Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22 2014 7:08 PM Title: Power Shift

In chapter ll,  Adam was shrunk down to 6 inches tall (when his mother picks him up out of the middle of her bed) - then, in chapter lll he's suddenly down to 3 inches tall?

Is he slowly getting smaller, or what?    -just thought I'd point that out.

  Kinda strange for his mother to actually, 'Want' to do this to her own son, too.

On Purpose, I mean, it's just a little farfetched, I think.  Just my opinion tho', the story seemed to be getting off to a good start, but then it just felt kinda rushed after Sandy instantly puts him to work on her feet.  You would think that the fact that she just found her son shrunken down to such a miniature size that that in itself would take a little bit of 'getting used to', if you know what I mean...

I think you can still pull out of it though, maybe...

Just my  $0.02

Author's Response:

Fully taken on board, I'm going to try to adhere to these criticisms later on, thanks for reading.