[Report This]Date: November 26 2022 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 20: Grief
What a fantastic story! Thrilling all the way through and constantly intense. Great job with the delightfully horrific characters too, they were a joy to hate.
Burning out the G37 is such a visceral scene, especially with Vasquez’s usual brute force approach to it.
It definitely makes the most sense here for Vasquez to grow, but I'm still really intrigued by the other options. Especially by what a grieving Jennifer might have done to Amber if she didn't get to Vasquez in time.
Can't wait to see your next work!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I was terrified the entire way through that I'd somehow compromise quality, so your words mean a lot. I still think I can improve this last chapter and will for sure flesh it out more when I have time.
The only way with Vasquez is brute force, haha. She's pretty much wrath distilled into a 55 foot tall woman.
I'm most looking forward to the Jennifer timeline tbh.
I have some ideas for short stories (a size theft centred plot and one maybe tailored around the seven sins as growth triggers), but I'm eager to start the continuation of this story too. I have a lot of ideas that never got included in this that can be.
[Report This]Date: November 24 2022 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 20: Grief
Cant believe i was starting to feel bad for Amber even after what she did.
imagine screaming up to a 55ft tall muscle amazon 😳 thats pretty ballsy since you know what she is capable of, guess thats why she is the leader and also speaks of the respect Vasquez have for Maria.
I might have missed it but did Vasquez realise it was Jennifer that made her grow with the new serum since she was kinda out of it during that part or did she just think it was the g37? If she was even thinking at all during the rampage lol i guess she might not have time to think about it since she was overflowing with rage.
I had that sad feeling when you know a great series is ending these last chapters, but these last chapters have been so amazingly good and you tied evrything up and made such a good ending that im just happy how it turned out instead of being sad that it ended, hope that makes some kinda sence lol 😂
SO FREKKIN AMAZING!!!!! Once again thanks you so much for sharing this incredible story and to gtortoise for helping.
Enjoy a super well deserved break😇
Author's Response:
Right!? As I was writing I started to feel bad too, haha. That influenced Jennifer's reaction, actually.
So Maria is incredibly manipulative. She worded what she said very carefully to keep Vasquez in the palm of her hand. Blaming her and twisting the truth stopped her from being stomped into nothing, haha. Years of practise manipulating Vasquez meant she could do it and get away with it.
So, your review just helped me rewrite pray of the chapter and clarify some things I wanted to convey. Vasquez currently doesn't know Jennifer saved her or why she grew. She doesn't even know G38 exists. Coming back from death and ask the anger, etc has her not questioning anything. In the holding cells she didn't even really see/register Jennifer completely. But yeah, thanks for the question and helping hone the story!
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the closing of this part of the story. I know I said I wanted a break but I'm already itching to start writing part 2.... Biggest bitch in lab C 👀