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Member Since: July 13 2017
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Definitely not that MrSirk guy......I think he's dead.


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Fracture Factor X the Retroactive Effect by classified Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 46]
Summary:

What if the Mandela Effect was more than the commonly claimed poor memory, what if it had a cause and somehow it changed a girl from the 1600's into a giantess?

What will she do at around 150ft tall in a town still stuck in the dark ages? Well it's a sure thing some of the town's inhabitant's won't bond well to the situlation.

 

Please note: Some might find the content objectionable or otherwise offensive and that views expressed in any part of the story don't by default align with that of the author.


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Crush, Feet, Humiliation, Mouth Play, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 30 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 136316 Read Count: 144763
[Report This] Published: November 27 2017 Updated: November 04 2021
Reviewer: NotSirk Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 13 2018 Title: Chapter 20: 17th Century Grand Theft Auto

This was a very.....gray chapter.?

The whole encounter with Douglas was so muddy from almost the very start and I think the entire interaction perfecty reflects Justine's fractured mindset. Despite me firmly believing Justine has made an important decision in how she treats humans and percieves them as food, she is still struggling with it. I'm very surprised she regurgitated the two from before and even spared Randall. I think she's trying to establish guidelines for when it's acceptable to eat people even if I think she'll break those lines if pushed far enough. Very interesting development in her giantess philosophy.

As for Douglas? I actually kind of hate him. He's a very polarizing character simultaneously showing Justine the kindness and understanding she's desperate for while expertly manipulating her. Dangerous. I wonder what she'd think if she knew the whole story. Randal was an ass but Douglas may have very well destroyed his livelihood and nearly got him killed! Most justified rivalry to ever exist! And I hope him being an "alchemist" isn't an empty promis. The odds are grim but even a slight hope that Justine can get smaller is worth it. Although I'd personally still keep her larger than humans, just not so large it's too hard to eat. :P.....I wonder how he'll feel about Justine eating his grandson?

Speaking of Marvin he wins a Darwin award. What brain malfunction leads you to think sexually molesting and assaulting a giantess is a good idea?! It almost justifies his death! Another very morally ambiguous moment there and is a orime example of Justine steal seeing humans as a food source. She justified his consumption very easily, although in fairness that is a particular sore spot for her.

Technical advice: The transistion between Justine and Samantha's perspective should be separate paragraphs. It was confusing to read at first. 

Great chapter.

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for the Technical advice and sorry that how I wrote the change in perspective caused confusion. I will try to keep it in mind for when a transition of perspectives happens in the story. This chapter was longer than I planned and longer than the next one I am planning update the story with. Also there were things that happened this chapter that will lead to her becoming more proactive in the next chapter.

Marvin certainly rubbed salt on the wrong wound there and paid for it dearly. In his case he likely didn't think she would notice and used the fact she would be unaware as justification for taking care of his relatively new urges. If Douglas found out what he did and what happened to him Douglas would likely think he was the biggest fool on earth. On the other hand I am sure he would be upset and not be quite as understanding of Justine's reaction to what he did.

Russel was close to being eaten alive, but I think by just enough of Justine's guilt overcoming her anger she spared him from that fate. However being stuck 40 feet above ground on a tree branch still makes for an interesting punishment after being treated like a toy and nearly sliding down her throat.

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Date: February 22 2018 Title: Chapter 21: Her Next Agenda is Retribution

It's clear the "fracture" in Fracture Factor is Justine's mind. I don't even know what to say. I've been desensitized to Justine's actions now. Eating Lewis' mom isn't even the worst thing she's done. I'll tell you what though? She'll have to answer for that one if the God she believes in does exist. Add it to the list. Even killing Lewis would've been a huge leap for her flimsily defined justice, but eating his mom?! You had a mom too Justine! Is she on the hook for all the people you've eaten?! Cause that's way worse than Lewis paralyzing your bro! 

