[Report This]Date: November 03 2024 2:44 AM Title: Chapter 6 - The Final... Four?
I mean no hyperbole when I say this is one of the hottest stories I’ve ever read. I just finished chapter 6, and I should have the finale and epilogue finished within the next few hours, but I just wanted to leave some thoughts while they’re still relevant in my head.
What makes this story so remarkable to me is how layered all the interactions are. Gentle and cruel, willing and unwilling, degrading and respectful, vore and, well, more vore, this entire narrative weaves together disparate elements of this fetish so beautifully well that it enhances what is already extremely hot smut to greater heights.
Best example is Beth’s time with Cassia towards the end of chapter 5. All these tiny women have fucked up circumstances that led them here, all of which show how awful this world treats its smaller denizens (and as someone who spends a lot time writing mixed size utopias, the worldbuilding in these backstories are especially intense), but Cassia’s hit especially hard for me in how it involves a tiny reclusive society completely ruined by the introduction of bigs into it. It enforces an idea that the two sizes cannot mix well without one of them, the obvious one, coming out on top and oppressing the other.
The fact Cassia enjoys being treated worse than dirt only makes it more tragic. I’m not sure if this was your intent with her character, but it comes off as a defense mechanism, a way of rationalizing the immense cruelty of the world she lives in, to enjoy the abuse she’s put through because it’s been beat into her that this is the natural order, the way things are meant to be, and this how she copes with that.
And Beth recognizes that and takes full advantage for both of their pleasures. In case it needs to be said again and again, Beth is still absolutely incredible. The way she respects and listens to each tiny while simultaneously plotting how best to toy with them is such a delectable blend of traits I’d expect from a woman who both loves a tiny to death and derives intense gratification from dominating and devouring them. The fact she was able to deduce Cassia’s masochism already is a testament to her understanding of little people, and then uses that deduction to fully dominate Cassia in body and mind shows how dangerously skilled she is at wielding it.
Beth is a lot more gratifying as a giantess than most of your run of the mill sadists because of this. It’s like she’s using all the tricks from the gentle giantess’ playbook for evil, and that makes her actions so much more compelling than the “step on someone and call them a bug” routine. The juxtaposition of her caring and monstrous demeanor, using Cassia as a cum rag in an exemplary showcase of Macro/micro CNC, made that scene so goddamn hot, enough to standout in a story packed to the brim with ungodly pleasurable prose. Seriously, Beth’s dialogue there was fucking perfect, this review can’t even do it justice.
And speaking of perfect fucking dialogue, Amaterasu’s monologue in chapter six is hotter than most actual sex scenes. As a gentle romantic, I vehemently disagree with her thesis statement, but even my soft heart can’t deny her delivery was unequivocally provocative. I’m very excited to see the places she goes in the finale.
Narratively speaking, the tiny coalition’s failure to bring Beth to orgasm comes at no surprise. I chalk that up to Beth’s feelings of fear and guilt clouding her judgment more than anything (that and Cass really didn’t seem to be trying too hard lol). Amaterasu’s monologue was so convincing (and really, I cannot blame Beth here) that I think it got in her head and turned the bet into a self-fulfilling prophecy. All her observations during and afterward came across to me as confirmation bias. And even if Beth’s pleasure comes from what she can do to Cass rather than what Cass can do to her, then so what? Not all couples express their love in the same way, and if that’s how they enjoy each other physically, then who’s to tell them otherwise? And that’s not even factoring in the fact there’s more to a relationship than just sex, and that tinies, while only questionably people (grumbles in tiny rights activist), have the emotional capacity to be a supportive partner. Dammit, Amaterasu! Why must you make being wrong look so sexy?!
