Date: May 12 2017 12:34 PM Title: Ch. 44 - "Powerful Lady Lawyers"
I would love a few chapters on the janitors points of view. Obviously as they are suddenly small they eventually search for food. Do the ladies see them first? Do the janitors try to get their attention?
Maybe they almost get stepped on by accident by one of the lady lawyers. Do they run in fear from the 2 lawyers? I assume the ladies are amazed when they see them.
Look, little people, tiny men. Let's catch them. The 2 janitors are so terrrified of the Giantesses and their heels.
Hope you like this,
Diesel
Author's Response:
With just the mention of them, 'Powerful Lady Lawyers' - it does add to the suspense, but I think that the mystery of what 'actually' happened, to those poor little men, adds more to the story if we just leave it at that, ...wondering and imagining what will eventually become of them - the imagination is a very powerful thing ~ why not use it, and just allow that part of the story to linger in the readers mind...
I did workout several scenarios for them, but I just set it aside for future use - maybe, we'll see them again before the ending comes.
Thank's Diesel! Nice suggestions! ;`)
Date: May 12 2017 12:04 PM Title: Ch. 44 - "Powerful Lady Lawyers"
So the lawyer ladies have the little janitors. Interesting. Will Amy get ahold of them?
I thought that maybe Amy would be at work and just as she stands as getting ready to leave, she would see a tiny figure waving his hands and screaming for help.
Maybe that will happen or maybe Maxine will give her one of hers.
Love this story,
Diesel
Author's Response:
I was wondering about that, too. It would be an awesome extension to add to the story...
[Report This]Date: May 08 2017 3:41 PM Title: Ch. 44 - "Powerful Lady Lawyers"
Interesting. The floors were recently swept and these women already have the janitors in their grasp.
Somehow it's some chemicals that janitors use and Maxine also has a batch of them as well. She used it on the cat and also on Tom.
So far, Billy, Tom, and these 2 janitors are who we know got shrunk. We can't guarantee that it's only them anymore. There could be more tiny guys running around now that we don't know.
I loved the use of the necklace and how it was a container for these little men. Also, these women hide them in their cleavage. Perfect.
To make it perfect, just have the guy out of the test tube and hung by his tied wrists and his mouth shut so he can't shout for help. That way, the women will enjoy the feeling of the a tiny guy struggling within their cleavage.
Amy is curious and now I wonder what she finds when she confronts Maxine. I love Amy's ambition to find another tiny man again. It's making me excited.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank's Tom. I needed to get this part of the story behind us, so that the shrinking would be more understandable. Because it would only make sense that if the fumes shrank Billy, then obviously, whomever was using the stuff would have ultimately been in contact with it as well... Now then, I'm trying to decide weither or not to back up and do the Janitors back story. Or, just move on and continue with what I've already have planned out ~ roughly ~ that is...
Do you think it would slow the overall story down too much to do the Janitors POV and write several chapters to detail what actually happened to them? I'm leaning toward just leaving it to the readers imagination and continuing on - what do you think?