Okay rant over. Honestly I'm kind of glad Justine doesnlt feel too guilty about Marvin or mama Lewis. We've been there and done that with the guilt trips. Al least deluded avenging angel Justine had the illusion of conviction regardless of how temporary that unhealthy mindset was. It's a little frustrating to see Justine still struggling to find her footing and come to terms with what she is, but I think it's a journey. One day she will achieve her final form! And ultimately she'll be better for it. Stable. Confident. Capable. Not necessarily good for the small humans depending on where she ends up on the ol' giantess spectrum between gentle and violent, but she'll either be healthy enough to make ammends for the people she's hurt and the lives she's taken, or she won't care! Humans are food and only the ones she likes deserve to live. Who's gonna stop her? Not me! I thankfully live in a crazy giantess free country.

Reach your final form Justine. Good luck!

Oh and John! Stop being such a bitch! Just talk to Justine! Move! Do something! Take your hot 25 year old widow and skip town with the kids! There's literally no reason to stay in Justine country! Take up the sword! Slay a dragon! Start a shoe shop in the city! I don't know! But your mom was a bitch and cowering in fear is boring. Justine is kind of okay with you and probably won't eat you even if she's hungry. Work with that!



Author's Response:

To the relatively primitive culture she lives in many people that merely encounter Justine experience quite a psychological shock to their state of mind. So in the early stages for someone that actually underwent such a transformation into a giantess without any explanations is bound to cause some unhealthy mental health issues to crop up. A fracture in Justine's mind that is struggling to deal with the reality of what has happened to her is a fairly natural response.

It also seems your not the only one desensitized to Justine's action's as she herself is starting to drift away slipping deeper into her darker desires. Making amends seems much less likely now as her town likely only sees her as a man eating monster and someone that absolutely can't be trusted. If she tries for a more benevolent path Justine will likely end up leaving town and taking those she cares about with her.

Though if she ended up viewing humans as mere food while only treating the one's she like's as people then I think people would want to get and stay on her good side. Christina would be the most horrified as she really finds the idea of being swallowed alive terrifying. Kevin and Mark's reaction to such a dark downturn of her personality would create drama for sure.

The next chapter I update the story with will be longer and hopefully of higher quality as I had a hard time getting this chapter to work with me the way I had envisioned it.

Thanks again NotSirk for the review and hopefully Justine settles on how she will treat her fellow smaller human beings. For their sake I hope she keeps seeing them as people, but on the other hand it's more fun if she viewed them as food.

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Date: March 10 2018 Title: Chapter 23: Gathering together

Okay now I'm going to try to keep this brief for a change. Like I've been kind of sympathetic to the townspeople so far y'know. I like Justine and want her to succeed but I've also called her out on the unspeakable shit she's done. Well that changes now! Fuck these citizens. They don't disserve to even pick through Justine's fecal waste! And fuck Christina! I reallllly felt for her too! It's gonna be hard to comeback from this one. If she even lives long enough. Justine's an eat first then feel guilty about it later but not enough to vomit you back up kind of giantess. I'm on team takeover!



Author's Response:

Chapter 24 posted, so team takeover can cheer Justine on to victory! Be prepared though, it's a bit of a long ride.

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Date: April 23 2018 Title: Chapter 24: Intersecting tribulations

What an amzing and detailed turn this has been. Justine finally makes a decision and it only took Sarah dying for her to do it. That's really sad.......but I can't say Justine didn't deserve it. Quite fitting that her punishment would be losing the people she cares about like the families of the peole she's eaten. Hopefully she'll be better as her size and self appointed station as queen demands. Although that's a pretty shitty town to be queen of. My advice: Find the smartest folks you can (I know. Nearly impossible in that backwater dumpster full of inbred morons and sexual predators) then rebuild the infrastructure. Use slave labor if you have to. Start with with a decent home for you and yours then I don't know schools and shit I guess. What does this town even do? Farming?

Anyway now that my contractually obligated Justine criticism is over. Why is is Westly still alive! Seriously! Fuck him! Fuck that town! You could make an argument for Christine sure, she's just an emu bellied, sack sucking, coward. But Westly?! Bah! I'm mad about that! I guess he's faith that he used as an excuse to commit countless atrocities while creating a self serving viel of divine hypocrisy was rewarded! Amen! Fuck off! 

I applaud Justine's mercy. For a heel turn she was surprisingly justified and composed. I think she came out on top for once. She only killed like two people. Good luck Justine.

