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Summer Job by Cayce Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 58]
Summary: Dave thinks he's found the perfect summer job, interning for an affable but slightly mad inventor named Eddie. But Eddie's wife Carolyn appropriates her husband's shrinking machine, and Dave soon finds himself at her mercy...
Categories: Giantess, Body Exploration, Crush, Feet, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 133393 Read Count: 238109
[Report This] Published: February 06 2008 Updated: February 02 2010
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 08 2008 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Woot! Finally a good story with a giantess theme instead of porno with a giantess theme.

<_< Uhh, Porno is all good, but sometimes I want character development and a good plot with mah fetish. Anywayz, keep up the good work.



Author's Response: Well, I don\'t think there\'s a trope in this plot that hasn\'t been done a million times before, but I\'m really enjoying writing these characters! Thanks for reading and commenting, KazumaR!

Lollipop by whahuh7 Rated: R starstarstarstar [Reviews - 8]
Summary:

An overly curious college girl finds a strange box on her roommate's desk that, unbeknownst to her, is filled with thousands of tiny people. If only she weren't so clumsy....


Categories: Crush, Mouth Play, Unaware, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 7196 Read Count: 63080
[Report This] Published: February 12 2008 Updated: February 19 2008
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed half-star
Date: February 20 2008 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7--Face Time

Welp, this is pretty much turning out to be a generic slaughter vest via lolipop and tongue. I really have nothing to say about this...

The Newlyweds by jjuenger Rated: X starstarhalf-star [Reviews - 4]
Summary:

Two newlyweds buy an aphrodisiac while on their honeymoon. When they get home, they use it with mega results.


Categories: Giantess, Slow Size Change, Adult 30-39, Adventure, Body Exploration, Couples , Crush, Giant, Insertion, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1616 Read Count: 49047
[Report This] Published: February 26 2008 Updated: February 26 2008
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: February 26 2008 Title: Chapter 1: How It Started

Realism...? XD. That made me laugh. I didn't know people could breathe in space. There is a limit to suspension of disbelief. Anyway, I'll be blunt. It was generic and...that's it. I could go on but then I'll seem like an asshole.

Summary: In the world of Gulliver and Gullivera 500 years on the sizes are just starting to mix and live amongst each other. There were bound to be bumps along the way.
Categories: Giantess, Body Exploration, Butt, Crush, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Mouth Play
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6905 Read Count: 65223
[Report This] Published: April 29 2009 Updated: April 29 2009
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: April 29 2009 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

When I read the first chapter I thought that this was going to be a slightly serious tale but as I read on it was obvious that this was going to be another erotica quickie featuring cruel giantess/tiny peoplez and so the ending actually left me quite annoyed. The writing was fine on a erotica level but that's about it.

Sorry dood, you get a five.

Summary: In the world of Gulliver and Gullivera 500 years on the sizes are just starting to mix and live amongst each other. There were bound to be bumps along the way. This is the story of a mixed size couple.
Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Mouth Play
Characters: None
Growth: Giga (1 mi. to 100 mi.), Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 77076 Read Count: 249358
[Report This] Published: April 15 2010 Updated: February 16 2013
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 10 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue First Encounter

Eh... the story is kind of dragging now, I think. As much as I 'love' to see Stephanie treat her step dad like shit for being a parent, I think something needs to come to a head regarding this.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: May 04 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Episode X: Finders Keepers

Yeah... Carrie really should asked Becca to take her home if she was really concerned about her safety and then tried to run away if her intentions weren't truely genuine. Either way, Carrie and David must have the worst luck in the world. It seems impossible to find one nice Brobdingnagan that is not going to abuse them in someway. This may be a honeymoon they never want to remember XD 

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: November 29 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue First Encounter

I'm morbidly amused that Stephanie has trouble believing David can have feelings like love despite how small he is, which is a frightening display of how far her ignorance goes, and makes me wonder how many of the oher Brobdingnagans share bigoted and racist/sizecist beliefs like that. I wonder what Jerry is going to do now that he has lost control of his daughter, he has all the right to be livid after the humilation and outright disrespect he has been put through, his daughter is effectively treating him like an object instead of a person now.

And now we turn to his wife to see if she actually does anything. 

