[Report This]Date: December 08 2015 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
100th review! Didn't notice I skipped this chapter. I wonder what will happen to Kelly if she gets shrunk? With all the people she killed and all the damage she caused? She didn't expect crazy worshippers? She's a living goddess! Lol.
Glad to see she is still able to enjoy the city haha. Will the people be able to shrink her too? Not too much left, whats gonna happen now?!
Author's Response:
Well, congratulations on the 100th review! I'm glad it was you (not that I pushed for it :P)
Well, the scenario of what would happen if Kelly is shrunk is definitely an interesting one, isn't it? I assume that you mean what would happen if she is not put down immediately after it, which would be a logical enough possibility as well. I guess this question will be answer (or won't, depending on how the story finishes) in four weeks.
Kelly never really expected any worshipers. She considers herself a goddess, but in a different way than that. She actually made it clear during the "press conference" in her palm, back in Washington.
And of course, she is still able to enjoy a city, once she is calm enough between attacks to do some sightseeing.
Cheers!
Date: November 30 2015 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
Decent chapter. At this point I just want to see the conclusion to this whole thing. To be honest I think this series was more along the lines of my tastes in acts I and II, but at this point I'm not enjoying the chapters as much. I guess it's just that I don't like violent GTS that much or is it Kelly's unbearable smugness or how overpowered she is? Or maybe that everyone else seems so incompetent? I'm not sure...
It's not as if there aren't ANY violent GTS stories that grab me, but I'm not sure what are the factors that make a violent story enjoyable for me. Maybe it's that this series started off relatively gentle and then progressed into a killfest later on, instead of just starting off that way? Like I said, I have NO idea makes a violent story enjoyable for me and what doesn't. At the end of the day though, this is YOUR story so you should do whatever you want with it. I'm still looking forward to what you have planned for the climax though, I will say that...
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback. Based on what you have been sharing with me in the reviews so far I thought that you would probably not enjoy that much how the series has evolved in the end. It's true that it has moved from a relatively gentle series to a much more violent one, as Kelly's character has had the same evolution (Lisa and Casey have remained relatively unchanged since Volume 2).
I hope that by the end you'll still have enjoyed the journey and the overall story and how it finishes. In any case, I thank you once again for your constant feedback and encouragement and for the respect you show for the story independently of your tastes.
Cheers!
Date: November 29 2015 9:37 AM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
Oi, don't disrespect the Walking Dead! I love that show! Even though I haven't watched it in a while! It is the saving grace of the comic series!
So, anyway, I assume the next chapter will reveal
A) What happened to Casey
B) Whether the reducer was successful on Lisa
C) The execution of the nuclear strike
D) A and B
E) A and C
F) All of the above
I am intrigued
Author's Response:
There wasn't any disrespect in my comment. I love zombies and I love The Walking Dead, even though I have not been wathing it for a while as well.
Let's say that everything you listed will be covered in the next couple of weeks. I'll not provide any more details by now ;)
Cheers!
Date: November 29 2015 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
Am going to be honest and say am starting to really dislike Kelly more and more, she is starting to be a boring person to read its the same thing each time with her and how she thinks and how she goes about things, her person went down hill when you made her bigger.
The story has been a back and forth between Casey and Kelly all these chapters with what maybe four with Lisa and now only one with Ron. You made this third story nothing but Casey and Kelly and who will have the higher kill count by the end of the story.
Now with this upcoming chapter next week with Casey, i really hope she dosen't get any bigger than she is, if she does get bigger am starting to think that you just want to wright a story that is nothing but killing. Cliff hangers get old they don't need to be used every time.
I also think you have a thing with the U.S as you made it seem like they can't do anything right, from the way they acttack the girls to the wepons they used and how they seem to just stand around doing nothing, also all the killing the two girls have been doing to the people in the citys.
Kelly thinks that the people are the stupid ones, she is not doing a dam thing to not kill people, walking down the street killing anyone in her way is just one of the things wrong, she didn't need to that or walking through the bridgs when she could have just step over them all the same and if she wanted to go sight seeing she could have found a road filled with less people.
I just hope in the end both Kelly and Casey get whats coming to them and that there is some kind of payback to them for all they have done, killing them is to good for them, i hope in the end they have something humiliating for them as payback.
