Date: October 31 2019 5:05 PM Title: Olivia
Wow wish I could of gotten to this soon got ALOT to say first off this maybe the best chapter yet from a non fetish POV the combat was pretty clean and I thin u could be real good writing Pokémon original fanfics
Next the ring thing got me thinking about how girls could cheat in Pokémon battles have a few boys/jewelry that know high damage moves like bast burn, hyper beam, frenzy plant all the benefits non of the drawback since their Pokémon would not be using them......thin I though of something
A move called attract. With it female trainer could bend other female trainer to their will. Creating their own harems.
Maybe it’s cuz I been watching the anime recently but Olivia made me think of Brock. Dude must be in paradise right now since he was always such a ladies man (I’ll hold off on what my opinions of what that should be as I am sure u got a plate full of idea and I already asked for 2 as is
Finally that to u I been having dreams of different Pokémon related scenarios now my personal favorite is Red came back battles Cynthia in a nail bitter of a battle and wins. It’s broadcasted live and all the male trainers r overjoyed that things r gonna go back to normal so hundreds of thousands sign up to be trainers...then they find out red just wants the prize money and is letting Cynthia keep her title. Hopes r dashed and when the broadcast is over turns out red as the 1st shrinking victim. Cynthia knee jerk was the greatest obstacle in her plan and removed it. Keeping him as a trophy she just undid his shrink to put on a show to fix the male trainer shortage issues her new empire was experiencing.
....man what does this say about me for having a dream like this?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the detailed review, I'm happy you enjoyed the story!
I'm a pretty big Pokémon fan, and I had a lot of fun writing the battle in this one. I've thought about writing Pokémon fanfics, but don't have the time to do that and write stories like this, and in the immortal words of CinemaSin 'The power of boners is stronger'.
I never considered using the trainer jewelry like that actually. Beyond making them into accessories, I was thinking of letting them use moves like Flash for utility purposes lol Interesting idea.
Oh, I have plans for Pokémon's infatuation mechanics :)
As for the named male characters. FW seems to have something going on in the background with some/most of them and I don't want to ask and be spoiled on it so while I have the ok to use named male character, when I do I'll likely use supporting characters rather than mainish characters.
Also, there's nothing wrong with a dream like that. It's your dream, have fun with it!
[Report This]Date: October 29 2019 12:09 PM Title: Olivia
This chapter was really nice. Rylee's affection for her trainer was really cute. I also like the idea that men have to rely on women for protection. I didn't see a "to be continued" at the end of this one, are you gonna continued this one cause I like the smutty and dirty stuff you put in these chapters but I love the more gentle stories you write here. I don't know I think it would be a shame that we wouldn't get to see more of Rylee.
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it, it was really fun to write.
At first I was thinking that this would just be a one shot story, but after writing and posting it I now want to write a follow-up with Rylee as the focus lol
Right now it's no more than an idea, but if I can think of something more for it I totally will.