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: January 11 2012 Title: Chapter 17: Episode VII: No Good Deed Goes Unpunished

I'm sure Stephanie is pretty close to the point of no return. Even if Jerry is her step father it has been implied that their relationship goes back more than a few years, giving them time to know each other well. The story just doesn't show the dynamics of their relationship as a whole since Minus is making it up as he goes along and probably didn't expect the epilogue to go on for this long. So from what we do know within the context of the story is that Jerry doesn't let his size be a detimentral factor in his relationship with his wife and step daughter, sometimes to a fault. He is stubborn, hardheaded, and controlling, but he loves his wife and cares about Stephanie's upbringing and seems to want her to be an honest individual. Now the problem is that the story paints Jane and Stephanie in a complete negative light with no redeeming factors. Jane is sexually disatisfied with her diminutive husband and cheats on him frequently to experience real pleasure from relatively normal sized men. She has a very hands off approach with dealing with problems in her family, which fustrates Jerry and is a negative infulence on Stephanie. Divorce is likely due to how strained their relationship appears. And finally, Stephanie is a selfish, self-absorbed, naive individual who doesn't like to own up to her actions and is very insensitive toward people. She has no respect for her step father and treats him as if he's less than a person. From the first chapter she is introduced in up until now as had her actions become more and more spiteful, all because some little people messed with her sex time with Brad and she may or may not have been the cause of a woman getting amnesia. It's not like she can take back the things after the day is done. What kind of relationship can she have with Jerry after this? Even if she wakes up and realizes she acted like a total child, they may never be close again, if they were even close at all. I just hope the resolution to this isn't a copout. I already feel like I put too much thought into this. Most GTS stories barely have a plot to begin with, so when real plot driven stories like this come around, I take 'em seriously.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 24 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue First Encounter

I’m going to take a guess at this, Jerry’s relationship with his wife and step daughter reaches a breaking point and he begins to confide in Carrie and grow closer to her, since she doesn’t remember anything about her husband, she develops feelings for him as well, which causes a whole bunch of problems for David once he frees himself from the two teenagers. I’m  am liking this plot so far and really hope Stephanie gets what is coming to her, I hate ignorant pigheaded people like her. And should Jerry actually discover feelings for Carrie, I can’t blame him, since his wife doesn’t seem very supportive.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: February 13 2012 Title: Chapter 19: Episode IX: Inner Space

I'm sorry but I think I'm done with this story. I enjoyed that, if for a moment, it dealt with the complications of what would happen in a world with multi-sized people. Jerry felt semi-realistic with his reactions regarding his daughter and wife but now he's coming off as a push over. He has legitimate problems in his relationship and it seems its getting dashed under the rug. I still don't really like Stephanie and Jane is another story. I mean unless there is some big twist or something I feel this part of the story just had lost potential. Not much is happening either with David and Carrie besides them getting used as sex toys and being compared to sexual parts. I've seen this in dozens of gts stories so it's nothing new. In truth, I don't really like that the erotica bits are overshadowing what plot there is. Don't know if you care or not, but I did enjoy most of this story. David and Carrie are a cool couple. 

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: November 07 2011 Title: Chapter 15: Epilogue Scene V: Reunion

Well this chapter confirmed my previous thoughts and I’m not really surprised. Let’s see…Stephanie has quickly developed from a typical horny bimbo teen that takes no responsibility for her actions to burgeoning “sizecist” bitch. The way she treats her stepfather who supports her and gives a damn about her upbringing just solidifies my dislike for her character, and that dry phony “sorry” she gave to Dave me made roll my eyes. Now that she’s fantasizing about how small the guliverians and lilliputian are compared to her in an erotic fashion, it’s clear that if this mentality continues to develop she’s well on her way to becoming a generic giantess-archetype, whose morals are non-existent when dealing with beings smaller than her. Will she grow up mentally and have a redeeming moment? Part of me hope so, I’d rather not see her go on to victimize smaller people just because she can.

I feel bad Jerry since he really doesn’t deserve the crap he has to put up with. He has a stepdaughter that doesn’t respect him at all despite taking care of her. He has a wife that cheats on him and feels no guilt about it, plus her inaction with Stephanie just makes her an enabler for her callous actions. I feel like she loves him but is not “In love with him”. He may be aggressive because of his small stature, but he’s still more of a parent than his wife. If he ever found out about Jane’s one night stands with other men, that would probably destroy the relationship, and for the better. I guess this goes to show that not all inter-size relationships work out as well as Dave and Carrie.

Dave is in an equally bad spot, I wonder how he’s going to jog Carrie’s memory. Doesn't help that Stephanie and Brad will be a negative infulence. 

As for Brad…there isn’t much to say about him. He’s pretty much a non-character that acts as an enabler for Stephanie and is used for fetish purposes. 

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: February 16 2013 Title: Chapter 21: Episode XI: Free At Last?