Also just great to see this story back! Thank you for writing it.



Author's Response:

I don't think the town could build a shelter large enough to house Justine even if she enslaved them all to build it. Though just picturing them trying to build even a basic 50 foot high by 50 foot wide by 200 foot long shelter for her to roll under is quite fascinating.

As for Wesley I did change his fate upon realizing how hard it would be for Justine feel justification in killing him. It was really close however and if Christina didn't manage to pipe up he would have toured the rest of Justine's digestive tract for sure. For the next few days I would say people in town should watch their attitudes around Justine as she surely holds plenty of resentment toward them after Sarah's tragic death.

Also thank you for your appreciation of the story and hope you enjoy the next chapter posted.

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Date: May 02 2018 Title: Chapter 25: An Unwitting Inside Tour

Real talk......I probably wouldn't be reading this story if it weren't so well written. I'm actually fine with vore most times, but this was a darker flavor of chocolate than I can tolerate. Too refined!

So first. Justine you can't just eat people because you don't like them! I mean you're a giant and can do whatever you want! DON'T EAT ME! But that one just felt petty. Although in fairness I think people should know by now not to insult their very fickle giant queen. Dumb move on Aria's part. Bringing up Sarah. It's like she wanted to die. I don't blame her. That town sucks so hard an early grave might be the better option. 

But Bertram. DAMN! My spirit's broken on that one. He just wanted to see his mama! I hope that golden gate does exist so he can be with his motner again. Maybe then he'll have reached his goal in a way.......More likely they'll be sifting the corpse of a sad little boy who just missed his mother out of Justine's morning movement....Tragic. I only joke to stop myself from crying. I'll remember you Bert! 

Awww and Justine misses Sarah. I'd feel bad for her if she hadn't just digested a young boy as grief stricken as she is. She should never forget how that pain feels. Everytime she eats someone she's inflicting that on someone else.

Amazing writing! Looking forward to a hopefully slightly brighter chapter, but I won't hold my breath.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the praise of the quality of my writing. It's something that took years to get better at and I still feel like my writing skills fall quite a bit short of where I would prefer to be.

Admittedly this chapter is most likely going to be one of the darkest ones in the story as Justine does have a conscience and would never have intentionally eaten Bertram. It was interesting to write for the first half, but writing the ending was actually kind of hard. A truly horrifying tragic fate for the poor young lad to experience first hand. If or more likely when Justine finds out she digested Bertram she will most certainly be devastated. His father will likely become consumed by a quest for vengeance believing Justine is a merciless child eating monster. (Pun not intended.)

Aria is someone that Justine normally would have mildly teased and punished, but the wrong set of emotions all concocted together. If Sarah didn't die and Aria had held back more of her unpleasant comments Justine most likely would have just licked her and maybe figured out some other way(s) to humiliate her. Then after some payback turned her over to whatever is left of the town's government to be judged for theft. But that time came and went, so she will be merely part of Justine's next bowel movement.

Giantess sex by giantess jessica Rated: X starstarstarstar [Reviews - 10]
Summary: A British giantess story
Categories: Giantess, Breasts, Body Exploration, Butt, Insertion, Mouth Play, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Kates Series
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1377 Read Count: 11384
[Report This] Published: November 30 2017 Updated: May 11 2018
Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: November 30 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Intrest

This story is actually leaps and bounds better than your last one. It has more structure to it and i understand the characters better. Very clever woman to recognize a man's true motivations. 

Are you writing this on a cellphone? I just ask because the format is strange to me. Good on you if that's the case. I've tried cellphone writing before and it's a pain in the ass. 



Author's Response: that is from a flip phone and i was sex deprived so i needed a sex story. It had alot of meaning to my boyfriend i made it for.

MAJOR/Minor : The Mac Ferlan’s Incident by Kurogane335 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 6]
Summary:

18 years old Alejandro remember a traumatic moment of his life as a minor, while he ponders what is life will be from now on.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Crush, Entrapment, Giant, Humiliation, New World Order
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: M/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5933 Read Count: 14132
[Report This] Published: December 04 2017 Updated: December 05 2017
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Date: December 04 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 : Nightmare of a distant past

......Wow!....Okay let's do this!

