Giantess World

Penname: NotSirk [Contact] Real name: Kris

Member Since: July 13 2017
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Bio:

Definitely not that MrSirk guy......I think he's dead.

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MAJOR/Minor : Dance with fire by Kurogane335 Rated: R

[Reviews - 46]

Summary:

Based on NotSirk MAJOR/Minor universe; some characters may or may not appear in both stories :)

Old friends return to Old Creek and Alejandro his put in a burning dilemna. He'll have to decide how he stand sexually, mentally and what he see for his future, all while dealing with the most massive woman he's ever met....

Categories: Teenager (13-19), Breasts, Adult 30-39, BBW, Body Exploration, Butt, Gentle, Humiliation, Lesbians, Maternal, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 100306 Read Count: 132370

[Report This] Published: December 07 2017 Updated: January 22 2018

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 04 2018 Title: Chapter 25: Consequences

Okay so probably through habit I didn't realize you had uploaded two chapters and skipped a chapter. So now that I've read it in order and have added context and perspective I xan give an insightful comment.

Cherry Overrock! Best character!

Seriously though. Alejandro has some guts! Holy shit I would not walk into that room. I can see what you said about that dark moment being the key to the ending. It's almost perfect. Shannon in a bid to romance Alejandro doesn't realize she's just as bad as the MAJOR who damaged him. Wow!

Can't wait to see the end of this one!

Author's Response:
Well... It's over, but be careful, reading the actual final chapter before the Epilogue ^^

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 05 2018 Title: Chapter 28: Epilogue

Your stories ends in Old Creek park huh, possibly on the same day another minor of note visits on a brief vacation......I see what you did there.

Geez. What a rollercoaster ride this story was. At first I wasn't sure where it was going and then I thought it would be a typical romance with g/t elements, but it turned into and interesting drama involving social standings, power dynamics, abuse, and so much more. I'm honored to have this take place in a universe I created. Also STOP SHOWING ME UP!!!!

Giantesscity? In all the time I've been on this site I've never actually looked that site up. Uh. Go ahead? I mean I have no plans of posting anything there ever so you can do what you want with that. I have no presence there so I don't know if that helps or hurts things. Good luck.

Thank you for your inspired contributions to MAJOR/minor.

Author's Response:
Done ! You can find it here (if you suscribe to the forum) : https://www.giantesscity.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=12&p=1292558#p1292558

Now, I can happily await your next installments of this tale, as a simple reviewers... at least for now, who knows when I'll feel the itch to write about Aljandro, Shannon or some other MAJOR/minor coming into my mind to pester me !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 22 2018 Title: Chapter 29: (Bonus) Alaric and Ariel

Wow! Good for Alaric! No joke. I've become really attached to your characters! I really want to know what Lindsey's up to now, or Shannon and her family? Have they reconciled?! What's old Rando up to?! Ahhh!!! Why would you do this to me?!?!

Also just so you know. Since Ariel's a female minor....she has a significantly larger than normal chance of birthing a full minor or halfsie. I mean...That IS how Izzellah exists in the MAJOR/minor world! I hope Alaric's prepared for that! Geez I could just read a story about that! Ariel's really cute too. Her circumstances are probably fairly common for a minor. Lots of potential for abuse there by nature. She's really strong for surviving that.

Good add on! Why are people writing so much?!

Author's Response:
Thanks!

Don't worry, we will see more of Shannon, Lindsey and Alejandro (I plan to write a story about them in High School in New Orleans sooner or later). As for the kids... well, I suspected as much, but I don't think that Alaric really took it into consideration, he has found his soul-mate after all, he has time to think about it.

As for why I write so much... it's a mix of boredom and craving to write, kind of like a fire inside that calm down when I write. Thankfully, it isn't always on, so i can do other things !

The Random's Stories Factory by Kurogane335 Rated: X

[Reviews - 40]

Summary:

So, it's a place for me to write short fetish stories (usually one-shot) about a lot of potential interactions. I already know what I want to write for the second chapter, but if you've particuliar ideas, don't hesitate to tell them :) !

Categories: Crush, Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Adult 30-39, BBW, Mature (40-49), Butt, Couples, Entrapment, Gentle, Giant, Humiliation, Incest, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Muscle, New World Order, Slave, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 48632 Read Count: 245818

[Report This] Published: January 06 2018 Updated: December 25 2019

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 09 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

I actually really liked Fortune Reversal. a33;a33;a33;a33;a33; for that one.

