[Report This]Date: December 23 2024 2:07 AM Title: A Gentle Coda - Part 1 - Morning Routine
Dude, I thought you were writing a quick epilogue, not a whole ass sequel! Not that I am complaining. Far fucking from it. I’ve only finished the first chapter, and I’m already in love!
This is so wholesome and cute! After how harrowing, and emotional, and unbelievably sexy the main story is, this gentle coda is turning this already excellent tale into a well-rounded masterpiece and easily among my favorite stories on this site. The amount of love and attention that clearly went into just the first chapter is so evident in every line. There is so much clever word play (Momo and Anzu keeping Beth “abreast” of her rep count while sitting between her breasts for example), and even more sexy as all getout scenarios crammed into this simple morning routine.
I love Beth becoming a boarding house for these lost little ladies, and it’s a joy seeing how happy they all are with their new lives. I’m shocked all of them survived, even Pushpa who got ate up first, but fuck it, I’m never going to complain about a happy ending. The twins are the standout for me this chapter; they had the most screen time save for maybe Bella or Dulce, and they’re just so adorable in their infatuation with Beth and her breasts. All the sweaty details of Beth’s morning workout were delightfully delectable, and the breakfast sequence was a treat in itself (I particularly love the five girls cramming into Beth’s coffee cup. God, what I’d give to either be there to see that or be there to join them lol).
Sumayya sounds like she’s having the rough of it and understandably so. She helps to remind us of how brutal this world and story still are despite the wholesomeness of this coda. I hope things can work out for her and Nashwa.
I love how playful Beth is with all them and how much they reciprocate that, teasing about eating them (Alma and Dulce especially), and I loved the little detail that she still actually eats them on occasion with their approval and all the Plan-V they could ever need.
As for Cass … Listen, man, you ain’t fucking fooling me. I know she ain’t dead. I see through all your tricks. I have no idea where she is or what she’s doing, but I won’t believe for a second she ain’t alive and well. I mean, Pushpa for godsake’s survived and she was the first one down. Unless Adeya put Cass in a chokehold and broke her neck, I don’t see how she could have been the only death inside Beth’s gut. So yeah, I’ll play your games and wait with bated breath for her to return, and until then I’ll just enjoy the Japanese beauties playing with Beth’s own buxom beauties.
But seriously, excellent work. I can’t wait to read further. I know you lament how overboard you go writing “short stories” and “brief epilogues,” but the results are some truly incredible stories with so much thought and effort poured into them, and I’ll gladly take that every single time.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much Terry! After the emotional rollercoaster of writing that potentially devestating open ending, I felt like I needed sweet and wholesome to salve my aching heart. I did consider giving Pushpa mostly-healed chemocal burns, Isabella some breathing issues due to both repeated oxygen deprivation and the caustic atmosphere of the stomach, and a couple others reduced motion in a joint or two that got a bit tweaked or crushed, but I decided I wanted this to be really sweet and wholesome, the ostensibly best potential outcome.
That's not to say there are no lingering traumas, but rather that they're focused differently for this ending. Part 5 especially.
And as for Cass, well, I guess you'll just have to read and find out! XD