First: How did Jessica a side character to a side character only briefly in ONE chapter get a mention?! Snub! Izzy got snubbed!

Besides that I'm impressed with the world building. Things like Alejandro's birth or MAJORS fighting over tv size and childishly claiming him! That's good. And bond raped! Wow! I need to see how that went down. It is something that can happen! I won't cover it more than you've seen though. Kinda clashes with the more light hearted tone of my story.

Speaking of Alejando! Like no joke Izzy would love him! Fun fact: She lost her right arm in Small the debut story she also stars in. Sooo that's a coincidence! If ever there were a minor worth meeteing! She'd probably hate him at first though. He'd steal her thunder! 

Ummm I really don't know what to say except I want to know more about him. And you might be a better writer than me! I'm gonna give it another read!



Author's Response:

Thanks ! Don't worry about Izzy, she'll have a mention very soon, and an important one at that !

I didn't know she had lost an arm in a previous story. Alejandro and her could bond over it haha ! As for the writing part... turth been told, I try to become a Fantasy writer and thus have written a lot (350+ A4 pages) of story prior to this, it helps. But man, it is hard writing it in English and not French !

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Date: December 05 2017 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 : The Incident

Geez!......You said this would be a brutal story! I was warned but......wow. This is a darker side to MAJOR/minor. 

I don't blame Alejandro at all for never wanting a bond.....how does he even trust his family?! Alaric would be the only one! I'd never want to be near another MAJOR! It makes me wonder what would happen to abused minors? They probably have permanent mental and physical healthcare options since they're more "frail" and seen as precious. 

I don't know if it was a guess or what but you described pretty close what a bond is like and wow being forced on is a lot less pleasant than even what happened to Izzy. Who is this insane Jonathan who would abuse an eight year old? And he had a gun at fourteeen?! Well MAJORS are capable of driving at ten so I believe it.

How does Alejandro recover from this!? 

Oh and it's amazing you wrote all this without english being your primary language. As a English speaking American that always impresses me because I don't know any other language. Don't feel a need to use Izzy unless you want to. This is great as it's own thing. No pressure to use my characters.



Author's Response:

Well, he trusts his parents because he knows they love him, and they are more open minded than most MAJORS, since they taught him how to speak, write and read three languages before he was eight. And he knows they love him, so he's able to trust them or his sister. Less than Alaric, obviously but still. He doesn't rust MAJORS right now, probably never will, but it doesn't mean that he is not attracted by some girls (Rebecca or Jessica from the main series would be his go to physically). But they would need to learn to change their behaviour to have a chance with him, haha !

 

 

als, you'll see how he coped with his trauma in the next ans final chapter, coming our after my work, in eight hours ^^. 

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 05 2017 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 : The aftermath

Oh! His name was Joseph! Well I feel silly. I'm bad with common names. Not that he's a person worth remembering.

Overall a very touching and detailed perspective on the dangers a minor can face. It would be rare for it to go that badly but yeah it's not all fun and games. I liked all the subtle nods to minor culture. Being slightly chunky little piggies for MAJORS to cuddle, some MAJORS seeing them as glorified pets, not being able to read and write (although that's been slowly changing. Alejandro is a prime example) Just good stuff. Alejandro is a layered character I just want to know more about! How does he handle different situations? How is he around MAJORS now? What would he do at a school like Winton where he'd be around them all the time? So many questions!

I laughed when Izzy was featured in a news article but honestly that is something Winton would brag about to encourage new minors. Good detail there. Also love the website.

I truly hope any fan of MAJOR/minor (Which is like ten people, sorry) read this gem. And yeah. I think Alejandro might have a cameo if I can figure out a believable reason for him to be at Winton.



Author's Response:

Haha, thanks a lot ! Well, touching on Alejandro's behaviour toward MAJORS... I see him as being a sort of Inverse-Rebecca. He's quite like Izzy in that he is extremely proud of his abilities and autonomy, and wants to be respected as an equal, but life as taught him to not be blunt with this idea. Power moves have to be made by minor, but not like those Cretinosaurus Rex the MAJORS sometimes do. For Alejandro, a power-move would be to use is very nature as a minor to get out of a bad situation, by playing on the widely shared "cute factor" that all minors have when it comes to MAJORS, with the added bonus of him being that poor little kitten with three legs still trying to advance and who's so cute and all that.