Author's Response:
Glade you liked it. I may do more stories in this universe done the lane, who knows ;)

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 19 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

Responding here so that you see it,

I've said it before and I'll say it again. Go ahead and write what you want MAJOR/minors a free story online I have no attachment to. It's just a story. I don't care what you decide to write in it's universe and that goes for anybody! I don't know if there's really enough interest for a wiki though. MAJORS were generally two to three feet taller than minors for most of their evolution if that helps.

That being said I'm continually impressed by your drive to write! I could never sustain the format for this type of random reader created storytelling!

Author's Response:
Thanks ! Then, in the next few weeks/months, you can expect Fall of Mu (probably my darkest take on MAJOR/Minors, by far) :)

Truth been told, writing here has in fact allowed me to work on my draft novel a lot more, as strange as it may appears to be ^^. Don't know why, I guess it's a lot like going o the gym (which I don't haha) : The more you write the easiest it becomes o write more ! Also, I can't wait to see your next work, whatzver it may be !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Brotherly love

Initial thoughts: Wow.....Tim's a jerk! He completely tookcontrol of his brothers life in place of his own ideas for what was good for Alex (I hope I got the names right. Alex is the one that got gender bent right?) Not only that but for all his declarations of "love" for his "bro" Alex is just a concubine, a side dish, a sex slave because he actually loves someone else. Jerk! Alex should leave!

More well though chapter reactions: Tim is a JERK!! That can't be said enough! But there seem to be a lot of rather tragic factors for poor Alex. Like apparently being the only normal human in a family of god? What with the "Perfect" irresistible brother with magic powers, a mother who eat planets, a cursed father, and mysterious sisters. So living his own life would be difficult and inherently unfair, unable to compete or even find love at all as a human male because his brother seems born for the sole purpose of forcefully evolving the species by siring the next generation!*deep breath* GEEZ! That's high concept! Makes me wonder why the mother even bothered having Alex at all when he seemed doomed to be criminally overshadowed by his "Perfect" godly brother.

So anyway I feel like there's potential for that story mostly because I like that subject matter. "Normal struggling to live with abnormal, superior, magical, ect) It's almost like I wrote a story or three about that. That being said it feels like this is the last chapter of said story. Which might be an interesting twist. How will Alex cope as a woman with a selfish perpetually horny irresistible older brother? Can he still find happiness? Will he reject and escape his situation or embrace life as Tim's concubine? One of many probably. I hope it's not that second one, but I could read it!

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

So instead of deleting and reposting again I'll just do a second post. I'm writing this from a phone which makes posting long replies difficult. I may fix this when I get to a proper computer.

Finally writing thoughts.: You seem to excel at writing sexy high concept sci-fi stuff. My favorite being Fortune Reversal. So I say write what you like and don't feel bad about dropping a story for something else. That's what I did! Not that I don't have passion for MAJOR/minor, quite the opposite in fact. I already have way more stuff to write and written for that but sometimes you just have to do something different. Refresh the brain. That's why I like the story factory. Just throw ideas out and see what sticks. Done with Aunt Suzie. Then be done with Aunt Suzie. I've read it. I feel you could end a story like that anywhere with a decent and satisfying conclusion. Just do what you want! While I can say I personally want certain things I feel it's best you decide where to continue! I don't really have any story ideas on me know though.

Actually I could think of a story from Mayday where a microscopic father tries to reconnect with his non micro family. It would be kind of funny sad! Good luck!

Author's Response:
Whoa, thanks for the long reviews. I hadn't expected such well though out reaction to this chapter, haha ! Without spiling too much about Alex... his mother really love his father and was afraid he would feel lonely without a normal son... well, turned out it will be a girl now, but, even a Goddess can only do so much, i guess ^^

Also, as a special thanks, a tease for the next story about Shannon and Alejandro : there will be a scene of Shannon doing a very special strip-tease for Alejandro, with dark light and painting reacting to it. I won't say more, however ;) !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Nine is a great number

Just wanted to say that I had an idea for a one chapter sequel to "Brotherly Love" I don't know why but a bunch of ideas popped in my head from the little bits of world you teased. Know idea if I'll actually write it but I'm asking just in case.