Oh hey welcome back. I didn't think you would follow up on this. Nice chapter. It's good that David and Carrie have somewhat of a reprieve from the roller coaster ride they've been on and maybe have a chance to rekindle their relationship before the mega giantesses ruin it. Stephanie continues to be a good antagonist since I can't stand her. Now Kelly is in the mix. Lot's of interesting drama abound.



Author's Response:

Thanks. I'm glad you like it.

Evolution by nancyarcher Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 50]
Summary:

This is an adventure story. Not all giantess and a little PG. It tells the story of a strange virus taking over the world. See what happens when the human race changes rapidly.


Categories: Adventure, Couples , Gentle, Giant, Growing Woman
Characters: None
Growth: Giant (31 ft. to 50 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 61 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 125638 Read Count: 204256
[Report This] Published: March 13 2011 Updated: June 30 2012
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: October 17 2011 Title: Chapter 1: The World Is A-Changing

The Titans are reminding me why I don't like comic book heroes such as superman. All their powers just makes them seem boring and no longer relatable to me; they have psionics, elemental manipulation, healing abilities, and alteration powers on top of their massive size. The humans honestly have a reason to fear these individuals no matter how much humanity they've retained, I sure wouldn't trust them.  All it takes is a Magneto-like Titan to spark a dangerous powder keg.

Summary:

It has been nearly five hundred years since Gulliver first made his famous voyage. The divergent world’s of Gulliver have merged to become one. Improved technology has recently proven the Brobdingnagans, the Lilliputians, and the Humans are all in fact genetically human. The only difference is that certain size genes are expressed more forcefully in some strains of people then in others.

This new technological enlightenment hasn't quite made it into the law books. The bigger sects of man still look at their smaller cousins as less to the point that the Brobdingnagans actually consume the Lilliputians as a type of garnish. This story is a prequel to all of the stories so far completed in this universe.


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Crush, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, The Following story is appropriate for all audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 62649 Read Count: 132349
[Report This] Published: September 23 2011 Updated: September 03 2012
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: December 20 2011 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8: Getting Rachael

First thing, I found the destruction of the cities utterly boring but that's not really your fault minuss, I've just read too many mega stories with the same thing. With most mega giantess rampages there is really no tension in what's going on because it's usually a pointless slaughter. There is nothing really to keep me engaged besides the sexual aspect which nowadays is starting to fade. So while there is obviously a large audience for that sort of thing, it's just not for me anymore I suppose. In the end I pretty much skimmed through what Rachel was doing to the cities and concentrated on the few story bits. While Jared may have screwed the basement civilzation, it didn't matter, since Rachel was going to wipe them all out anyway. I like how despite Rachel wiping out like three cities, it took all of Eugene's men getting killed to realize that Rachel is a psycho bitch and really doesn't care about any of them. I have a feeling the ending is going to leave me depressed/pissed like In over your head. Normally I would have stopped reading this story due to mindless mega giantess violence, but typically when I start reading a story I always try to read all the way to the ending. Next time I'll definitely going to focus on the more gentler giantess stories.

 

No rating since it's not really fair to rate something I'm not feeling anymore.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your candor and I can understand your objections. However, it's been a while since I have written a story with wanton destruction and it was planned that this story would contain a lot of that from the get go. The story would've been much better, imo, if I had the time to fill in the eight years from the prologue through to chapter one. I could've illustrated the goddess's slow corruption from innocent do gooder to the power addicted person she has become, but it would've never been finished. As it is it will approach 60,000 words maybe more. Maybe I'll get to it later, piecemeal, like with the Wedding Story epilogues. Not sure if that would help it in your opinion or if you dislike all evil giantess scenarios.

minuss

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: October 08 2011 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Plot wise, it's kinda unique, totally nonsensical though but so is this genre :p so I'm not going to stress that. I mostly see this story ending in tragedy for the Lill's. I don't know if they attempted it, but did the resistance try to protest in a normal...err, relatively normal fashion before they tried to escape? I assumed that if they did their "Goddess" would just smite them with *insert body part* for being ungrateful or whatever. Trying to escape is equally foolish because the chances of them finding help are smaller than they are,  but at the same time they really have no choice which is quite sad.

 

So far I haven't quite clicked with any of the characters yet. The Giantess is a boderline sociopath nympho with delusions of godhood whose moral compass malfuctioned some years ago. Now considers the people she saved nothing but toys for her amusement. At this point I don't think she's getting more lili's to save them, she keeping the flow going for herself. And since I keep feeling like the lili's are going to die anyway I found myself not really trying to attach myself to them but that may change if the story progresses.

 

Fetish wise, it's pretty good, I like the micro/mega interactions.

uTopia by gerald Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 48]
Summary:

The last attempt to save humanity has become hell for its inhabitants. See how three woman friends are trying to alter the balance of powers for the greater good or their own benefit.