Speaking of activism, Beth considering turning over a new leaf and being more supportive of the tinies’ plight after eating a dozen of them is such a shitty thing for her to think lol. I’m picturing her support amounting to a couple tweets and a signature on an online petition. Y’know, some real atonement for all the extra fat in her tits. lol
I have no clue where the story’s headed. Amaterasu wanting to snack on Cass is so obvious from the description let alone the actual content that it’s probably a red herring, but I’m still uncertain if the little lady is going to make it out of this alive. Val’s been eyeing that wristband, and there’s the knocking about and shouting inside Beth’s pussy. I was convinced at one point that she was going to steal the wristband thinking it’d make her immune to consumption, only for Ammy to mistake her for Cass and eat her, but I’m now thinking the goddess is probably more perceptive than that. Even is she thinks nothing of tinies, she’s probably still able to distinguish between them. So yeah, I don’t know what’s going to happen, and that’s really exciting. It’s rare, in size smut and in general fiction, to have no sense of whether the hero’s going to survive or not, and I am thrilled to find out what all’s left you have in store for this wild ride.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much Terry! It's incredibly affirming to hear this from an author as talented as yourself. Cassia's story is one that I went into with a simple premise, and the more I thought about it, the more the situation informed the character, and then the new details I had for the character brought me to adjust the situation, until it fit a spot that I thought hit the right amounts of Overprotective Bigs, Controlling Government Propaganda, Corrupt but Well-Intentioned Religious Organization, and sexy, slutty tinies who know they're oppressed, but will make the best of the situation.
I really enjoyed writing Beth. She is protagonist, antagonist, villain, and lone beacon of hope in this dark setting. She is manipulative, but also able to be manipulated. She is willing to take risks, yet still rails against the consequences of her own actions. She wants everyone to have a good time, and she's willing to make it happen, but she's making the effort because it enhances her own pleasure. She's just been a blast to write across the board.
I'm glad Amaterasu's dialogue was so evocative. I've had some DM discussions about her arguments, and how they're so attractive on the surface, but everything she does is false and misleading. She gives the tinies a harsh and arbitrary time limit, she has poisoned Beth's mind with worry and confusion to take her out of the mood, and she makes Beth self-conscious about how she derives pleasure from interacting with tinies. Then, after a short, five minute window when the tinies are starting to get Beth going, Amaterasu uses a pleasure aid AND THE BODIES OF HER COMPETITION to jump in on the coattails of their little efforts, and just dominate the contest. She made use of several artificial advantages denied to the tinies, after poisoning their efforts three ways from Sunday. it's an almost entirely empty argument, but by tying it to fresh experiences and sexual release the argument gains so much emotional weight that it cannot help but persist.
I'm glad at this point I had you still guessing. I went into this story with a very clear goal, but I really didn't want the outcome to be telegraphed until the final moments. This is a big relief to hear.
Thanks again for taking the time to read my writing. I really appreciate the feedback you've given me. I see another review came in after this one, and it just warms my heart that these silly little words I typed onto the screen connected enough with my audience that they felt the need to respond in some way. That someone of your caliber is willing to offer so much insight is a true honor.
[Report This]Date: October 23 2024 6:17 AM Title: Chapter 6 - The Final... Four?
I realized I forgot a couple of things, so here, have more stars! This story is definitely worth more than five anyway.
But yeah, there were two things I forgot in my first review for this last chapter.
First, Cassidy's words when she told Beth that she didn't want to hold her back in life made me a little emotional. That was a sadly touching moment, and it's interesting to wonder if Cassidy is right to think this way. It's clear at this point that Beth's whole world would shatter without Cassidy. So while I get what Cass is saying here (she's kind of backing up Amaterasu's point) the way Beth behaves in this chapter strongly implies, at least to me, that Cassidy is wrong and that Beth's relationship with her is part of what makes the normal's life so great! Again, this defeatist attitude by the tinies is as heartbreaking for me as it is for Beth.
Of course, I also have to wonder between that and Beth having something she needs to talk to Cass about after the dinner if these things are just setting up a more emotional death for Beth's tiny girl. You could also be "faking the fake" (don't make me break out the iocane powder again!) and using these powerful tropes to trick us into thinking that Cassidy is doomed. I really don't know at this point. You've done a masterful job of keeping us guessing about her fate.
Second, while I noted how much I loved Dulce's scene at the end, I forgot to point out how much I appreciated the little stutter you gave her there. She's brave and she wants to go out on her own terms, but that doesn't mean she isn't scared. It was a small thing that wasn't even noted in the narrative, but I love little touches like that, and I felt like that alone was worth coming back and leaving a second review for the chapter (let alone the other thing I forgot).
