Penname: GTortoise [Contact] Real name: Nunya Bidness
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GH-X2 by imagin8 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 343] New!
Summary:

Jack, a 'regular'-sized 17-year-old in a world now populated predominantly by humans twice that height, struggles to cope with life in a school and society built for people far larger than he will ever be.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Giantess, Adventure, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Muscle, New World Order, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: GH-X2 Universe & Spin-Offs
Chapters: 45 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 138078 Read Count: 776905
[Report This] Published: September 12 2013 Updated: March 23 2024
Reviewer: GTortoise Signed
Date: April 04 2017 Title: Chapter 26: Benefaction

Let me start by saying I wouldn't be writing a review if the story wasn't well written and compelling. Parts of it are good, other parts are great. The worldbuilding is solid, the power dynamics in society are interesting. The characters are consistent and have good moments of introspection.

 

That said, I have some criticism. The later chapters of this story lose the tension of the first half. I'm not saying Caitlin has to be looming around every corner but the aftermath of their confrontation has been filled with some friendly chats, a budding friendship (?) with Penny, family life, and introspection. For quite a few chapters nothing has happened to maintain the tension that the beginning of the story started and the confrontation with Caitlin escalated.

 

The relationship with Penny seems platonic (mostly because her attributes are not commented on in most scenes where she appears aside from allusions to her size) and while a friendly female protector would be great; I don't feel there is any real romantic tension between them- just a sort of vague awkwardness.

 

If Caitlin is not going to be an imminent threat there has to be tension in the story coming from somewhere else- and 'overcoming the psychological trauma' isn't serving that purpose because the trauma has no real stakes: Jack isn't suicidal. He hasn't shown signs of "snapping" or having some sort of complete breakdown he just... feels bad.

 

 In summary: no matter how good your scene writing is, how well your characters are written, or how deep your worldbuilding goes - if a certain level of tension isn't maintained stories lose their appeal. If you're not going to maintain Caitlin as that tension my advice is find a way to heighten the tension in other aspects of Jack's life so that the stakes of each chapter rise from their current level of "I hope Penny texts me." 

 

I hope this doesn't come off as too harsh. Thank you for writing.



Author's Response:

This is a much-appreciated and honest review. In short - yes - there isn't an immediate source of tension sustaining the momentum at the moment, that will only return when Jack returns to school. For now, due to the slow/methodical pacing of the story, it's taking a while to guide Jack from Saturday afternoon/evening, when he was rescued, through to Tuesday morning, when he may well have to face Oakwood High once more. The 13 chapters from #5 through #18, which covered Jack's incarceration at Caitlin's place, covered around 24h of story time. The 8 chapters since have covered almost 48h, including a few revelations/flashbacks that have expanded upon things.

With regard to his trauma having no real stakes - PTSD isn't merely feeling 'bad', and it's justifiable that the character requires time to recover, even if it doesn't progress the story forward at a brisk pace. I need Jack to recuperate; time with Penny is something he both craves and needs, and the story wouldn't really work if Caitlin was re-introduced when he's already so broken - he would simply capitulate at her merest whim, and that would be that. Essentially, this is the 'we can rebuild him' montage, in real-time, which Caitlin/drama-lovers may find boring, but Penny/gentle-lovers will find appealing.

The vague awkwardness is super deliberate btw. It's my fetish (I'm joking).

Reviewer: GTortoise Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 02 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction

I sent some feedback on GC but I wanted to leave a note here as well. These last few chapters have been wonderful. If I seem overly critical at times its only because this story is one of a few masterpieces in the genre and as such I hold it to a very high standard :). 



Author's Response:

Admit it, you just like to offer unsolicited writing tips because that gets you off. Pervert.

Summary:

As his sister slowly grows, Kyle finds himself losing control of their relationship...and of himself.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Breast Enlargement, Gentle, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Growing Woman, Humiliation, Incest, Maternal, Odor, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, The Following story is appropriate for all audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 14660 Read Count: 223932
[Report This] Published: May 25 2016 Updated: June 29 2016
Reviewer: GTortoise Signed
Date: January 31 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Its so strange to me how the best stories on this site get so few comments.

Summary:

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.


A secret medical trial in a high security,  all womens penitentiary threatens to destabilise the balance of the prison ecosystem.  And maybe even the entire prison. 


Categories: Giantess, Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Breast Enlargement, Crush, Destruction, Feet, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Growing Woman, Humiliation, Muscle, Slow Size Change, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.), Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.), Giant (31 ft. to 50 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/f, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 107907 Read Count: 64640
[Report This] Published: June 28 2022 Updated: January 14 2023
Reviewer: GTortoise Signed
Date: July 06 2022 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: G37 Trial - Week 4

Wow this is great. 

Your descriptive language is great, concept is great. Not sure where the story is headed but I hope you take your time getting there. At the risk of sounding like a back-seat writer: its always disappointing when stories with such interesting character dynamics (rival gangs, tenuous power balance with the prison authority, etc.) devolve into a rampage story as soon as the giantess becomes big enough that they cant easily be stopped.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you! 


And nah, no worries. I don't want that happening anytime soon either. Part of the reason I enjoy the setting so much is because it IS still a prison. I won't go into spoilers but they'd need to be pretty big (or have multiple big people) to really rampage!