This is a pretty fun story, complete with a healthy dosage of dramatic element.  Every time it seems Bobby has found some form of salvation to cling to, you thoroughly deprive him of that hope and trap him in a worse situation.  It makes for a good rollercoaster ride.

The varying reactions of each of Bobby's three friends to finding him tiny showed the diverse personalities he hangs out with quite well.  From Kim's disbelief and anger, to Ashley's joking and whimsical nature, and even Krista's upbeat encouraging were all unique and well portrayed.

I really like how you've written Brittany.  She's wicked, but not necessarily evil.  She uses what little justification available to her in order to use the shrinking powder, but she's yet to intentionally hurt anybody.  Hell, she's even apologized to both Krista and Samantha for shrinking them.  The only one she's been truly cruel to is Bobby, and her delusional mind tells her that he deserves it.  I think it's wrong, but I can't in good conscience call that evil.

You've done a great job in establishing Bobby's sense of dread pertaining to his new size.  Reading of his exploits throughout the school, an aura of danger and disdain was carried in Bobby's thoughts and words.  His entire time in the band room sounded particularly torturous.

Another good story from you overall.

I like how you continue to get a lot of characters involved in the story.  Not only that, but each of them has their own niche which demands special attention from the reader.  This helps to suck the reader in whilst still allowing the story to progress at break neck speeds.  Very well done.

That was pretty slick how Bobby took advantage of Candy being in conversation.  That must have been pretty frustrating for her, knowing that her little toy was escaping but not being able to do anything about it.  Great scene.

Megan surprised me in the last chapter with her offer to help, then surprised me again with her general behavior in this one.  Now, nothing she does will surprise me, as I've labeled her an A1 nut job.  In any case, I'm hoping to see more from her, if for no other reason than to figure out what's up with her.

It's good to see Bobby and Brittany reunited.  I also like how it's guilt, rather than love that makes her so determined to help him.  He's had a crush on her all this time, and she doesn't even know his number.  It's nice to see you stay with your initial premise, seeing as how she hasn't really had that much time to get to know him.

I do believe this is the first chapter in the story not to leave us on a desperate cliff hanger.  You're losing your edge.

I was wondering how Kim was going to get her hands on Bobby.  More importantly, I was curious to see what kind of person Kim actually was.  The cool thing is that I'm still not sure, especially with the way the chapter ended.  It's hard to tell whether she just likes to tease Bobby and is angry that he won't trust her, or if she is a legitimately cruel person.  Such ambiguity has me very anxious to read the next chapter.

I liked how Sarah felt she had to make sure everything was cool between her and Bobby in the car.  While Bobby wasn't too bothered by her eariy behavior, it didn't sit quite right with me.  It's good to know that, after coming to her senses, her previous actions really seemed wrong to her.  Of course, if she would have adhered to her promise of not playing with Bobby, not even a little bit, she wouldn't have lost him.  I'm sure she's freaking out right about now.

I can't stress enough how good you are at giving us readers Bobby's perspective.  Those little niches, such as his parts unknown comment and his babbling about the size of the mall building give his thoughts a greater sense of realism.  Keeping Jen as the dominant thought on his mind makes a lot of sense, too.  His descriptions continue to be great as well.

Maybe Bobby can take comfort in knowing that if he never grows back, that means Jen can stay big forever?

Oh, and one minor thing.  The word is terrified, not terrorfied.  Also, no rocket ship mentioning in this chapter?  What's up with that?

Holy hell, man! You sure know where to end 'em!

You did Kim exactly like I hoped you would. She likes to get under people's skin and get her way, but she really is a good person beneath it all. I especially liked the touch of bitterness you threw in there. It makes the idea of her caring about Bobby very believable.

Wow, I really didn't see that last twist coming. I, too, bought into Jen's fairy story whole-heartedly. The best thing about said twist, though, is that I really have no idea where you are going to go from here. I don't even know if Jen ever planned on switching back with Bobby in the first place. My mind was swimming with ideas and questions as I finished this chapter.

This chapter was amazing, and for a lot of different reasons, too! Great job all around.

Yeah, I figured Sarah would play with Bobby at least a little bit.  It's nice to see her come to her senses, though.  Things probably won't be so bad for him now, unless of course she loses him.