Author's Response:
Go wild with it !

Elite Sister by Link Rated: R

[Reviews - 43]

Summary:

A cure for cancer. A cure for aging. Peaceful societies governed by the Elite — teens and preteens gifted with size, strength, and eternal youth.

Perfect, right?

Kyleigh certainly thought so. Outgoing and overconfident, she began training her shy and awkward sister for servitude at the age of nine. Two years later, as predicted, one of them did indeed become an Elite...

Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Gentle, New World Order, Slave, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.), Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.), Giant (31 ft. to 50 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 27543 Read Count: 74033

[Report This] Published: January 16 2018 Updated: March 03 2019

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 16 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm liking this one. I'll be keeping my eye on it.

Author's Response:
Thanks, NotSirk.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 17 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

These first two chapters have had great characterization for the girls. Moments like Ky assuming her future Elite status had protected her from Paisley or Les overthinking a trip to the bathroom really cement thier personalities more than just saying "Ky's charismatic and overconfident" or "Les is shy and neurotic" I like them both for different reasons. I kind of want them both to be elites even though that won't happen.

That being said: I'm guessing Les like everyone else, just because that's the most interesting outcome. It'll be fun to see if her personality changes considering her natural submissiveness and the fact she's been groomed for vassal(ship).....(hood)...(dom)?...Guessing suffixes aside, will she even be able to handle elite status? Does she even know how? And watching Ky struggle with the heartbreak of her crushed dream, she sassed her mom in the first chapter! Oh that would be the right kind of painful. Will she start to resent Les or help coach her in how an elite should act? So many possibilities! I can even imagine Les trying to be Ky's vassal anyway. That would be hilarious! So yeah that's my guess. I'd even wager Les has already shown some elite ability. How was Ky protected from Paisley's mind whatever? Why did Paisley seem more intimidated when Les interfered? What was Paisley doing in the bathroom?! Was it..............DRUGS?!?!

Enough bad jokes, and nonsense speculation. Good chapter.

Author's Response:
Lol, you made me laugh, NotSirk. I've written a few chapters ahead, and I must say...

Well, I can't give anything away. :)

Thank you for your insights!

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 19 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Wow.....Kyliegh Watts is a legend! She handled that situation way better than a heartbroken child should. I tend to read too much into things, but that felt like she was doing the right thing for her sister and family even though it hurt Les in the short term. Maybe when Les ascends she'll figure out what actually happened here.

That being said. Being an elite's not everything is this world. It's overhyped! Bunch of hyper intelligent, probably attractive, tall, vaguely godlike (except when they're actually godlike) beings, with the ability to make you a "vassal" (whatever that is....probably just a glorified secretary), or manipulate your mind, and have a virtually unlimited amount of authority and autonomy even over their own parents......eh *apathetic shrug* Sound like a bunch of chumps if you ask me. Humans are way more interesting. I mean it sounds like elites are basically plant people. You really wanna be part plant, Ky? Like a weird broccoli-girl? That's dumb...elites are dumb. "Elites are dumb"- NotSirk 2018 you can quote that at the beginning of the next chapter. So stay strong Ky! You are already an elite! Les still has a long way to go before she can even dream of catching up! Even if she grows to 200ft tall and can shoot lightning from her eyes (which I heard from a very credible source that elites can do) that won't mean a damn thing to Kyliegh Watts! Haha!

...Oh and great chapter.

Author's Response:
You'd be a great therapist for Ky...just the words she needs to hear right now.

Now that I think about it, she does remind me of some of your protags.

Thanks for the interesting remarks.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 19 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Elites just have it all don't they. Strength, speed, brains,size, they probably crap gold too! And what's this bullshit about not being able to refuse vassalship? (thanks for the suffix) Shut up, Lotus of the fifth Council! You really are a (lesser) titan. "Torment Breaker" more like NERD!

I am really curious about how Les feels about all this. Her greatest moment comes with the crushing of her sister's dreams. Will she even try to make Ky her vassal considering the whole no rights thing if Ky refuses! Even death! But if she doesn't it's been made clear that Ky's a catch apparently and at least one other elite wants her. That's a powder keg situation.

For now I hope she cuts Ky some slack. It's still raw and I'm genuinely surprised Ky hasn't lashed out more, but I think a confrontation is bound to happen. Especially as time passes and it becomes harder for Ky to maintain hope of becoming an elite. I hope this tension doesn't become a wedge between the sisters.

