Date: November 10 2015 11:02 AM Title: Chapter 12. Reunion
OK, admittedly, K is not an idiot. She has systematically disabled the U.S. Government and one section of the Army, albeit in a rather simple manner.
However, she is either extremely stupid or naive in thinking that Casey or Lisa (ESPECIALLY CASEY) would just listen to her. She thinks that they are SUPPOSED to listen, like she has complete dominion over them. Furthermore she could have just crushed Lisa's head instead of trying to 'educate' her... after all, instant death is much different from near-death... it takes some time for it to happen. (At least a couple seconds) And then she thinks that she can just head over to the UN and arrange a conference... that is the dumbest idea yet! Like that reporter said, she is literally improvising her plan to rule. Even making Stan President was something that just came to her.
I can picture her quite clearly, all right. She is arrogant, short-tempered, and in the deepest state of denial. In that sense, she is even worse than Casey. Casey doesn't delude herself into thinking that she can be a benevolent Goddess. She knows she is beyond redemption and doesn't care at all. I just can't hate her the way I hate K... she is still slipping further into madness, and thinks that it is her purpose to take over the world... like Osborn of 1610 thought that God wanted him to kill Spider-Man.
In fact, I no longer care who it is. Whether it's Lisa or Casey, one of them has to confront her and give her a taste of reality. She is not omnipotent... any woman could become as powerful as her. So there needs to be a major problem that forces K to make a desperate decision. I don't care what: just make her really, really mad. Not psycho-mad but bloodthirsty... make her want to kill anyone who stands in her way... make her drop that phony delusional pose and reveal all the anger bubbling inside of her...
Whenever something deosn't go her way, K acts like a spoiled brat. She throws a tantrum: like when the military attacked her EVEN after her increase in size, when she found out that the President was not in Washington (she almost lost it), when someone suggested that she might be defeated, when she found Lisa coming to fight her... everyone of those moments was like a rod in her back. And all the things she's overlooked, from the FSD, to rest of the world... will be coming home to roost.
I noticed that in your postcript to angeloflife, you said no growth, but you were referring (incorrectly), to One-Punch Man, right?
Author's Response:
I think that we may be close to agreeing on this one! I did not do a complete review of all the previous comments, but this may be the first time!
Yes, Kelly is not stupid. And yes, she is making her plans up as she goes and overlooking several important things that may play bad for her in the future. The ones she is focusing on, though, she flawlessly executes: the government, the army, the pentagon, the FSD campus, the press, ...
One of her main problems is that she has got so powerful that she has convinced herself that she is invincible and this is actually weakening her, since it's making her act as too overconfident. It's also making her significantly less patient and much moodier (acting as a spolied brat, as you put it).
I agree that Casey is much more consequent with who she is (the problem is that she is a terrible person).
Anyway, these are the characters... now, let's see how the rest of the story plays out. I believe that I may still have a couple of surprises hidden in the plot for you.
Cheers!
P.S. Yes, I was referring to his reference to One-Punch Man. I have not made any comment (in any direction) on whether there will be other women growing more or not. And I won't make them...
Date: November 09 2015 10:09 AM Title: Chapter 12. Reunion
I'm sure you realize I was venting. I didn't expect you to have crossovers, though I am surprised at how little you know of the Manga:
(Saitama deosn't grow, he's like Superman only more badass)
I should tell you that I want to see a trial in this story, but I don't know if there is room for that. There must be LEGITIMATE closure, and leave no open endings, otherwise I don't know why I spent the last twelve or fifteen months reading this...
I also think that K is acting more like a child, as she gets more delusional. She also refuses to acknowledge the idea of anyone defeating her... as does Casey. Though she clearly saw the FSD as a threat, which means she thought that once she had gotten rid of them then her plan for global conquest was secure.
But Karma's a bitch, isn't it? She doesn't know about Ron and Mendel and there will be repercussions! At least, there must be!
Cheers, to your plans.
P.S. Should have my story ready soon.
Author's Response:
I kind of had guessed...
No, I'm not that familiar with manga. It's not that I don't like it at all, but it doesn't pick my interest as much as other topic.
I hope that you will consider the ending legitimate enough. I'm sure you'll tell me in a few weeks, when I post the Epilogue.
As for Kelly: yes, she is delusional and she rejects the possibility that someone can defeat her. She is more cunning than what you picture her, though. So far she has been successful enough with her strategy.
Of course, she has overlooked some dangers, and who knows what this will mean for her...
Cheers!
P.S. I will wait for your story to be ready!
[Report This]Date: November 08 2015 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 12. Reunion
Ahh you skipped the meat of this chapter! Lol leaving some to the imagine I see. Haha. Interesting how she met with Lisa, gotta be careful not to hurt her too bad or she will grow too! Still Kelly is seeing that Lisa and Casey are problems still. How will she deal with them? The government has already had some ridiculous casualties. How many people are still willing to try and fight? Keep it coming and keep up the great work!