Oh, also, I lied.
Third (and last for real), God damn was it cute as fuck when the final five questioned the vorgy before making their decision. That shit made my heart melt. It also bummed me out, knowing the (likely; I'm still holding out a small sliver of hope that they'll be saved somehow, even though I know they probably won't be) horrible fate that awaits those inside Beth's stomach once those antacids wear off.
These thoughts just hit me randomly, so I hope you don't mind me dropping these extra thoughts off with no rhyme or reason days later.
Author's Response:
There's even more! You are a saint, and a scolar! Thank you for all the feedback!
Self-doubt is something we all deal with. My personal brands tend to be imposter syndrome and a focus on every past failure I can remember, particularly the ones no one else can remember. How could a tiny in this world not feel self-doubt? I wanted to show that Cassidy very much feels thouse doubts too, and it is despite those doubts that manages to be such an incredibly possitive and assertive person. I absolutely love her character, and I think she's my second favorite OC, behind Titania, but just barely. I really don't want her to die, but in some ways the story (and the meddlesome characters there-in) writes itself.
I'm glad Dulce's stutter came through. In my li.ited experience, no one wants to die. Death is only pursued when it is percieved as a less-awful alternative to existence. Dulce didn't want to be eaten, but she was not leaving that room outside of a stomach, and she was offered a chance to go out on her terms. She was able to take her skills and experience, and cook up a culinary farewell that would leave an impression (and savory aftertaste) with the people with whom she spent those final moments.
I'm SO so glad that scene played well. I didn't want to overplay the tinies on the outside questioning the dearly devoured, but from a conceptual level, if not in prosaic execution, that scene was a chef's kiss moment for me.
[Report This]Date: October 22 2024 1:40 AM Title: Chapter 6 - The Final... Four?
Yeah, after reading chapter one, my initial thought was that the VIP band would be a red herring and that it was the contractor's agreement that would pose the real threat. Although, now that we're here, I'm not 100 percent sure the role of the band is quite done yet ...
So after saying that, it should come as no surprise that I was kind of expecting the sun goddess herself to be the villain of this story. Still, I wasn't necessarily prepared for her to be quite so vile (which is a compliment for a villain, by the way). Her self-centered view on tinies is awful, although I suspect that a lot of normals at least somewhat share her opinion on them. Her monologue laid it all on the table in an elegantly revolting manner befitting an evil goddess such as Amaterasu.
I love Beth's extreme panic at the revelation that Cass is very much in play with Amaterasu's arrangement. Not that I had any doubts about how Beth felt about her tiny girlfriend before, but the early part of the chapter really drilled down just how important Cassidy is to her, which makes for quite the stark contrast with Amaterasu's "they just exist to help us get off and/or taste good" mentality. I do think Beth is deluding herself a bit in thinking that she can convince the sun goddess that one of the other tinies is more appealing, given how determined Amaterasu is to make Beth see that her relationship with Cass isn't really a relationship at all.
That does make me wonder what Amaterasu's motivation is here. Is she simply anti-tiny and feels annoyed to find a "bleeding heart" who can't accept the truth? Is she trying to make Beth see that she's wasting her time with Cass and help her find real sexual bliss? Is she trying to become Beth's girlfriend (or at least occasional lover)? Or is she just fucked up and enjoys watching Beth squirm?
Who knows, maybe this is just what she does for fun. But I still haven't quite figured her out yet.
I'm not sure why Beth allowed Amaterasu to not only decide that they would play the five-minute game but allowed her to set the terms for it as well. It seems to me that Beth is needlessly putting Cassidy's life at risk here and is fortunate that the other four didn't decide to push one of the ones that paid for their demise to top of the menu. Or does Cassidy's VIP band still protect her here. If that's the case, this would make a lot more sense to me, especially since Beth seemed so surprised that the tinies couldn't get her off on their own.
