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Reviewer: Braden697 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05 2024 6:11 AM Title: Chapter 15 - Divide (Ryan)

Did you get my story request?



Author's Response:

Yes I saw it, but I don't think I will be able to write a story like that. I'll probably keep focusing on my own series for now. Hope you understand.

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 04 2024 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 15 - Divide (Ryan)

Damn this chapter was shocking for lack of a better word. Ryan separates from Mimi due to his concern for his now goddess friend and how she is changing and shows signs of not caring for all of humanity just a select few who she know and how she is starting to express joy of her absolute power. 


Major trust issues between the two now and when they see each other again oh boy is it going to be a long conversation lol

jacob is already my number one pick to be the next big bad because his rage towards the goddess is both understandable but can be dangerous for Ryan’s mission to coexist with the goddess instead of more war and bloodshed. But I find Jacob’s character very interesting 

the goddess of nature was cool to see did not expect her to be a dog girl and finally some vore action lol 

also glad to see the goddess of balance and law again she seems like a morally gray woman where she doesn’t want or like hurting and killing humans in the 1,000 years cycle but also see how it keeps the balance in a way. Now we meet the leader of the goddess’s wow that was fast but she seems to be interested in peace talk possibly.


overall great chapter and great story progression so far. I guess vore can be check off my list of wants now all that’s left is nose, and anal action but I’ll let you do your thing because this story has been fire.

also I have two predictions 

1 - Ryan gains some kind of powers and becomes a knight of humanity and peace or something like that 

2 - Jacob finds a dark and powerful power giving him the chance to seek vengeance on all the goddesses but corrupt his mind and becomes a monster like threat to not only goddess but humanity too giving reason for the two sides to unite 

but that’s just my personal prediction nice job can’t wait for more



Author's Response:

Thank you for leaving another review!

Ithyrminah is actually one of the characters I've been most excited to introduce. Unfortunately, due to the progression of the story, it is unlikely that we will be seeing much of her in the first part of The Origin. She will likely make a return in the next installment of the series though.

Some interesting predictions you have, I already have the rest of part one written out more or less but I will let you see for yourself once new chapters release whether any of your predictions are close.

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