Author's Response:
Sometimes some things if they are hinted ;)
Handling Lisa and Casey is a worse headache than she could have imagined, for sure. The rest of the resistance is definitely much easier...
I'm glad that you keep on enjoying the story.
Cheers!
Date: November 07 2015 4:55 PM Title: Chapter 12. Reunion
For me one of the most frustrating things that have been part of these last two stories parts 2 and 3, being the whole near death thing makes them bigger, it was fine the first time when they grew to 250 but that the idea to have it keep working like that each time when they came near death well, that is the typical thing that people use when doing these kind of stories and that it has been used so often is now old.
I think if you made part two a bit longer you could have closed out the stories than going to a part three with the growth in size, if you just ended it with one last fight with the three girls.
Part three is just for the killing, and destruction. For most part of the story it has been a back and forth of Kelly and than to Casey again with very little bit of Lisa here and there. as i thought there will be very little screen time of the other characters till the story has near reached the end with what mostly will be a chapter or two of the fighting and the stopping to two of these girls.
In the story it has been just over half of a day that has been more than enough time for the military to get themselves together to put a stop to this, just saying because when 9/11 happened they already had fighters in the sky ready to shoot down any plane that they need two with in the few hours of the attack.
Also just because Kelly destoryed the Pentagon dosen't meen the military no good, Just because its gone has not done anything to military power, sure there are military men there but not the main men that over see it and run it, once again the Pentagon is not the heart of the military and taking it out has not hurt the military.
Kelly has lost her shit, her and Casey are no better than one and another the only thing that is not the same is how they go about killing people.
Am starting to get tired of hearing Kelly talking like she knows it all, her words are nothing more than the words of a crazy person that has been slowly falling deeper into the madness of their own mind.
Casey's words are better because she is not kiding herself to who she is, she is a killer and she knows it, simple as that.
Anyway, story needs to finish up because its getting a bit old with the back and forth of Kelly and Casey and some of the things that are going on is getting frustrating to deal with more and more with each chapter.
Am with the guy below me, one punch man would have this stop by now and Across who is another character would have put a stop to them back in part two.
Also bring in a giant Ron he had six years to make it work on males have him go after Casey and Lisa be the one to stop Kelly, none of this not working on males thing.
Author's Response:
I'm afraid that this is becoming a little bit like Groudhog Day...
I understand you would like to have giant males in this story, but I did not, so the formula does not work on men. It did not work on men in Volume 2 (as a matter of fact, Ron does not know how to make it work on anyone else) and it will not work on men half a day later. It's a plot choice. I understand that you don't like it, but this doesn't turn the entire plot senseless. It would be like saying that the entire Pacific Rim story doesn't make sense because you don't like the need of two people connected between them to pilot a Jaeger. True, the story could have been explained with a single pilot, but someone decided that they preferred the other option because it opened up some interesting plot possiblities.
Regarding the reaction of the military: I explained it 2 chapters ago, it's coming, and it's coming soon. This chapter happens just after the previous one, so let's just give the fighter pilots a short while to get ready and take off :)
I think that we had already established in the previous comment that Kelly is delusional and Casey is a psycho. They did not change their characters in the last half an hour...
As for my choice on writing Volume 3 instead of making Volume 2 longer... I don't agree with you at all. I think that despite the death and destruction, Volume 3 is quite different in tone to Volume 2. To start with, it shows the fall of Kelly into her current state. She was not like this at all in Volume 2 and I tried to make it gradual and provide a good picture of her evolution. Based on the comments from other readers, I think I more or less got it right, even if it's evident that you do not enjoy this because you don't like the character she has become. It's this change in her character and her newly established mission to take over the world what will drive Volume 3 to its end.
And here is where I will make a gamble with you :) You seem to have a pretty good idea of where the story is going, since your main accusation is lack of originality. Let's do something: you make a proposal on what the story will look like in the coming chapters (what will happen to each of the girls and how will the story end) and we check how accurate it is when the story actually finishes? The story is written and I promise I won't change a thing (except for typo correction and editing) as I keep on posting it... Do you accept?
Finally, on the fact that making them grow when they are almost killed being old... well, this is the choice I made on how the growth would work. I know there are some other stories that touch on the subject, but not that many where it actually works in the dynamics it works in Side Effects. "No pain, no gain", a great and unfinished story from RustyRusty14 has the main character growing everytime she feels some pain and in "The magnificient Maggie" and "MonicaXL" the giantesses can grow by willpower and use it to heal themselves when they are attacked at their smaller sizes. While the idea might seem similar, I don't think it is. But since it's so unoriginal (and it's a concept I like), would you care to list a few of these other stories that are just the same?
Cheers!
P.S. There won't be any superhero growing to kill anyone in one blow...