Reviewer: swkswk123 Signed
Date: May 25 2015
Title: Chapter 1: Introduction
I log on to my account after years just to reply for this update.
This why I've been checking this site everyday. Finally an update! Hope this continues.
A little suggestion, whenever there is a NWO story, what I wanna see is how the hero interact with the world instead of just a few people around. That feels like something fall into the regular genre. Like it would be nice to see how hes parents interact with the alpha world, or in the school say his friends. I think that's an aspect I really want to see. That been said I still enjoy this story massively. and truly appreciate that you decide to pick it up again.
Author's Response: Hey swkswk123, I'm very flattered you logged in just to comment on the latest chapter!
I understand your point about how including more stories from other aspects of the NWO, like looking at his parents or friends, would help flesh out the world, but the very basic answer is that if it doesn't help Jack's story move along, then I'm not going to write about it. The whole narrative thus far has revolved around a single main character and his trials and tribulations, I've tried to add as much context as necessary without going into overbearing detail, and there is a lot of thought that has not been put onto the page that may become clearer in future chapters. Ultimately, this is a complex world and I've attempted to be as logical, realistic and true as I possibly can be in what I've covered - I can't think of everything, but it has spent a long time bouncing around my brain and I've been able to answer some of my own questions about things you raise.
In terms of Jack's experience in this NWO, he is young and introspective - he feels like the Alpha world is a scary place and spends a lot more time obsessing about the pre-Growth Hormone era than facing up to the reality of his own era. Jack's parents, for the record, are uneasy with the way humanity is going but comfortable, they both have safe jobs in areas still suited to Betas (Dad works in electronics, Mum works with children). The two other Beta kids, Delon and Shen, get by for various reasons: Delon is tall for a Beta and isn't as intimidated or uneasy around Alphas, Shen is highly intelligent and therefore of use to the Alpha majority, so he isn't picked on. Jack doesn't appear to have, or feel like he has, any kind of desirable qualities either for a future career, relationship, etc - so he retreats into his own mind.
Hope that's a bit of info to help flesh out the context, it's not explicitly mentioned but the characters follow these kind of rules to make the world believable without explaining every permutation of the NWO.
