These what if's are actually pretty revealing....at least that is if the characterization is canon even if the events aren't. Like the two women of the house bonding over Scott's suffering. That's something I believe is probably true. Of course who knows right? This is a what if. It makes me wonder if Judy would actually shrink Maggie under the same circumstance. I don't believe for a second she'd ever actually eat Scott but this one feels a Mythbusters plausible. Anyway good story. I actually feel bad for Maggie which is weird. Well I feel bad for all those kids, Judy's insane.

.........Scott.....Scott's had a hard life.

Hmmm. I'm definitely keeping an eye out for this one. I have some ideas where this might go based on the story summary and this is a nice first chapter. Would've preferred if it was longer. I assume both Kayla and Emma are the significant characters and I would've liked to see Emma's introduction too. If this is the concept I think it is I'm gonna enjoy this story! Can't wait for more!

I'll give you five stars for no reason. Sure! This rating system means nothing. Chapter 2! I have high hopes!

Oh! There's a second chapter of this?....Well Uri's still ungrateful, but I guess Falcon's a bit of an ass so it kinda evens out. Interesting hints of Uri's backstory. No dad huh?...Bummer. That can really mess a girl up. I find the pairs budding dynamic fun and refreshing although now that I know what shocks do to Falcon (unless he's lying) I don't think Uri has the stones to do it. I can't be sure this early but I'd be very interested to see it happen. Especially the longer time passes...as their trust starts to build.........when it would hurt the most....but  who knows if that'll happen right?!

I'll enjoy reading about these two driving each other crazy.

Wow! You only changed a few things and the story's already much better! We now know the guy has a convertible a house and a new wife! From these seeds you can flesh out so much. It makes me wonder who this guy is. He's clearly rich what with a convertible and a house. (Maybe it's the house they used to share together?) A new wife?! How did he get that when he's an abusive rapist? So he's a sleazy liar or maybe he's so rich he can get whatever he want with money?

Also the tank scene. Good start but more description. That's just a good rule in general. I'm still not sure what the two main characters even look like. Or this wife is she hotter? Younger? You get the idea. Anyway back on topic. How does getting hit with a tank shell feel to her? Is she so massive in powerful it hurts less than a pin prick or did the power of the military catch her off guard? These are the things that make us care and form a connection with the characters. I personally feel that the military means nothing to her. These heavy tanks are just toys to her new might. 

So overall good job. Marked improvement. Gold star or whatever. Keep going if you want to. It can only get better the more time you put in. 

Real talk......I probably wouldn't be reading this story if it weren't so well written. I'm actually fine with vore most times, but this was a darker flavor of chocolate than I can tolerate. Too refined!

So first. Justine you can't just eat people because you don't like them! I mean you're a giant and can do whatever you want! DON'T EAT ME! But that one just felt petty. Although in fairness I think people should know by now not to insult their very fickle giant queen. Dumb move on Aria's part. Bringing up Sarah. It's like she wanted to die. I don't blame her. That town sucks so hard an early grave might be the better option. 

But Bertram. DAMN! My spirit's broken on that one. He just wanted to see his mama! I hope that golden gate does exist so he can be with his motner again. Maybe then he'll have reached his goal in a way.......More likely they'll be sifting the corpse of a sad little boy who just missed his mother out of Justine's morning movement....Tragic. I only joke to stop myself from crying. I'll remember you Bert! 

Awww and Justine misses Sarah. I'd feel bad for her if she hadn't just digested a young boy as grief stricken as she is. She should never forget how that pain feels. Everytime she eats someone she's inflicting that on someone else.

Amazing writing! Looking forward to a hopefully slightly brighter chapter, but I won't hold my breath.

Okay now I'm going to try to keep this brief for a change. Like I've been kind of sympathetic to the townspeople so far y'know. I like Justine and want her to succeed but I've also called her out on the unspeakable shit she's done. Well that changes now! Fuck these citizens. They don't disserve to even pick through Justine's fecal waste! And fuck Christina! I reallllly felt for her too! It's gonna be hard to comeback from this one. If she even lives long enough. Justine's an eat first then feel guilty about it later but not enough to vomit you back up kind of giantess. I'm on team takeover!

This was a very.....gray chapter.?

The whole encounter with Douglas was so muddy from almost the very start and I think the entire interaction perfecty reflects Justine's fractured mindset. Despite me firmly believing Justine has made an important decision in how she treats humans and percieves them as food, she is still struggling with it. I'm very surprised she regurgitated the two from before and even spared Randall. I think she's trying to establish guidelines for when it's acceptable to eat people even if I think she'll break those lines if pushed far enough. Very interesting development in her giantess philosophy.

As for Douglas? I actually kind of hate him. He's a very polarizing character simultaneously showing Justine the kindness and understanding she's desperate for while expertly manipulating her. Dangerous. I wonder what she'd think if she knew the whole story. Randal was an ass but Douglas may have very well destroyed his livelihood and nearly got him killed! Most justified rivalry to ever exist! And I hope him being an "alchemist" isn't an empty promis. The odds are grim but even a slight hope that Justine can get smaller is worth it. Although I'd personally still keep her larger than humans, just not so large it's too hard to eat. :P.....I wonder how he'll feel about Justine eating his grandson?

Speaking of Marvin he wins a Darwin award. What brain malfunction leads you to think sexually molesting and assaulting a giantess is a good idea?! It almost justifies his death! Another very morally ambiguous moment there and is a orime example of Justine steal seeing humans as a food source. She justified his consumption very easily, although in fairness that is a particular sore spot for her.

Technical advice: The transistion between Justine and Samantha's perspective should be separate paragraphs. It was confusing to read at first. 

Great chapter.

Writing Advice: While I'm far from a great writer I can say this. Make sure you have a good reason to add a second giantess. Think of how it will change the story and what purpose it will serve. Is she meant to fight Justine? Join Justine? How does it change the status quo for the better and can the story work just as well without her? 

I know things are calming down at the moment as Justine reflects on the people she's killed and consumed. That's actually a good thing to help the audience recover from the action, but if your worried you don't know what's next it's simple. Justine needs to make a decision. She's been mostly reactionary which is to be expected from turning into a giantess out of nowhere, but she can't go like that forever. At some point she'll have to be proactive in her own destiny or she'll end up starving in the forest. And you've already shown it! She defended herself against those attackers, freed herself from her abusive father, released John and that kid's father (which she didn't have to do), and even saved Christina from a rapist and possibly murderer.

So that's my input. At least for your main character. Justine needs to decide who she wants to be and what she wants to do. For better or worse she's a giantess now and holds a lot of power. How will she use it? Will she become a benevolent guardian? A despicable tyrant? Maybe she'll decide to try and find a cure? Anyway once that's done it will be easy for her to work off other characters. How will John factor in? What about the spy? Is an army coming for her? I'm just throwing out random stuff now but you get it.

I hope this helps or is the feedback you wanted. Regardless of my thoughts remember at the end of the day it's YOUR story. You could have Justine fight a T-rex just for lols! I'd read it!

You really make Justine sympathetic and her actions relatable. She just threatened two people and stole their property and I still just feel horrible she has to eat meat raw. It makes me wonder what a solution would be. As it is now she'll either die of starvation or be forced to hunt and pillage food the rest of her life. Not a great option considering it's been made clear she's strong but not invincible. The cows are only a bandaid though. I hope she doesn't become such a nuisance that organized law enforcement start hunting her. I'm actually starting to wonder if this story will end in tragedy. I kind of just want her to change back. 

Know idea how it will end for Justine. Looking forward to reading more.