




Date: December 26 2014 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Getting Wet
Both stories are excellent and well-written. I especially like the Tina/Suzanne route, as I like the sexual nature of it. I like the whole revenge theme where Tina is his ex and he dumped her, and now Sam is helpless in her possession.
I'm excited about Suzanne coming over to Tina's--it's the best thing that could happen to the reader. :) All I can think about is how awesome Sam's last encounter with Suzanne was--down on the the board game, and then he's dwarfed between her pink socks, and she smiles down at him. Awesome! There's so much potential in this Tina/Suzanne/Sam threesome. And it need not just be physical. I really enjoy the dialogue you write, emphaszing their size and power differences--like Suzanne did simply by standing over Sam. Btw, I just started reading this story a few days ago.
If you're unsure of what to write... a creative game played by the three of them is a possibility--but write whatever you want. Really enjoying it.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the feedback, I'm glad you like it :D
Yes I myself like those parts too! (the ones that imply just how small Sam really is compared to them)
I encourage you t read my other story as well (tough it's not finished) if you enjoy a more violent theme.
A game sounds like fun, I'll certainly consider it if it fits well in the story, thanks!





Date: December 26 2014 10:46 AM Title: Chapter 14 - Getting Wet
So, Tina is going to play "hookee" in order to act like a "hooker?"
;-)