With a story with this much killing and having it be one sided is not fun to read or enjoy, can't really enjoy it.
Author's Response:
Thanks for letting me know. I would have never guessed that you disliked Kelly :P
Honestly, no disrespect meant, but there is nothing too different in this review from the previous ones you posted. You clearly don't like Kelly. You clearly don't like Casey. And you clearly don't like the tone of the story and the direction it has been taking for a very long time now. In summary: it would seem that you don't like the type of story I'm writing. Nothing bad with that. I mean, some people don't like Zombies... most of them don't watch The Walking Dead every week though. And if they did, I would not expect them to enjoy it.
I'm not even going to bother to comment on your mention to "my thing with the US". The only reason the story is set in the US is because I'm writing it in English and the US is the craddle of pop culture. Having said that, I believe that bringing nationalism into a discussion about either literature or fetish (whatever you prefer) is, to be kind, nonsense.
Cheers!
Date: November 28 2015 4:47 PM Title: Chapter 15. Big Apple
PAPA
Okay… so, she’s seriously lost it, if she thinks she can convince all the nations of the planet to simply submit. USA definitely won’t, at least not without sending everything they’ve got at her. And you, Papa, seemed to have forgotten that a nationwide-evac would have been out by now, especially for world leaders. There’s no way they would be inside the UN building. That’s like a mayor being marked for death residing in City Hall. That building IS A TARGET.
When the delusional bitch (that’s my nickname for K. Hanson) made her declaration in Hollner, everyone (especially every American city) would have been on high alert. To say that there were still officials in Washington is one thing. To say that the UN building in New York City is still full of delegates is something else altogether. It’s simply ludicrous.
FYI, I HAD gotten over Sykes and Archer, but it seems like you’re repeating their mistakes from Volume 2. I thought you said you were going to use the feedback from reviews to improve your story, but this chapter was much more of the same old, same old. The delusional bitch is once again asserting her dominance over the miniscule life forms around her. Only difference is, she’s doing it on a global scale.
I also think you could have put more focus on the President. He has not been ‘seen’ since Chapter 5, and is then only mentioned by McCallister and Brown. Now I find out that he has (FINALLY) decided to use nuclear weaponry, and I don’t even get to see his expression: ‘Carlson rubbed his face, hard. He could not believe he was actually agreeing to this. Deploying nuclear missiles on his own country… he’d be seen as a Presidential pariah. But then again, if there were going to be any Presidents to look back on his decision, then Kelly Hanson could not be allowed to roam free. Perhaps in time… a long time… he would be seen as the man who saved the world from a tyrant. There would be casualties, but in the end, there would be more so, if he did nothing. “All right then,” he said to Admiral Ward, resignedly. “You have authorization to the launch codes. Let’s nuke the bitch.”’
That’s what I was hoping to read. It would be more… dramatic, in my opinion.
Cheers.
Author's Response:
Papa? I did not know that we were on a nickname basis ;). Should I call you "Hatie" from now on? ;P
Ok, back to the review... we've discussed several times that one thing is what Kelly thinks and another is reality. Yes, she thinks she can submit all the nations in the world, including the USA. And yes, it's unlikely that it happens. I think we've had this conversation before ;)
I never said who was inside the UN building when Kelly ripped it open. Were they delegates and ambassadors? Were they "second-class" personnel? The thing is that Kelly does not know and she just guesses. I agree that ambassadors would be the first ones to be evacuated, but evacuating some thousands of people from the building is not so easy and Kelly got to New York awfully fast. Anyway, I guess it will be more productive to have this same discussion in a couple of chapters from now.
I had already guessed that you did not like Kelly Hanson too much. Her nickname kind of confirms my theory :P
As for how I use the feedback in the reviews: yes, I try to improve the story based on the feedback I get. That does not mean that I need to implement every single piece of feedback I get. I may consider sometimes, like this one, that my original idea was better than the feedback.
Finally, as for putting focus on the President: it was my creative choice. I used a chapter to show the President's temper when dealing with Kelly's threat, but my two characters in Air Force One are CAtherine McAllister and Director Brown, so I'm using them to explain what's going on. I think it works well. Your option could have worked, but I think that the way I was orienting the story my choice works better. It's a matter of opinions...
Cheers!