In a sense, I see Izzy as the autunomous, obllivious and frank minor. Alejandro would be the autnomous, cynical and frank minor. If he doesn't like a MAJOR, he'll say it to it. And then he'll had a punch in the guts : "You're offended, you big oaf ? What are you gonna do, eh ? Crush my arm ?", that kid of jab, where Izzy will insult and berate them more bluntly.

Just like Izzy, he's in a difficult place. He knows that if he want to have a lover, or found a family, he will end with a MAJOR, that's almost a given, minor are too few. But he doesn't trust them, they have to actually earn it and it's a case by case basis. So, he's attracted by MAJOR women physically, but those he has the hots for are often the one who see the minors are inherently incapable of being much more than a glorified pet. But he's quite sttuborn. If a girl wants to bond with him, she should better be ready to accept him as he is, because he sure as Hell won't change who he is to please a MAJOR... or anyone.

Anyway, thanks for the reviews !

MAJOR/Minor : Dance with fire by Kurogane335 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 46]
Summary:

Based on NotSirk MAJOR/Minor universe; some characters may or may not appear in both stories :)

Old friends return to Old Creek and Alejandro his put in a burning dilemna. He'll have to decide how he stand sexually, mentally and what he see for his future, all while dealing with the most massive woman he's ever met....


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Breasts, Adult 30-39, BBW, Body Exploration, Butt, Gentle, Humiliation, Lesbians, Maternal, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 100306 Read Count: 132334
[Report This] Published: December 07 2017 Updated: January 22 2018
Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: December 08 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Preparation

Okay so, clearly someone was busy writing FOUR CHAPTERS!!!! in the time it took me to write one! I don't feel upstaged....Anyway I gots reading to do.

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Date: December 09 2017 Title: Chapter 4: Back and forth

Okay......after reading this, then re-reading this, then reading it again. First thoughts?....I kinda hate Shannon, but more on that later.

First I love the worldbuilding. Mentioning locations like New Orleans help flesh out the world. Establishing Old Creek as a small town by saying they only had one car rental place.

I'm loving Alejandro's family! The father's strong but caring, the mother sets up potential suitors, Lindsay's just a cutie! Good on her for getting Alejandro out of his shell....and not letting him get crushed. You really sell the strength of the MAJORS when a little girl casually out lifts her older brother. Or the inescapable grip of a young child who still had baby fat and.....did Mac Ferlan punch a kid?! It's implied Shannon is closer to Alejandro's age and he was 8 when Josh was alive and 14 so did a teenager deck a 8 year old girl?! MAJORS are aggressive but Mac Ferlan is insane!

Okay Shannon. Damn she's huge. I imagine she's even taller than Ignacio who would be the minor equivalent of 6'5. Third talest in the country! Or was it the world? Huge! Also you really nail her casual arrogance. I love the line."As naturally above him as he was above ants!" She's great, but...........You don't just get to pick up Alejandro BITCH!! YEAH you fucked up! Go eat at the non existent kids table. Alejandro shouldn't have to move for you!

So yeah I'm enjoying this!



Author's Response:

Haha, thanks ! I think you'll like Chapter 5, out in some second from now. Honestly, the story is so easy to tell thanks to your awesome wolrd-building. Your last chapter blew my mind, I'll have to deal with the bond deeper than intended at first, because of it ^^. In any case, Alejandro and Shannon's growth as character will gappen (relatively soon). The night has to pass, before that however. :)

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Date: December 09 2017 Title: Chapter 5: The titan and the flea

I'll have to agree and disagree on Pix's perspective on Alejandro. His attraction to Shannon does feel jarring considering his past trauma with MAJORS but I viewed it as all introspection which justifies it more for me. He's only thinking these things and not acting on them. Frankly Alejandro comes off as kind of rude to Shannon. I don't blame him considering she groped him as soon as she saw him, but specifically informing Shannon he never once thought of reading up on her or not being in her business' "target demographic" comes off as a huge burn! How did he get away with that?!

