[Report This]Date: February 25 2026 6:51 AM Title: Chapter 7
This is one of those rare moments when it feels like I'm reading a different story than the one all the reviewers are praising. I'm in awe as I look through all the glowing reviews. 2010 must've been a different era, where the bar for gentle stories was rock bottom. Some observations:
- Alex sniffs a bottle and ends up shrunken in a closed cupboard; how exactly?
-- I skimmed the second part of this story and saw that it was a deus ex machina. Really now?
- Alex lusting and masturbating over Emily while in the cupboard is creepy.
- The dialogue between all characters is painfully unrealistic.
- Taking the time to write about Alex taking a shit in the sink.
- Alex falling in love with Emily, and Emily saying the same—in less than 24 hours of meeting each other.
- Feet.
- Emily loves that Alex is a Nice Guy™, unlike the jerks at college. (Cringe.)
- That sleepover chapter made me roll my eyes.
I hope you've gotten better at your writing.
Date: November 20 2010 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 7
Emily and Alex do seem to fall in love rather quickly, but that's part of the fun right? I hope you come back to writing it soon.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2010 10:56 AM Title: Chapter 7
Yep! Cathy initially proved the rule (just like I said).
Nice chapter; quite emotionally plausible!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! :-)
Date: April 02 2010 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 7
good story. I like the way you left the ending open to add more sometime. hope you do
Author's Response: Thanks, I'll definitely continue this story. I've already worked out the squel, but I'm writing a new story first. Hope you like it!
[Report This]Date: March 30 2010 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 7
This was a very fun and entertaining story, well done. Looking forward to your next story.
Aaron
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I've started writing again today, so I hope you like it! Glad you enjoyed this story.