Reviewer: shadow93 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12 2024 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Late Arrivals Should Be Presentable

Love this story so far, and I hope it is still ongoing! It seems clear which tiny Amaterasu wants, but maybe you will surprise me. Looking forward to how Beth reacts if I'm right.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  It will definitely be concluded (and in short order).  It's been written, but I had some serious technical issues that prevented me from accessing the completed chapters.  I'm back up and running, and will start posting the remaining chapters soon, after I give them some spot edits.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2024 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Late Arrivals Should Be Presentable

Holy shit! This story is fucking amazing and may be the hottest vore story (maybe even story in general) that I've read on this site. I'm enjoying the narrative quite a bit as well, and the story you're telling around this orgy only serves to enhance its more erotic parts.

But first, I have to admit that chapter one's foreshadowing tag is fucking with me. I can't decide if Cass is going to end up in someone's stomach. The foreshadowing tag, combined with what I felt were several clear hints that the love of Beth's life would end up devoured (that assumption or simple oversight line, the explanation of how private contractor agreements work, and the way the contractor's offer is explained, for example), makes it seem pretty obvious what's going to happen to Cass.

But I'm also familiar with your work, and I almost feel like this was too transparent to be what it seems.

It's like we're sitting at a table with two glasses, one filled with iocaine powder, engaged in battle of wits. Are you the type of man who would drop such blatant hints on purpose or use them to deceive the reader. A clever writer would use this as a narrative trick, knowing that only a great fool would reach for the obvious conclusion? I'm not a great fool (I hope), so I clearly can't choose the happier ending in front of you. But you must have known that I was not a great fool (or confirmed that I am. Shit!), you would have counted on it, so I can clearly not choose the obvious, darker ending in front of me!

But the recently dropped fourth chapter, at first glance, seems to imply that things are moving in the direction hinted at in chapter one. Amaterasu's terms, which are not subject to the Establishment's rules, never specified that Cass was off limits, so that rubber band she's wearing now seems to mean nothing. And the sun goddess seemed so sure that Beth wouldn't eat her desired tiny delicacy before it came time to collect her payment. There's only one tiny in the room that Amaterasu could know that Beth isn't going to eat.

And what a horrifying turn of events that would be for Cass. She's even said she would be okay with being eaten, but I'm pretty sure that only applies to Beth at this point. To be digested in the belly of a stranger, one who, as far as we know, hasn't taken the same precautions to ease the suffering of her meal, and die knowing that she never got to become a part of woman she loves. Just brutal. Not to mention that she'd get left out of the orgy in Beth's stomach, which would also be a serious blow to her!

And let's not forget Beth. If this comes to pass and she's informed when there are four tinies left, being unable to tell her lover of her fate ... fuck, that's heartbreaking to even think about. She would have to make the most of those final moments before she has to watch her goddess swallow the love of her life down, Beth's own treat serving as little consolation, most likely.

So am I ready to conclude that Cass's fate is sealed? It seems you've shown your hand, but, then again, you did best my Spaniard ...

But aside from that back-and-forth going through my head as I'm reading this, the way you've framed these orgies is so sensual, so stimulating, and, maybe most importantly, so personal. In such a short span, you've let us get quite familiar with each of Beth's treats so far and even made them endearing to us in different ways. From Pushpa's super cute broken English and polite eagerness to Adeya's confidence bordering on arrogance and the unique blend of terror and lust it brings her, we get to know these tinies pretty quickly.

More importantly, Beth gets to know them.

It became clear from her first interaction with Pushpa that Beth's fantasy wasn't just to eat the tinies, but to get to know her prey a bit first. She wants to understand those she consumes. This makes a lot of sense for someone in love with a tiny. She doesn't just see them as food. It's the fact that they're real people that is part of the rush for her. Knowing that gives us a deeper perspective into her, and, at least to me, magnifies the intense eroticism of her predatory actions tenfold!

I'm also a fan of Beth's manipulative nature when it comes to luring in her prey. She could easily just pick them up and eat them at any time, but, again, she wants more than that. She needed Pushpa to beg her for it, even when the tiny didn't know what was coming. It wasn't enough that Isabella knew what Beth had in store for her; the normal needed Val to bound and gag the unwilling tiny, not only for the stated reason of providing Beth's meal with toys but because watching Val unwittingly torment Isabella before sending the latter down her bullet was an incredible sexual tease for Beth.

