[Report This]Date: October 03 2024 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 21 - Confession
Wow! What a big moment!
I love the idea of Jordan turning around and finding a giant Alice wide awake and just staring at him. That's a visual that's really sticking in my head. It's so innocent yet a little jarring (in a good way) at the same time. I don't know why I like this so much, but I really enjoyed that!
That confession scene was so good! I really like how they leaned on each other for the strength to tell each other how they felt about ... each other. Make sense?
It was so endearing when Alice assured Jordan that he had nothing to be nervous about. I don't know if he would have gotten it out (certainly he wouldn't have in such an articulate way) if she hadn't given him that encouragement. Likewise, I don't know if Alice would have verbalized her feelings if Jordan hadn't done so first. They needed each other to help get their true feelings out there, even when it was professing their love for each other. That's a beautiful thing.
That line Alice said about not letting herself believe that she loved Jordan until he was gone sums up my thoughts on Alice at the start of the story pretty well. While he's immeasurably important to her, she kind of took for granted that he was the one who would always be there. She didn't have to deal with those deeper feelings about him. If there ever came a time when she was ready to do that, he would be there waiting for her. Until he wasn't. It took something like this to wake her up and get her to acknowledge these feelings that she's had for who knows how long.
To be fair, the same could be said for Jordan, but maybe because we see most of the story through his eyes or possibly because the stakes are higher with him, we see him realize this much sooner than Alice does, so this revelation feels like a bigger deal for her character.
Again, I have to point out those little touches you add to scenes. The way Alice let her hand hover over Jordan for a minute, trembling as she processed her feelings, before letting her fingers caress him was such a satisfying little moment. The scene would have been touching enough without it, but man, that nonverbal indication of her feelings was so powerful. Nicely done!
But that kiss really stole the show. From Alice playfully denying Jordan's request to put it off until he was big again to her wrapping her fingers around him to her lips lovingly assaulting him to him feeling like being small might be a good thing in some ways, everything about the scene was perfect! Even on the back end, when Alice says "I love you" first this time, the opposite of how the original confession went down, was pretty great! I really enjoyed reading this part!
Poor Leila, having to sleep in the corner. I mean, at least it was a comfy corner, right? RIGHT?!
I do feel like Alice and Jordan are going to get her before the end of the story. Leila may not embarrass easily, but the young couple have love on their side, and love finds a way, as they say. So why can't it find a way to embarrass their friend?
But on a serious note, all that teasing in the beginning did make for a nice set up for the coming admissions of love. They were both blushing for the exact reason you'd think they would be blushing!
As I said at the start, this chapter had a big, huge, gigantic moment in it, and those can be hard to handle. But you handled it incredibly well, making the moment feel personal and joyous. So, if you're like me and you're worried about how it was received by the reader, don't be. You absolutely nailed it!
Author's Response:
I completely missed replying to this one, really sorry about that!
There's something I've always loved about turning around and suddenly seeing a giant face looking right at you from up close. It's both scary and exciting at the same time, though it depends on the situation. Though Jordan couldnt help getting startled even by Alice.
I'm glad the confession scene was good enough, I really hoped it paid off after their time apart and that it was sweet and heartwarming enough. I had a great time getting them to have their feelings out in the open and letting each other know they weren't fully aware of it but somehow always knew there was something there too.
After everything Jordan's been through in bad experiences with being small, this one good thing happening in the form of a kiss finally showed him that there's something nice about it all. And what better than getting a giant smooch from the one you love? I'm glad you enjoyed this part :)
Unfortunately, Leila blushing isn't something I have planned. What on earth would make someone like Leila blush? Even I don't know and this is my story. Though maybe I could get Elsie to help me out there, she'll probably know what to do.
Thanks so much for that, I'm really glad to know I managed to do the confession scene justice!