I do find it odd he's never once seen a minor before. I know Old Creek is small time compared to the fictitious Winton Heights: A well off suburb in the outskirts of Golden Coast an equally fictitious region of California! (If people didn't know that because I rarely explain locations now you do!) but I figured with his family's amount of wealth they might've tried something? But then again considering the Mac Ferlan incident happened when he was eight I can understand why maybe he hasn't met at least one other minor. Izzy might have it better than I thought. It seems like he's the only minor in Old Creek and that's kind of sad.



Author's Response:

Well, Alejandro can be kind of insensitive at times, but most MAJORS will let it slide because of his past. I mean, does anyone would want to be called a Mac Ferlan or something by the little guy ? I don't think so. Plus, 'Rando is really conscious that in his world he has to do ten times more than the MAJORS around him to get even a modicum of respect. Therefore, he really doesn't hesitate to punch where it hurts. In his eyes, if the MAJOR can't get his or her ego bruised, he/she has no business bothering him.

Truthfully, I find it really hard to both depict Alejandro's physical interest in Shannon and her mental repulsion because of her behaviour. I'll try to improve on it, both in future cases, but also by showing where he comes from (next chapter is basically about why he had forgotten Shannon and so many other things. The next one will be about... oh, well, you'll see, I don't want to spoil the fun ^^).

Concerning Old Creek, yeah, Alejandro's situation is sad. It's a small town, and that's actually why his parents met and fell in love together. plus, their job is here, and they loved it too much to move at first. And after the Incident, they were afraid that their eldest boy wouldn't be able to endure the changes without going crazy. So they stayed.

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Date: December 11 2017 Title: Chapter 9: Heart to heart

Geez! You have some of the fastest turnaround I've ever seen! A little refinement and you could get a job doing this professionally! I blink and there's two new chapters.

Okay: Shannon get your shit together! What the fuck are you doing?! You're a MAJOR not a bitch in heat! Show a least the illusion of composure!

I have to wonder what's going through Jandro's head here. One heartfelt conversation where she was constantly talking over him does not a lover make. Is he falling for her whiles? I know he only agreed to make out a little and honestly he's a healthy young man so it makes a little sense but still. It still feels a little too easy and too soon. It's been less than a day since they've reunited. Shannon's been pretty transparent in what she wants and that taints her words of changing MAJOR's perspective and the future a little too. She seems like a nice and caring young woman but she'a also a brutal negotiator! Don't forget that Alejandro!

Soo ot seems a little bit convenient. At least the timing. It has me slighty suspicious Shannon is a tier 3. I'm interested in the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Next chapter will try to deal with Alejandro's side. All I can tell is hat he is in a strange state of mind, the last two days have been nothing but new experiences to him, he's a little lost right now... But he sax something in Shannon when they kissed. Also, he has not fallen yet ! XD

 

Thanks for the professional writer comparison. My dream iq to become one (but I'm not betting on it). Strangely enough, while I spend more time on M/m than my other project, it still motivate me to write on it everyday. I guess it's good then ! ^^

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Date: December 14 2017 Title: Chapter 13: Burning passions

Shannon doesn't know Alejandro at all and it truly shows in this chapter. Yeah! She went too far! That's obvious. What's really terrifying though....well despite her terrifying display of sexual intensity and desire...is her casual indifference. She can try and justify it all she wants (riding high on the wave of impending orgasm makes any number of thoughts swarm your head) BUT!!!! She targeted his work bench from the beginning. Of course she doesn't it's true value, how he built it himself, but even worse than physically destroying it was her dismissal of it's relevance. "I'll buy him one later!" No you won't. Sorry Shannon. There's not enough money in the world. Not to mention you kind of wrecked his room and maybe flooded in "you". That's just icing. This relationship has a long way to go. If it goes anywhere after this. 

BAD SHANNON. GET YOUR SHIT TOGETHER!!! Alejandro deserves soo much better than an overgrown, spoiled, rich girl!