Author's Response:
HOW did you know they crap gold! It's almost as if you read ahead to the next chapter. :)

As for Ky, perhaps she hasn't lashed out as much because Les is...Les. Imagine lashing out at a kitten who randomly gains magical powers. Ok, perhaps not the best metaphor. ;)

Thanks for the insights, NotSirk.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 20 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

I'm going to go the other way with this and say Ky isn't trying to make Les her vassal. At least not intentionally, and I only say this because of chapter 3 where Ky insulted Les to provoke her into accepting the induced ascension. Now I can't read Ky's mind and I'm sure there are purely selfish aspects to this. She has to feed her own ego and grasp the relevence and recognition she hungers for afterall, but....and this is a big BUT, everything I've read so far leads me to believe Ky cares about her sister. Even when she thought she was going to become an elite she wanted Les as a vessel to boost her self confidence. (Because being a vassal is a good thing for some reason)...So hear me out.

Les has self confidence issues, becoming an elite won't change her personality (I think. I'm sure some jackass Lesser Titan has done studies in between making up these bullshit vassal laws, but I haven't read them.) so I think Ky realizes how dependent Les is some of which Ky is to blame for. Maybe this is Ky's way of easing Les into the leadership role she destined to have....while conveniently helping Ky save face and distract her from the crippling depression of not becoming what you wished you could be. That's my not at all factually substantiated, blind assumtion!

I don't think this is a tragedy. I think it's a blessing in diguise. Over time of course Les will literally and figuratively grown into her own, but right now? I think she still needs Ky to be in charge because she doesn't know how yet. If I'm wrong then this story's a lot darker than I thought it was. *Girl psychologically manipulates her sister into having extreme self esteem issues and becoming her slave* That's a rough story.

Good chapter!

Author's Response:
I too think Ky cares for her sister, perhaps more than she herself knows. However she's certainly far from perfect. Same with Les.

The Elite cancer will almost inevitably change their relationship, but that's the interesting part. I.e., how it changes and does it strengthen or tear down what really matters.

We'll see.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 21 2018 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I really love the relationship of these two and don't want them to be apart, but I'm getting scared!!

Good for Les. She deserves to have confidence and YES even feel superior! She is, if not already than soon enough. It may cause some friction but I think as she matures she'll learn control....although...I feel like there are seeds here that will lead Les to some...troublesome potentialities in the future. I'm actually more worried for Kyliegh in that regard.

And speaking of Ky. She has my vote for prime! Until further notice I've decided to hate Lesser Titan class elites! You're not busting drug rings you're making humans your slaves! For what reason?! They live a fraction of your lifetime and you outclass them in almost every conceivable way! I've had pets but I never wanted them to die when I did! There are some unanswered questions about vassalship that need inspecting with a fine tooth comb! What was I talking about?....Oh yeah! Kyliegh Watts for Earth Prime! It may be a child's naive dream but I think she can do it!

All that being said I just love the characterization in these little conversations. There's just the right amount of tension and affection. Normally someone like Ky would seem like a jerk but I just root for her determination. And Les' insecurity and passivity would seem annoying but it's not. I'm also just really jealous at how fast you people can write. That's not just you. There are quite a few excellent stories that seem to keep updating. I'm being left behind!!

Author's Response:
Elites and the 'superior' races definitely set themselves up to receive hate from humans of their world, and of course from readers. However we haven't seen much hate from the humans in story, presumably they've become indoctrinated to status quo. Perhaps all except Ky. We'll see.

As for writing fast, not so much. Most of these chapters were written and simply needed editing before posting. However, having reached the end of my pool of chapters, future updates will likely not be as frequent.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 23 2018 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

Good for Les! She still needs to work on her self confidence, but...Yes! Good for Jakob too! That had to be even harder to do after Les ascended! Really liked the end of this one. Y'know what I didn't like. You can guess I'll wait......

PAISLEY!! *bleeping* Paisley! Like say whatever you want about Ky! (I guess that's the accepted social structure of this bullshit society) she's a "human" you have such an extreme distaste for. Sure talk about claiming her if you want. I mean Ky would turn you down and lose her rights or her life (because that's fair), but it would be worth in my book! Les on the otherhand? I'm pretty sure she hard countered your mental influence before she was even induced! Step back a little! You have no idea if she'll be a titan or mega or....I don't know (intern?) class elite or not. And masturbating in the bathroom between classes?! I had more respect for you when I thought it was drugs.

