I kind of hope that what Sanders did doesn’t backfire. It would be interesting if Sanders becomes so popular that he actually becomes a problem to Darius if the people start favoring Sanders over him. As for the chapter itself? It was good but the reference to the game was lost on me as I never played it. 

I don't have a good feeling regarding the survivabiltiy of Gabriella even though it was awesome to see her again.  

And oh man Pyrrha being able to talk will lead to all kinds of things. 

Well if there was anything that would make Isabella do what she did it would be learning the truth beyond the shrink incident. If that is the truth Madysen's is talking about then it will be interesting what Darius does with it and if it will really change anything. 

It might just be me but I think I would have been happier if Jacob actually sacrificed himself instead of surviving. He may be a "hero" but he's still a shitstain that has yet to own up for what he did. This is why he's never going to be better than Sanders despite having the same accomplishments. I don't know if it was your intent to show how the two characters handle being a hero with blood on their hands. 

Anyway, epic twist at the end. Don't know why I didn't think the Society would make cat girls out of normal people as well. 

A lot of exposition in this chapter but since it’s going to be a short side story I don’t mind too much. I got some feeling for Ashely and it already seems odd why she would mess around with a beta despite having three Omega friends. It’s shocking how fast Melody and two people Ashely considers sisters can become so serious and imposing.

I’m only cutting the girls some slack because from what we learned in the main story they’re pretty much spoon fed the worst of beta treatment since childhood so any beta mistreatment is probably taken very seriously and they wouldn’t expect Melody’s sister of all people to treat a beta poorly. The other thing is we don’t know if that beta boy even agreed to be put in Ashley’s shoe, and even if he did she wasn’t being too careful with him if he ended up with bruises. She could have killed him by accident. So Ashely was stupid for doing what she did and shouldn’t have taken it lightly or try to deflect what she did by accusing Claire.

I can see how both parties screwed up but Melody should have handled this better. 

And I have to be the only one that isn't so negative about Jenna. I'm not going to make presumptions of her character until I know more about her.

Oh Ashely how can you be so stupid? Well it was obvious from the start she didn't ask for consent and I'm surprised she made such serious lapse in judgement. Even though it will probably change the nature of her relationship with her sister and friendship with Claire and Jenna, she needed that illusion of equality shattered to see how helpless a beta could be to an uncaring alpha. Claire mentioning that time with her brother again actually makes me wonder about the fight that occurred after it. Also Ashley could talk to Corey about her issues of inferiority, if he also had them at one point.

I'm curious what Jenna will do now. Believe or not I actually liked Jenna since the chapter she was introduced, so I'm giving her the benefit of the doubt on this one. Besides why would Claire and Melody be friends with Jenna if she really went out of her way to hurt Ashely?

As for the alternate version of this chapter... I'm curious but not that curious. I'd rather have this version as the only one in my mind.

Author's Response:

One thing I also want people to consider is that Ashley potentially shattered that illusion for Jack. This is actually a concept the alternate chapter went really heavily into before I realized what a massive fucking downer it would be, among other things.

So can Jenna watch her mother when she punishes her charges? If so, I can see that definitely helping to foster a young Jenna’s burgeoning sadomasochistic thoughts. If it wasn’t for her upbringing and education at the institute I dare say she could have ended up as a cruel giantess. What I find more disturbing is that she is punishing a charge right within view of Ashley. From how nonchalantly she was eating her dessert while Jenna’s mother was chewing that guy out I guess she’s already used to seeing things like that. 

I find it amusing Jenna gets such a negative reaction. Actually how Ashely feels about Jenna in this chapter mirrors how a lot of the reader base feels. They assume what she could do instead of waiting to see what she will do. So far the only thing Jenna has done is squeeze Naomi a few times and by that point Claire had already done worse to Stephanie. If Jenna had talked with Marion instead I wonder if the reaction would be the same.

Author's Response:

I think there's a lot of assumption that Jenna was building to something greater with those squeezes, despite the fact that Jenna had already told Naomi that she wanted something from her in the future which kinda neccessitates Naomi being, you know, alive and able. I think it really does come down to, as I said before, Jenna's interactions being with the more sympathetic girls as opposed to the likes of Marion. She essentially becomes an antagonist to their progress, because she's far more demanding than Claire and isn't particularly interested in their baggage (at least with Naomi, a girl who very nearly did kill someone she is expressly close to through actual malicious action). Naomi (and Ashley) are sorta dumb but likable through their remorse and that translates to sympathy and anger when they're antagonized.

Awesome ending. Nothing more to be said.

EDIT: Review No. 100 biotches!