I thought Beth's thoughts on the tinies' self-confidence was really profound. It made me wonder if they lost the game because of their size or if it was really just a self-fulfilling prophecy. Tinies can't have that much confidence in this world, certainly not when dealing with normals. Did the tinies even give it their all? Val probably did, but I feel Cassidy wasn't too worried about winning and just wanted to have a good time. I kind felt that way about the other three too, but to a lesser extent. So I'm wondering if they might have proven Amaterasu wrong had they truly given it their all and believed that they could do it.
The guilt Beth felt when she realized that it was dominating Cassidy rather than Cass herself that had gotten her off all that time was a nice touch to throw in there, too. She truly loves her tiny girlfriend, and she's horrified to learn that making Cass seem less gets her going. It's was a bit sad to read, but I'm curious where this is going when mixed in with everything else going on in the chapter.
Back to the game, though, damn did you sell what Amaterasu was preaching! That shit was intense! What a hot scene! And Beth being so enraptured that she momentarily forgot about Cassidy, that she didn't even realize that she could feel this way before, briefly made me think the sun goddess had won. But the way Beth immediately worried about Cassidy after she came back to her senses, going so far as to push away the woman she had just asked for a second round, shows that Amaterasu lost. Yeah, she was right about the tinies not being able to get her off, but Beth seems more in love with Cass than ever despite that. And everything Beth thought after that leads the reader to believe that she actually thinks more of tinies now than she did before.
And Beth wanting to join a tinies rights organization may seem hypocritical given her actions so far during the evening, but I really liked that she's moving in that direction. Even in eating the girls, she's learning their stories and showing them a level of respect that most bigs wouldn't even consider. So I could see her coming out of this dinner with a real drive to help tinies in the future.
I'm loving that Beth is starting to waver, and the way in which this feeling builds throughout the chapter is masterfully done. At first, the gravity of Cassidy's situation hits Beth hard and makes see the worth of the lives she's taking in a whole new light. Rather than feel guilt, however, she wants to keep eating the tinies but has a deeper respect for her meal (she was already pretty respectful for a big even before this revelation). But later on, we see her questioning what she's doing again, this time assuring herself that it's fine because even Cassidy thought so! This sounded less like a real assurance on her part and more like she's starting to grasp at straws to justify what she's doing.
Of course we've mentioned before that part of the reason that Beth is so okay with this is that shit like this happens to tinies all the time. Hell, that's probably why so many of them here have come to terms with their fate in her belly. She's indulging in this dark fantasy of hers because if they were surely going to end up eaten at some point anyway, and it's not like she can save them all. But now that the one under her protection isn't quite so protected anymore, it only makes sense that her empathetic side would start to have more pull. Between that and the heartbreaking stories these girls have, how could she not start to feel guilty.
I don't think the story will end this way, but a small part of me is hoping that Beth ends up having a change of heart and decides and/or finds a way to save the other tinies from her digestive tract after leaving the restaurant (if they make it that long). Either way, I'm pretty sure Beth is going to feel really shitty about what she did at this meal in retrospect. Honestly, I'll be happy if just Cassidy and Beth survive the night (I'm not sure what the penalty for breaking a contractor's agreement is, but I assume it wouldn't end well for Beth).
If Cass is going to make it through this, I'm pretty sure whatever happened between Val and her inside Beth is going to be the reason for it. I'm really curious what went on in there, especially since you were setting Val up for something last chapter.
Finally, I thought Dulce's demise perfectly culminated who Beth is. She allowed the tiny to go out on her own terms, preparing herself as a feast for the eyes, nose, and mouth. That touching exchange between them just before Beth ate her sums up what I've been saying Beth's position about eating the girls has been all night. This line in particular:
“In all honesty, I am glad it’s you. There are many normals I can think of who would have me screaming and fighting, but with how you are with Cassidy, and-and even with us, I’m glad its someone who at least respects us tinies, even if you show it by trying to swallow us whole.”
Beth views them as people with lives and dreams, and she does respect them. I think that's also part of the reason most of them are coming to terms with her eating them. There's a certain dignity in how she's treating them (well, except for maybe Isabella), and I'm glad Dulce was able to verbalize that.