Author's Response:

Haha, yeah Shannon fucked big time... Pun not intended. The next chapter, due tomorrow morning (French time) will probably surprise you. I made use off how I felt after a huge depression, years ago, when sorting my feelings was hard. But you'll see how Alejandro will deal with his own 😆 

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: December 16 2017 Title: Chapter 15: Minors' rights

"Would you bathe with me?"....Kinda pushing your luck huh, Shannon?

I might have to write the second part of that special....I'm getting a LOT of insight into Al &Shan's characters here. Alejandro might be too good a person. No way Shannon deserves any pity or second chances! He's better than Izzy! She wouldn't have that shit at all! Keep your crocodile tears!! I mean he found her sex messages! Where did he get this patience?! 

Also very sound reasoning on Mrs. 88 year old widow with four kids. Not sure how appealing that would be or if it would workout but I applaud the logic. 

One again....*deep breath* GET YOUR SHIT TOGETHER, SHANNON!



Author's Response:

Well, remember that he also saw how she helped others and cared about them and their families. Without it he would just have been disgusted. But he also was worried about her silence. Alejandro tends to imagine the worst really fast, so not hearing anything from Shannon during almost two hours, he begun to lose it. And Shannon truly was distraught, she's just quite unused to feeling this much for a minor (or even anyone). Next chapter should be fully from her point of view, but it may come later than usual, considering that tomorrow I'll go see the Last Jedi and then I'll spent the afternoon with my girlfriend :)

Thanks for applauding the reasoning. It felt rather logical to me that such a MAJOR would try it. Plus, she would have some serious arguments : experienced, still young enough MAJOR-wise to be beautiful and bear children and sexually adept with minors. Plus the added bonus of "you don't have to worry about me meeting someone else after you", it could attract some peoples ^^

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Date: December 21 2017 Title: Chapter 18: Giving in to temptation

First reaction was that this happened kind of fast considering that it's been maybe a day since they've reunited, but you've described both Alejandro and Shannon's motivations in great detail so I understand it. I do have to wonder if Shannon's influenced Alejandro's emotions a bit? Anything can happen with bonding and she's been very emotional with him and I have to believe some of that has spilled over accidentally or otherwise. I'm surprised Al's willing to be that vulnerable with her considering his past. Very interesting development and a steamy chapter to boot. I'm interested in how this continues. They do have a clear connection and attraction to each other but it would be easy for Alejandro to come down from the pleasure and emotions and feel taken advantage of afterward. This could still be dangerous.........Also I have to call her out on reading his mind!!!!! What are you doing?!?!? I don't care if your having fun sexy times in the bath! That's a huge invasion of his privacy! (not that I have any experience writing a character who did that) *innocent whistle* WAKE UP, SHANNON!!

Anyway that aside I like the insight into both MAJOR and minor psychology here with this near bonding experience. You have gotten farther than I have in that regard. Shannon actually seems to have a lot of control of her emotions considering her more violent and dominant history of relationships and I think Alejandro coped with her wild emotions rather well. I still have to wonder if Shannon's a tier 3? I know I haven't fully established what they're capable of but her influence on Alejandro's mind is impressive considering his mental barriers from his trauma. Although maybe I'm reading to much into it. It's been a tiring day for him.



Author's Response:

Thanks !

In my mind, Shannon's a Tier 2 : extremely powerful mind abilities, great compatibility with minor but not the ability to actually crack open a minor's mind as long as a part of it doesn't want to surrender (while Tier 3 can, from what I got). She can't induce a "loving" reaction simply by unwittingly wishing so like Brenda, for instance. Here, she can peer into Alejandro's mind and -obviously- influence it because our titular minor is opening, because of his desire and how tiring and new all those experiences are. In the long run, he'll learn how to control himself better and won't be bonded all time like most minors probably end. In this case however, Shannon's emotion fed ALejandro's, and he is discovering that despite being extremely independant minded in everyday life, he is attracted to dominant female in a relationship, he'll have to figure out how it makes him feel, how to deal with it, and where does he draw the line.

That's something which will be explored in the future.

Happy Holidays by the way :) !

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: December 31 2017 Title: Chapter 22: Admitting weaknesses

Geez! I come back from holiday and youhave like three chapters done!!! I am so far behind!