Also Ky's totally sick! I hope she gets better soon, because I know she'd never lie about that!

Author's Response:
Lol, I figured you'd find Paisley's character less than appealing. Let's hope she doesn't brainwash Les too much...

Thanks, NotSirk!

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: March 01 2019 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Ah! Another chapter of "The Adventures of Ky and her Dumb Tree-Sister!" I'm actually rather interested in hearing more about the interpersonal relationships of humans and tree-people. This whole vassal scam that hasn't been fully explained.

Also Les......get it together! You're a tree god now! You're not only bringing in the main source of income now, but I'm pretty sure you could uppercut your mom into the stratosphere and in a week you'll literally be looking down on her. Use your plant biology to grow a set. If Ky were elite your mom would've already quit smoking by now. Which isn't good for Ky, if you need motivation!

Nice chapter! Thank you for writing it.

Author's Response:
Les does indeed need to get her stuff together, if only to deliver that metaphorical uppercut to her Mom! :)

What Sands Devour by Mouseyman99, Raziell Rated: X

[Reviews - 7]

Summary:

Narreyel was an Orasha huntress and warrior of the Clan Ashultis. At 12 feet tall and nigh indestructible, her people were treasured combatants, valuable in any fight presented. Often sought after to bolster any crew needing muscle and nerve to apply in any situation, and by those who had the coin to back it up, She was a towering giant, and all but unbeatable… save for the tale of the one who challenged everything she thought, everything she believed and everything she was deep down to her core, the most unlikely of adversaries that a huntress could be challenged by.

Her lunch.

Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Breasts, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Fantasy, Furry, Gentle, Giant, Insertion, Mouth Play, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 16393 Read Count: 10447

[Report This] Published: January 27 2018 Updated: December 23 2018

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: January 27 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story is actually incredible. Compelling, funny, steamy, and with a surprising amount of depth to the characters considering the adult content. Lowkey I didn't read the rating and didn't know it would go there until I was already invested. Great writing full of sexual tension and well, just regular tension. I didn't know if I wanted Rahbee to survive or get off for the first time in his bunboi life! Definitely didn't expect that ending and now I wanna know what happens next!

Also just loved the smaller worldbuiling moments like Rahbee's almost swears or Narreyell's race being constantly ready for action because males are so scarce. There's a bit of duality there since bunobios seem to have the opposite structure.

Author's Response:
ahahaha you are ON TO US xDDD

We are both old D&D hands and approach our world building from that perpective. Lay out the macro and let it filter down to the micro!

Their respective people's social structures are indeed almost opposite of one another.! We really wanted to play around with different species' evolutionary paths and how that might affect the development of their societies! I am also obviously a sucker for opposites attract, and couples who couldn't possibly be more different from one another and still physically be a couple xD

When you think about it, pred and prey concepts are areally just mataphors for sexual attraction and interaction, so I LOVE the idea of mixing things up and making them more than hungry lady and food, but for that you will to wait and see!

We are both old D&D hands and approach our world building from that perpective. Lay out the macro and let it filter down to the micro!

MAJOR/Minor : New Lives by Kurogane335 Rated: X

[Reviews - 65]

Summary:

A continuation from Dance with Fire, set in NotSirk MAJOR/Minor universe. I highly recommend reading his story to better understand this New World Order and all. Dance With Fire may be interesting, but I'll try to develop it without too much call back, for new reader's convenience. I'll try to put out a chapter every Saturday.

Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, BBW, Butt, Couples, Gentle, Humiliation, Lesbians, New World Order, Violent, Watersports
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 59 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 223239 Read Count: 234582

[Report This] Published: February 03 2018 Updated: August 26 2019

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: February 03 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Farewells

Oy! I got sniped for first comment on a new MAJOR/minor story! Damn you sleep cycle!!

Cherry, Cherry, Cherry, tsk, tsk, *shakes head* trying for the mythical MAJOR/minor twinway!? You flew too close to the sun!