Her joke about Cecilia was pretty funny, though.
So yeah, another awesome chapter here! I'm at the edge of my seat (literally, not just as an expression!) as I ponder what fate awaits Cassidy in the climatic chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you again for another incredible review! I'm so sorry it took me literal days to respond. I'm loving the questions you're asking, and the insights you've given me all story into how the characters are coming across!
I'm curious what suggested the VIP band was a red herring early on, or of that was more of an expectation based on how you would have taken this story. I'm wondering what made you change your mind on that stance?
Your insights into Amaterasu are quite intriguing. I'm very curious to hear your thoughts on her after reading the epilogue. I'm honestly hoping that the final bits of context don't undermine Amaterasu's perspective here, mostly because I think there is a degree of validity to the argument, even if I personally reject the conclusion whole-heartedly.
Beth's reactions took a lot of nuance I really hope played well here. It's difficult to maintain a sexy, somewhat romantic atmosphere while threatening the love of the PoV character's life. I think I walked the knife's edge between thrilling danger, deep concern, soul-crushing guilt, and sexy: full steam ahead here fairly well, but I suppose things like the game came off a little oddly. I saw that more as Amaterasu stepping in to keep things exciting while Beth was still trying to navigate all of her roiling emotions. I'll have to think more on that for future works.
As for Beth's outlook on tinies, despite setting this story in a world where the size disparity is static, I very much intended for this to be a growth story... just, framed as personal growth rather than size. I wanted Beth to grow as a person, and her outlook on tinies to grow as well. I'm glad to hear Dulce's demise was a solid benchmark for that progress.
I seriously hope you enjoy the last bits of the story - now that they're posted, I'm riding an anticipatory adrenaline high just waiting to hear how folks feel it turned out!
Author's Response:
Thank you again for another incredible review! I'm so sorry it took me literal days to respond. I'm loving the questions you're asking, and the insights you've given me all story into how the characters are coming across!
I'm curious what suggested the VIP band was a red herring early on, or of that was more of an expectation based on how you would have taken this story. I'm wondering what made you change your mind on that stance?
Your insights into Amaterasu are quite intriguing. I'm very curious to hear your thoughts on her after reading the epilogue. I'm honestly hoping that the final bits of context don't undermine Amaterasu's perspective here, mostly because I think there is a degree of validity to the argument, even if I personally reject the conclusion whole-heartedly.
Beth's reactions took a lot of nuance I really hope played well here. It's difficult to maintain a sexy, somewhat romantic atmosphere while threatening the love of the PoV character's life. I think I walked the knife's edge between thrilling danger, deep concern, soul-crushing guilt, and sexy: full steam ahead here fairly well, but I suppose things like the game came off a little oddly. I saw that more as Amaterasu stepping in to keep things exciting while Beth was still trying to navigate all of her roiling emotions. I'll have to think more on that for future works.
As for Beth's outlook on tinies, despite setting this story in a world where the size disparity is static, I very much intended for this to be a growth story... just, framed as personal growth rather than size. I wanted Beth to grow as a person, and her outlook on tinies to grow as well. I'm glad to hear Dulce's demise was a solid benchmark for that progress.
I seriously hope you enjoy the last bits of the story - now that they're posted, I'm riding an anticipatory adrenaline high just waiting to hear how folks feel it turned out!
[Report This]Date: October 17 2024 8:01 AM Title: Chapter 6 - The Final... Four?
The prediction I was anticipating is that she'd indeed choose Cassidy as her tiny lol. Though part of me hopes I'm wrong even though this seemed to spell it out. She wanted to just put the fear into the couple but doesn't actually pick her, now that she taught her the lesson she wanted to anyway.
But I suppose we'll see haha
Author's Response:
Without giving away anything, I like the way you think. Solid prediction, let's give it a 9.5 / 10. As for the actual events, they'll be up this weekend for your viewing pleasure. I'm about halfway through my line edit of Chapter 7, once I finish that and the epilogue line edit, we will see just how right you are! Is this a case where I should be saying, "I hope you're right," or, "I pray for all our sakes you were wrong?"