don’t mean for that to come off like it’s a burden… I really enjoy doing this and I feel writing is a great use of my time compared to other things I could be engaged with.

And thank you for the kind words, I’m honored you consider my story among your favorites. I love your early reviews, and I always refresh the page looking out for them after I post.

“So Annabel has gone almost full coocoo for Trevor. (…) Watching this from her pov has really shown her, to me at least, that that girl is not right in the head. Or she is way to high on the power trip. Like she needs to come back down to earth.”

I know! Her lunacy is unhinged she’s my favorite character to write now. She’s all over the place. She’s falling in love, she’s breaking tinies, she’s having earth shattering revelations, and craziest of all she’s reading historical non-fiction. I wonder what she’ll get up to next…

“Good for Trevor to really stand up for himself. You know, if he was full size, I have a sneaking suspicion that he would dominate Donnica. I really think he would rule her like she wants to rule him. Just a guess though. I mean Trevor may be small in stature, but damn if his character doesn't rule all.”

That’s an interesting take and one that’s probably true, although he is a total sub who loves dominant woman but I get your point, he is still wildly untameable. Its fun to write the character succeed in a world that is so easily dominated by people much lager than him. Hope he doesn’t overstep his boundaries though…

“Now on to my favorite dysfunctional couple. Amber and Rebecca.”

 I agree Rebecca is getting consumed by Amber, very consumed.  What’s going on there I wonder? You’re right though, we need a deeper dive into Rebecca, maybe that’s coming up soon…

“So now for Tegan, if her part in this story is done, then I hope for the best for her, and her owner will be a decent person, aside from being an owner. I really hope her part isnt done  thought, like I really want to get to know her, and see her struggle, but I do believe she may be done. But also really mean to tell us that Rachel wanted to get home to her mom, missed her mom, only to kill her. That was mean.”

OMG dude that was mean, wasn’t it??? Even writing that scene felt sooooo brutal for me. I was like “man, I am ruthless.” We shall see what happens with little Lisa… errrr I mean Tegan. Though she seems quite broken at the moment.

“So catch you next time, also still need to do a proper r thoiguths on Annebel.” 

Yes man I look forward to the Annabel review, like I said she’s a particular favorite of mine. What did you think of that last segment with her, where she envisioned herself floating through the city as life’s purpose was laid out before her? That was maybe my favorite scene to write in the chapter because it was so absurd.

Thanks for the early comments as always man! I really appreciate them and I’m super happy Monday is your day off :)