Date: December 05 2015 3:55 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Carycomic, I hope the maid doesn't get Tom. I like the dynamic duo of Janine and Lina as the main giantesses of Tom.
Besides, if the maid was there, Janine wouldn't be walking naked around the house.
Date: November 26 2015 6:13 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Writteninthestars, I'm glad I'm not alone.
I can't even find the chat box to discuss this. I feel like popular stories like this one are the new chat boxes, haha.
I would not go that far that it is disgusting, but yes, I prefer the other layout much better. This new one seems more modern, but it seems to be missing lots of stuff, and I personally do not like the colors.
Yeah, I also hope a fix arrives soon.
[Report This]Date: November 26 2015 5:32 PM Title: Tom's Story
Anyone else dislike the new layout? Its so bad that I won't be making any new stories or adding to my ongoing ones. I explained why in a review on my story 'Little Devils'.
On another note, awesome chapter as always :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. Please don't allow your dislike of the new format to deter you from continuing to share your stories. I doubt the site administration intended to make the change in the hoes of alienating anyone and hopefully they will use the feedback to help provide a superior site. Cheers.
Date: November 23 2015 9:59 PM Title: Tom's Story
This new website change is not the best skin in my opinion. Is there a way to change it?
Also, anyone know where is the chat box?
Date: November 18 2015 7:43 AM Title: Tom's Story
@Maximus: I'm anal-retentive! And proud of it! :P
Date: November 17 2015 10:05 PM Title: Tom's Story
Oh I agree with that, Wombo, he kind of reminds me of Peewee from Porkys, a sex crazed adolescent :)
Author's Response:
Um, weren't we all at that age?
Date: November 17 2015 9:01 PM Title: Tom's Story
@gadget,
The main character is supposed to represent me. Lol.
Author's Response:
This story was predicated by a request from Tom with parameters identified by him. It seems to have found an audience more so than any other my other offerings, so good show Tom!
Date: November 17 2015 8:59 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Maximus,
When Giantesslover said that Janine always wins, he meant that Janine kinda outplays everyone. No one has really outplayed Janine except Karolina one time.
Date: November 17 2015 8:58 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Maximus
Hey I never said the story was badly written, in fact it's one of my favorites on this site now that I've caught up on it. And I'm not saying EVERY character is lacking personality, just the main character, he feels a bit like a perverted dude camera to me, who sometimes goes entire chapters without uttering a word. Every other character though has a distinct personality. And you're right this story IS leaning more towards erotica than a simple story, again, nothing wrong with that. In fact my main story is mostly erotic and nothing else to be honest.
Date: November 17 2015 8:51 PM Title: Tom's Story
I saw it, Cary, but didn't think anyone was still lame enough to point out typos ;)
And I've seen quite a few boring authors make them. Most readers probably fall asleep during the snooze fest and miss them, though.
Date: November 17 2015 7:27 PM Title: Tom's Story
@ Maximus: At least even the boring authors can spell "twist" properly. ;-)
"Twits and turns?" Still lmao.
Date: November 16 2015 10:29 PM Title: Tom's Story
Now that was a twist I did not expect at all.
Author's Response:
Well that's good then, :)
Date: November 12 2015 8:36 PM Title: Tom's Story
"You should never doubt what no one is sure of." ---Willy Wonka (Gene Wilder).
Date: November 12 2015 4:38 PM Title: Tom's Story
Well in that case, it would be a showdown. But I doubt all of them would be in the same bathroom at once.
[Report This]Date: November 12 2015 1:39 PM Title: Tom's Story
Not unless Sam, Tessa, and Jasmine have that showdown in the bathroom with Miss Addison. What could better climax could there be than a four-way free-for-all on the white tile floor of a girl's lav?
:-|
Wait! Let me rephrase that...
Date: November 10 2015 6:12 PM Title: Tom's Story
@Carycomic, Haha! Yeah, right.
A showdown has got to be much bigger than that. I suspect more action than a simple bathroom break.
Date: November 04 2015 4:23 PM Title: Tom's Story
Scratch that part about more characters. I think we reached a good number at the moment and each one needs their fair time to play with Tom.
They need time to build a reputation so that the readers will like them. Everyone likes Janine becuase of how much time she spent with Tom, and also how she made a promise to shove him in her ass, leaving us with excitement to look forward to.
