Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2024 11:33 PM Title: Downfall: Part II

We've already talked about this chapter and how much I love it, but I want to make sure you get your proper allotment of stars, so here are a couple more thoughts!

I know I mentioned how much I loved that handheld scene with Evie holding Miguel and Luna while talking with Liam after Sofia went to sleep after the dinner party. But I actually went back and reread that part, and I noticed some details that really made the scene feel special. I love how you highlighted how much Evie was moving her head and other hand when she talked and how steady (even gently rocking) the downsizers in her other hand. It's a small detail, but seeing how much she talks with her hands and body really makes the fact that she is keeping them steady and making sure they're comfortable show how much attention and care she's paying to them. Even though she's talking to her ex who she wants back (and the guilt she's wrestling with about it), she's still making them the priority, balancing those feelings with their safety and comfort. Evie is fucking incredible!

Of course, that it's Miguel in her palm might have helped with that!

As you know, I love Liam, but holy shit was that scene where Miguel and Luna had a lovemaking session rather than just fucking, only for Liam to have been watching and calling it beautiful was next level. He loves his wife so much, and he wants her to be happy, knowing that Miguel can do things for her that he can't. And it feels like he's starting to truly feel the same way about Miguel, not in terms of romantic love but a real connection, as opposed to Liam just being a chill bro who cares. This moment cemented them as a throple for me.

I also really like how this parallels Luna's desire for Liam to get together with Evie. I loved Liam's hesitance to do that, because he knows there's a deep emotional connection between Evie and him, and he doesn't want Luna to feel threatened. But Luna knows this, too, and she doesn't want her husband to have to give up that connection he has with Evie. As long as they play with her, too, of course! But seriously, like Liam feels about Miguel and her, Luna realizes that there are things Evie can do for her husband that she can't.

In both of these cases, it's not a simple case of getting off on being cucked or just allowing their each other to experience normal sex. They want each other to embrace the love they feel for Miguel and Evie, too. They love each other so much that they aren't threatened even by such deep emotional connections coming from outside the marriage. There's something really beautiful about that, and it's no wonder that such a thing could sweep up even someone as traditional and stubborn as Miguel.

Of course, that Evie and Miguel have something brewing between them too only makes the whole thing more interesting! Honestly, I don't know if I've seen a polyamorous relationship covered on such an emotional level in a story before.

Once again, phenomenal work in this chapter! Every chapter has been excellent, but I feel like the emotion in this one reached another level and in so many different ways!

Reviewer: ReclaimerChief17 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2024 5:40 AM Title: Downfall: Part II

This was honestly my favorite chapter of the story. Lots of development to unpack but gotta say the real mvp of this chapter was Miguel. Dude suffered too much for too long. And I liked that downsizing movie reference but with a twist in the downsizer seeking the divorce rather than the human. 
My favorite line was “he almost felt bad for Sofia and then he remembered all the things she did.” It kinda resonates with the readers when they see her whole world turn upside down and gain a pinch of sympathy until you remember.
Evie is awesome. I loved the twist she has against Sofia. 
Liam is such a chill guy. Their bro talk with Miguel was a highlight. 
Overall excellent chapter. Congrats on a great story.