Reviewer: oishi1 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 5:18 PM Title: Problems with A New Hire

still holds interest. Nice flow.

 

I don't know if this is just a me thing or not but "Lauren watched her leave, and waited for the door to close before sighing heavily. Walking back to her desk she sat in the chair heavily, and tapped a button situated beneath a speaker on her desk." 

the use of heavily twice so close together. I'd think in the second usage one would find another word or describe her weight collapsing on the seat or the hinges's reaction.

on to the next chapter.