You had a lot of nice descriptions in this chapter, both in actions as well as scenery.  You write with balance, so the reader can visualize the scene yet not be bogged down in meaningless and boring details.  This chapter is one of the better examples of this.

Bobby's inner monologing once again puts the reader in his shoes.  He goes through a myriad of emotions and experiences in this chapter, so that is no small task.  I'm glad he's starting to adapt to his new size, because I've still got a feeling it's going to be a while before he sees Jen again.

Wow, thanks for adding the next chapter so quickly. I was sure you were going to leave us hanging for a while.

There's a lot to like in this chapter. The thing that sticks out to me, though, is how you convey the characters' feelings with actions instead of just words. This is difficult to do, but you pull it off quite well. Hell, even when the characters are in dialog, there's meaning behind their words. Very well done.

It was nice to see Bobby stabilze his relationships all around. He's way to stressed out to be isolated. I'm curious to see what tactic he employs to find out Jen's brithday wish.

Please keep up the good work.

Man, this is a great story.

Your writing has a unique charm about it; it just draws me in.  The characters really come to life.  I'm really interested not only in what becomes of them, but of what they're thinking along the way as well.

You're killing me with this mystery stuff, though.  I just have to know Jen's little secret.  You've set it up quite well, regardless of what it turns out to be.

Again, this is an awesome story, and I'm eager to see where you're going with it.

I found this story a while back, and was sad to think it would be among those stories in our community that would never be finished. I'm estatic that you haven't forgotten about it.

I really enjoy the dynamic between Nick and Elise. Both of these characters are witty and interesting on their own, but together they are perfect for what you are trying to accomplish (almost like you designed them for that purpose or something). I particularly empathize with Elise. Unlike a lot of people with our fetish (Nick included, apparently), I also believe in true equality rather than feminism or submissiveness. It's refreshing to read about a character who represents my beliefs, especially when she is the one in control.

As for what you are trying to do with this story, it is a great and entertaining endeavor. Using the gentler aspects of the fetish to present what is likely as realistic a relationship between a tiny man and an average-sized woman as possible just drew me in from the start. It's also a great way to dissect the true value of said relationship before the shrinking, which is always fun to read. Your pacing serves your goal exceptionally well, too.

Your descriptions are spot on, and you've thrown in some interesting plot elements. Great job all around.

I hope to see a new addition to this story soon. You've left us on that last cliff hanger for a while, now.

Oh, and Johnny Dangerously is one of my favorite all time movies. I'll forgive you making fun of it this time, seeing as how this story is amazing and all, but don't let it happen again.

Starting the chapter in flashback was a nice touch, and the subject of said flashback was of great interest, too.  Parents are a big issue with both of them, seeing as how they both live with theirs respectively and all.  I thought it was kinda funny how Bobby's parents called Jen's to tell them of the arrangement.  I don't know; normally that level of meddling would seem annoying (realistic, but annoying nonetheless), but it just made me laugh a bit.

Sarah once again tries her hand at obtaining Bobby.  That's gotta get pretty tiresome for Jen after awhile, let alone Bobby.  I think someone has something of a fetish...

Seeing the story through Bobby's eyes inherently leaves a bad taste in my mouth when reading Jack, which is great for the story.  I thought he was pretty clever, the subtle way in which he reminded Jen of her previous relationship, trying to plant that seed of doubt.

You did a great job with the mannerisms in this chapter.  It was easy to tell how uneasy Jen was around Jack (with Bobby watching,anyway).  Jen's natural reaction to remembering the nervousness of meeting Bobby's parents, as well as gazing off into the sea at the though of adapting to being tiny were brilliant strokes, too.

This story is setting up pretty well.  I'm eager to see what you've got planned.

That was intense, man!

That was a very noble move, allowing Jen some extra time at regular size.  It probably wasn't the brightest thing to do, but I guess that just shows how much he cares about her.  Too bad she didn't see it that way.

Jen knows how to hit somebody where it hurts.  Planning that date with Jack was one of the worst things she could do to Bobby.  It was interesting to find out Jack is just like that guy that Kim cheated on him with.  That gives justification to his jealousy.

Kim's back!  I was wondering when you were going to write her back into the story.  I'm definitely reading the next chapter now.