Date: June 11 2017 12:33 PM Title: Melancholy Daze
I've been reading this story for a while and I got to say it's amazing. I pity Denny though. The guy has been through too much already. Your story is definitely well written with the numerous exclaimation marks giving it an unique touch. Awesome work!
Author's Response:
Thank's Nothingness! That is if, it wasn't written in, tongue-in-cheek... Ha! I know, there are a lot of them! Quite a few ellipsis's too, but hey, I like exclamation points and ellipsis... so, why not? No, seriously though, thanks, man! It's most appreciated, and nice to hear something from a fellow author!
Date: June 10 2017 12:30 PM Title: Melancholy Daze
He is in trouble. I am sure he will give her great pleasure. Will she ever show him to Stacy?
Remind me not to get Ms. Kershaw to represent me. Nice touch.
The describing of what it's like in a cage was great.
If you do anything, please make Suzie a 40 plus year old blonde. With black pumps or wedge heels. Maybe a little man pounding his fists on the side of her shoe. Trying to get her attention.
Love your story,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Yeah, I'm still trying to see if I can work Suzie into the story. Might make it a bit more difficult, but I'll see what I can do. i.e.(Read my response to Tomspeedy)
[Report This]Date: June 10 2017 3:59 AM Title: Melancholy Daze
The way how you incorporated Deny into the story was simply perfect!
Your writing style is so realistic that I became Deny while reading it. I could feel that dark place with thick air and lavender aroma. Staying and holding the bars. Then seeing Maxine's huge face and her bright red nails. And then a feeling how metal bars are slipping out of my hands when she is picking me up.
I liked how she told him she knows exactly what he needs now ... that he is going to be so useful now :-)Yes, feeling useful definitely helps against ruined life and depressions ... and Angela will certainly make him very useful soon ;-) - what a nice cruel humor of Maxine.
But the most superb part of this chapter was when you revealed circumstances how Deny and Angela know each other. It was a powerful psychological moment that Angela is the best friend of Deny's ex wife.
So reading that I could feel that pang. Is Maxine really going to give me to lustful Angela Cooper? The best friend of my ex? I really got a lump in my throat and I felt shivering in my chest - that was that so known mental arousal from upcoming submission.
I am really curios how this continues. How Angela reacts. Maybe she will not resist and little bit tease Deny in front of Maxine ;-) (like she did before but this time she will get the desired attention)
Your stories have great level of detail! Accompanied with nice psychological moments. I enjoy them so much!
Author's Response:
Thank's Lt! The next chapter will be a continuation of this one, so, yeah, ...it's going to be fun to write. I really get into this type of scene, it has something to do with the way that the situation is setup, everything has to be well thought out beforehand so that the scene itself can just kinda flow right along, ...I don't know if that makes sense but, it's really fun to explore different scenarios and switch them around when the time is right.
[Report This]Date: June 09 2017 12:48 PM Title: Melancholy Daze
Honestly, that was amazing. Usually, I'm not that fond of adding more characters becuase I want the focus on Tom, but this time I was impressed.
Dennis's story is actually interesting and I like how his background is tied with Angela. What a surprise!
What I like is that since Dennis and Angela know each other, we already can predict how this relationship is going to be, and I am excited. Angela really wants Dennis's attention and now she is finally get it and Dennis can't run away this time.
I was laughing at the name for a bit. Dennis licpet. Lol! I see where you were going and I think it's funny. A little play on words I see.
Wow! Now I can't wait to see the look on Angela's face when she gets Deny!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Yeah, it just kinda fell into place, Tom. Ha! ;`)
I just let my imagination take over, I really don't plan too far ahead, but I do have to limit what takes place. So that the story doesn't drift too far away from the central plot. I've made a slight detour several times already, but I'm finding that the more that I do it, the easier it gets.
I've already started with the next chapter and I've found that we've got two choices for Diesel 1. He's one of the Janitors that are captives of 'Kershaw & Jackson. Or, 2. He's inside the cage with you, (Right now) I don't think I'll be able to put Suzie in, but I'm still attempting to put some ideas together, maybe if he escapes from the lawyers he could be found by a new Giantess 'Suzie' ...I'm not sure yet... Any ideas?