This was a tough outing for Alejandro and the night's not even over for him. Out of his comfort zone, surrounded by MAJORS, insulted multiple times! I don't blame him for snapping or taking a break. I'm actually pretty angry at Shannon for grilling him! I know it might have worked out but he also deserves his space, and has a right to his anger! None of them understand! 

That all being said I like how their relationship is developing. Aejandro will have much to consider before pursuing something more with Shannon. Little displays of casual domination will be commonplace around her especially. Don't be naive Jandro. You are swimming with a shark an a@ex predator. Can you handle that? What happens if you have another argument and she can so easily submit you? Think about it man.



Author's Response:

Well, my chapters are like a third of one of yours, at best, so it's pretty even ^^ And I had boredom and no supervising at work, so I had time and motivation to work a lot :p

Shannon means well, but in truth, she probably has even more difficulties than the average MAJOR to actually leave space and agency to a minor. She's young, never bonded, taller and stronger than almost any of her kind and a billionaire... and all that discounting her upbringing, where Alexis did drill her in the whole MAJOR=power=dominance. She'll have a lot to learn if she wants to make it work with 'Rando, because her sheer size won't allow her to win all arguments, it could even cost her everything she is currently pursuing, after all.

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 02 2018 Title: Chapter 23: Embarrassment

You've fouled it up! You didn't even mention how minors were often hunted like foxes by motorbike riding MAJORS tailed by packs of artificially bred velociraptors like that one scene from Jurassic World. If you'd paid attention to the subtext of my last chapter you'd know that!

Seriously though great chapter. You added more detail than I did. I guess Alejandro's fortunate one of his parents is a geneticist. I really like the ebb and flow of tension in this dinner conversation. I could read a whole story of these characters just talking. 

P.S. Feel free to add as many details as you want right now. The details of the Dark Age won't be revealed for a bit. Not until Izzellah sees that film. So anythings up for grabs! I'll be working on that chapter soon.



Author's Response:

Thank for the review. I'll probably add more informations as I feel it, if it doesn't contradict your work :). My secret evil goal is to push your universe into the need of a wiki like Titan Empire, Mouhahahahaha ! Herm...

Anyway, I'm rather glade that I've introduced more tension at the table, even if things will get a little less intense in two to three chapters (discounting the one I posted earlier today, :) !)

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
Date: January 03 2018 Title: Chapter 24: Personal opinion

Well I can see why you said it might be too dark. It's very intense.

That being said it's totally in line with Shannon's brutal character. In my opinion Shannon Matthewson is the most extreme example of the MAJORS survival of the fittest mentality taken to it's logical conclusion. Ironically it's probably her mom who encouraged these beliefs most likely not expecting Shannon to achieve such size and strength. To Shannon, Alexis is just a minor too. Sad. But hey this is called "Dance with Fire" and it's clearly not just because of the passionate nature of Shannon and Alejandro's budding romance. Shannon is the fire and fire burns. Rando might be in serious danger with her. 

I also believe Shannon probably needs a minor in her life to keep her more even headed and healthy. Not that MAJORS truly NEED a minor but Shannon would definitely be less violent with Alejandro influencing her. If that's what she wants. She honestly seems to enjoy her violent tendencies.

Harsh but intriguing chapter. Great development for Shannon and even Alejandro overall and well.....just the entire Matthewson family. I will totally understand if you change it for whatever reason. Maybe make Shannon more sympathetic to her mother? I honestly don't know how the Matthewsons come back from this. Especially Andrew, he was completely emasculated by his daughter. He IS a MAJOR right? I though he would fight fo protect his wife a little. I just feel bad for him. His wife was blatantly cheating on him and now his daughter takes control of the family. Rough.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the insight ! You'll see more about Andrew in the first chapter which came out today, and I suspect it'll surprise you :) ! We're reaching the final parts of this story, so enjoy ! :)

Reviewer: NotSirk Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 04 2018 Title: Chapter 26: Bonding

Pffft Cherry Overrock! Best character. 



Author's Response:

Well, you created her, so you would know :p

Plus, it was due time for her to appear, haha

 

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