And back to Cassidy, you've made her the most lovable character of all! Despite the depravity of the couple's sexual exploits and the tiny girlfriend's eager acceptance that her own kind is on the menu, there's an innocence to Cass that really makes you want to root for her. Adorable little details like Beth having to use her finger to make a dumbstruck Cass nod in agreement of the rules only help this perception. And the way she was able to reason with Alma and get the other tiny to accept her fate and maybe even look forward to it a little bit was so sweet and endearing. I love this character, and, based on what I'm leaning toward believing will happen to her, I'll be reading the final chapter of this story through gaps in my fingers as I try to cover my eyes!

Your detailing of the action throughout the story so far is incredible, as always. You really have a knack for painting a clear picture that stays in the reader's mind. And you put that to good used, too. Like in chapter two, where you made it so clear to me what food items and which tinies were positioned throughout on Amaterasu's body, then simply referenced a stray detail here and there as Beth plucked tinies up to examine them, relying on the totality of your past description to keep the image fresh in the reader's mind.

Also, I love your love of alliteration! You had a couple of longer ones in here that I really liked, too!

I also wanted to compliment you on your narrative choice and the way that you've handled it so far. Keeping things strictly from Beth's perspective couldn't have been an easy choice, especially when you've got an orgy going on inside her. The temptation almost surely had to be there to switch to different tinies' perspectives at times, adding details that only they could provide (I can't imagine Isabella was having much fun in Beth's mouth when the normal was talking, for example). But I think that would have ended up being a really tedious to write and maybe even a bit tedious to read, and you'd have spent so much time balancing things out that it would take forever to move anything forward.

Also, you really hit on details that Beth is experiencing that make seeing everything through her eyes feel truly special. Her feeling her tiny meal shifting around in her stomach when she bent down to speak to the sun goddess and the way she could tell that her "belly laugh" shook their world were both really sensual, unique things to note from her perspective. And the way she envisions how the orgy in her stomach is going is, in some ways, even more alluring than us being made privy to what's actually happening in there. That also kind of plays into that "getting to know her prey" thing I mentioned above. She has insight into their personalities, and that only serves to feed her (and our) imagination!

Oh, and the way you turned the whole concept of the meal on its head at the end of chapter three, when Beth ate a willing Momo in front of everyone, was pretty fun as well. That shift from unwitting prey to terrified victims gave the story a whole new feel. The way all the tinies screamed, cursed, and vainly tried to resist each time Beth cleaned them was perfect! They don't know if this is the moment she'll swallow them or if she's being honest about just cleaning them. of course, for two of them, she didn't end up being honest, even if she initially meant what she said.

I look forward to seeing how this terror-driven meal plays out from here.

So yeah, this story is pretty spectacular! Don't let the lack of reviews get you down or make you think otherwise! I'm really eager to see where you go from here, even if I'm scared for Cass.

Author's Response:

It Was Me, you are a living legend.  Your reviews are a thing of art and beauty, and thank you so much for your continued interests in and feedback on my stories.  I'm sorry there has been such a gap in posting.  My PC died about 2 days after I left my iPad at a friend's house several states over, and I've had no way to access the remaining chapters.  I'll probably include some more context when I get Chapter 5 posted.

As for your comments, I'm deeply honored by your words here.  This site has a ton of vore stories, so even to be counted among the top is high praise.  I'm glad to see that the foreshadowing tag is doing its part, and keeping readers on their toes.  I certainly don't aim to be predictable, but it would seem a tiny in a vore story either survives, or gets eaten, so I can only be so creative in the outcome.  Though, the idea of inoculating oneself to the danger is an interesting one.  I won't keep you waiting long to find out.

I'm glad my decision to make the tinies people, rather than snacks is paying off.  My initial intent with this story was NOT to end up with another significant narrative, but rather to churn out a 2 or 3 chapter smut story about a mixed couple enjoying a fun twist on a taboo dinner party.  Then I wanted to know who these tiny women were, and how they go there, and... well, you've seen what it ballooned into thus far.  I really enjoy the personal angle for each of these women, and moreso, figuring out how Beth can twist their circumstances into a mentality that can accept their inevitable fate, and preferably frame it in an enjoyable manner.

As for my unhealthy obsession with the artistic application of alliteration... I'm glad someone can appreciate it.  To me, alliteration flows so well, but I am well aware I over-apply the technique.  Still, I guess it isn't be a MicroThaumaturge story until a tender, trusting tiny is thrust deep into the wonderous, weeping womanhood of a gorgeous, glamorous giantess.

I'm glad keeping the PoV hasn't irredeemably removed the spice from this story.  I think the tiny PoV's for this could be a lot of fun, and I'm considering (ONLY considering) writing a series of mini-scenes from this story from the tiny PoV's, and posting them in a compilation called Side Dishes.  But before I do that, I need to finish Small Investments.

Thanks again for your continued interest and support!  Reviews are the only thing keeping me writing these days, when I can scrounge up the time (and when my computer isn't bricked).