In addition to Tom's constant happiness. People want to see Tom punished, and Janine suits that as well. Two birds, one Janine who can solve both issues.
I fancy women in control, dominant ones that don't ask permission to Tom. I liked Lina's gentleness, but her being patient and asking Tom kinda felt slow and bugged me a bit. Sure it was nice, but it wasn't exactly sexy until Lina decided to take control which was what she did the very last night.
Perhaps, Miss Addison is the adult version of Janine. Another woman who doesn't give a shit about Tom's charm and wants to enjoy Tom's body for her own pleasure. This might actually work, becuase of how you said that she was unmoved by Tom and also that she will "discipline" him.
In addition, people like the student/teacher relationship and maybe we can insert that "tutoring session" or "private lessons" themes in here. I could see Miss Addison as a cruel teacher, maybe giving what the readers were hoping for.
I don't know how clever Miss Addison is, but hopefully since she is older, her experience will allow her to use some techniques that Janine has never thought of.
I recommend one of the characters to say a list of possible things that they will do to Tom. Things that are extremely sexy or cruel. Things that make Tom shiver in excitement or fear. (She might not do all the things, but it makes readers exciting thinking. That she might do it.) Then, in reviews, people can list what they want.
Hope this helps.
Date: November 04 2015 3:51 PM Title: Tom's Story
People like sexy stuff. That's what Janine brought to the table. Lina had some of it, but it only lasted for a bit, and it seemed as though her actions were rushed becuase she had to hide Tom from Janine.
What made Janine sexy was her confidence and not showing any fear of anyone discovering her with Tom. She even let Tess feel her up and felt Tom stuck in her panties. Janine wasn't ashamed, she was proud that she did that and she enjoyed it in front of Tess.
That's what all the other giantesses are missing. The same type of sexual appeal that Janine had. Sam was heading in the right direction, but she had her fun only once, and now no one cares about her.
We feel for Tess, but since she is his sister, we don't expect sexual action there. But her character feels more important than Lina and is second to Janine as the most interesting giantess.
I'm not sure where you are going with this Miss Addison thing in how it connects to the story, but I will surely enjo her time with Tom. Perhaps, Janine or Lina have some sort of connection to Miss Addison.
Next up, the addition of characters. First, there's Tom and Tess. We know Janine is the target, so we expect a change. Then, (well, probably only I expected this), Lina gets hold of Tom. Her addition was good and it brought the gentleness back to the story and made Tom's dream come true. Then with Sam, we expected revenge from Sam to Tom. But after like 3 chapters, he is already gone to a new character which makes people feel disappointed, not becuase Tom is captured, but becuase it was not Janine.
I think this story might need more characters, becuase we don't want to settle too long on one person. Tom has to adjust and the best way is change. If he stays with one character, it becomes less interesting.
If you want to see a complicated multi character story, read Duggernaut's "Contract". It makes all his other stories more enjoyable. So to me, this story doesn't feel long at all.
Janine has built a rep that makes everyone wishing Tom could go back to her.
I also like how you keep making Tom use "his charm" to get women. If it worked for all these years in school, then why not now. I don't see why he should change it.
I want Tom to get back to Lina, but I approve of this teacher thing.
Nice third party scene. The old "if you didn't do it, and I didn't do it, then who did?" Scene. Love it. And Miss Addison was defiantely not expected.
With most stories, the middle always seems bad becuase the beginning was very strong and attractive and was like an advertisement. These awkward middle parts get settled in the end which makes the end more satisfying.
Good stuff, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: November 04 2015 1:29 PM Title: Tom's Story
Hi there.
I must admit, I do share the point of view of Cameron here. It's getting too long, and everytime we do think Janine will get him back, something happens, and he just gets away with everything he does so far.
I understand that the teacher will now show a bit of dominance, but there's now too many characters whereas lots of them deserved our attention, and didn't get it, or not enough, because there's always someone else coming to get Tom away.
Can't wait for you to get our Janine back ! Or even Sam, or Tess, I don't know. Whatever you want :)
Anyway, despite what I just said, your writing is still really enjoyable. Please do keep up !
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review I really appreciate your input. At this point all I can say is have a little faith and let it develop because in a few chapters shit and fan come together
[Report This]Date: November 03 2015 7:02 AM Title: Tom's Story
See "Carrie's Science Project" @ Giantess City Index (Shrunken Man Stories).