Also it's just good to see these characters again! I wanna know what's up with the Ferrands! Not just the kids either I find the parents interesting as well. A new adventure begins! Jeez! Reading thismakes me want to start posting more MAJOR/minor!! Ah that's bad for me!

I didn't expect Izzy to leave such an impression on Linndsey! I might have to get Ms. Ivory and company down to New Orleans just for the drama! Anyway nice start. How do we know they didn't do a security check on Rando just to get a peek of him down to his undies huh?! HUH?! I see you MAJORS! You're not clever!

Author's Response:
Haha, too bad, you just got the silver medal !

Yeah, Cherry is quite the kinky girl... but is it her fault ? I mean, there is a genetic lab near her hometown and in there, a lot of MAJORS seems to grow a lot, wouldn't you think. Is it coincidence ? Probably, but onspiracy nutjobs still have their days.

I'm glad you're happy to see them again. We will see more of Jules and Ofelia too, probably once every 5 chapters (I like to add Interlude to my drafts, so we'll see ^^). Lindsey was quite smitten by Izzy, after all, she was the first minor she saw apart from her brother, and she had quite a character... and obviously, considering how much she likes her brother ? Well, feisty minors are attractive to her.

As for the airport security, I assure you sir that there is no camera in there. No, I would need a warrant to verify it, sorry. Kiding aside, at first I considered having a MAJOR doing a physical search, but I found it too invasive and Alejandro wouldn't ever allowed it, so we would have had a one shot only, and I want to write a very long story here, damn it !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: February 09 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Fly away

I find aspects of the air travel system highly questionable. Lindsey gets to chill in first class while Alejandro's stuck in the minor cheap seats! And who's the asshole telling their minor to act like an obnoxious douche?! You can't force a minor to do that! She should resist more! That's breaking some sort of law! I hate them both!!! Alejandro should be allowed to sit next to his sister!

Okay rant aside. I like the way Lin and Ran's relationship has developed. It seems more mature than in "Dance" where Lindsey was almost unbearably jealous of the bond. I like how the power dynamic shifts back and forth. Although honestly I'd prefer Al punch out that minor then have Lindsey put him to sleep. Lame!

Author's Response:
Well, we will see more of the Minor section, and it isn't actually that bad... when you don't have an asshole and his crazy Minor gal doing their best to make the rest of the passengers miserable ! Truth been told, Alejandro would probably love to punch her, but he doesn't like punching peoples, and especially girls. Except in self defense, of course.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed

Date: February 13 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Meeting the driver

New umm uh....New Lives! New New Lives?...2x New Lives? New2Lives?.....New Major/minor!

I like this chapter and the continued back and forth of Lind and Rando. I find it very interesting that Alejandro can't break his bond. I'll have to ellaborate on that. The bond I mean. It's a very....fluid power dynamic. I don't think Al or many minors know the true potential they have. I'm actually in a mood to finish off MAJOR/minor thanks to this, but that's for later.

So Al's a home owner now! That's a pretty presumptuous move from Ms. Matthewson. I can't help but notice that this kind gesture is also a way for her to keep tabs on him! She knows exactly where he lives, knows who is driving him around, presumably pays the bills and thus controls the utilities. Hmmmm...interesting to say the least. A very delicate line between Alejandro's desire for independence and Shannon's natural control as not just a MAJOR but a billionaire.

Really interested in those other unique minors!

Ahhh! I just want to write about Lindsey and Izzy together! Lin and Sab and Mabel fighting! Izzy cussing out Jim Paolini! It must happen!

Author's Response:
Well, concerning the bond, I just assumed that Minors hadn't that much control over it, but could use it for their interest if they understood how MAJORS feels about it. Now, their full potential probably eludes most of them, including Alejandro (in your Special, Izzy probably now a lot more about it than him, with your hint that her and Mei were a couple for a time, with bonding and all I suspect).

You're right that it's presomptuous from Shannon, it was clearly something she did behind the whole Ferrand family's back... and it gives her enormous power over both Alejandro and Lindsey, while being overall really great for both of them : they live even closer from their High School now, with a house and all, and they have someone at their beck and call to go wherever they want in or near New Orleans... But Shannon will always know where they are.

I'm happy that you want to write more about MAJOR/Minor but... I want to read more about Caretaker also ! I want to see Thomas tell Luna "Send me back you arrogant divinity!"

But I also want to read more about Izzy and all... Dilemma !

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