Categories: Crush, Gentle, Lesbians, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Giga (1 mi. to 100 mi.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 169493 Read Count: 80097
[Report This] Published: May 08 2013 Updated: November 18 2013
Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: May 16 2013 Title: Chapter 7: Nicole betrayal and vengeance.

Argh your preference for telling rather than showing what is happening in the story using descriptive POV’s from both sides is making this story hard to read. The POV from the micro humans was actually pretty good but when it comes to the giantesses it just feels too impersonal. It’s like I’m reading a documentary rather than a story. I do like the concept behind this world your writing style makes it hard to get into.

As for the story itself, I think humanity is doomed. The way you write most of the girls makes them appear too immature to cultivate a civilization. I mean having a party in a populated zone? Really? Yeesh. 

 



Author's Response: Well, that was the point - most of the "Caretakers" do not perceive the "micros" as people, why would they "experience" it as anything else than just some fun? (You can always imagine how the little people must feel, though, especially after 5 - I hope I gave enough thoughts on the topic there) As for the doomed/immature part - remember it was the mothers idea for graduation parties like that (and more details about that will come as well, just when I finish struggling with the next two chapters), but I can see You already got the sort of impression I was aiming for at the very beginning of the story (40k words, I know, shush) - and of course keep reading, I hope it will get much, much more interesting :)

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 07 2013 Title: Chapter 18: Kate the new perspective.

Chapter 18:

This was a great chapter with Kate and her reverse giga transformation. The realization that the micro humans were people like her and that her size could affect their world in the most simplest of ways, even to the point where it restricts her greatly, was very good. It was a little impractical but the giant screen that allowed Kate to see the people she’s been interacting with up close so that each one could be personalized was a great idea. It really helped drive Kate’s new perspective of the world home. The problem now is how she’s going to keep herself from cracking under the burden of what she knows. Interacting with the other caretakers is just going to be even harder.

Oh yeah, don’t kill Gary. He’s the mainstay micro human this story needs :p

Chapter 19:

Well who know who must have did you know what if Nicole is already destroying her zones. Amber and Nicole are completely ignorant to Kate’s real feelings and it’s kind of amusing. It’s like Kate is the true adult among ignorant children. I wish Kate could have saved the humans in the container she had. Like pretend she was going to play with them in private and then bring them into her zone. But I guess with the stress she was under from just being with them it didn’t cross her mind.

The zone destruction didn’t really do anything for me. I guess that was the point but even if it had more detail and was “sexy” I probably would have been more pissed off at Nicole anyway or maybe not. More like this is awesome, but fuck you Nicole. Eh, I guess it wasn’t the interaction I wanted but within the context of the story it made sense. It did make me think that even if Nicole found out the truth it would make her worse. She already likes to control and manipulate things. What’s better than controlling the lives of millions? 

And again don't kill Gary.



Author's Response: I don't need to read a recap of the chapters, but thanks nonetheless :> It's still good to see that at least somebody understands what I was aiming for.

If You figure out something really creative, like how the story is going to end or such - that would be interesting (of course don't put that in a review, feel free to contact - I will keep track of who guessed tight first :>)

As for the screen - at least she has seen them, at least they are no longer "micros" for her, even despite that she has to call them that in the presence of others. I thought it was simple yet powerful, especially how she could clearly see the amplified image in contrast with "the dots" below it.

As for Gary.. I don't know... he's annoying, seriously! What about some replacement perhaps?

What made You think she is decimating her zones? Erica planned all this in ch17 already - have I suggested somehow that they were Nicole's? As for saving - that's the real tragedy of her situation... and it happened so fast. Not to mention that the tinies could hear the others talking - trying to "get away" was the only thing I thought they would do, Kate didn't prepare any trenches or plateaus...

The POV wasn't meant to be "sexy" - how could anyone in their right mind even consider such atrocity appealing in any way. That's also why I wasn't planning to repeat it later. In Nicole's defence - keep in mind that she does not really know what she is doing. The manipulative part - who knows?

The problem with micro interaction is that... well, I agree it is really impractical. Any attempt to.. I don't even know what they could want to do with the people, but it would still end badly. As Kate already noticed, killing people is the only thing they are good at...

And I have no idea where this unhealthy fixation on Gary somehow not dying is coming from - I already wrote he has some time left, that's better than billions already! Not to mention why him - and not Crawford for instance.. he's a cutey. Or Amy.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: May 18 2013 Title: Chapter 9: Interlude immaturity and manipulation.

And thus, we learn that the world is much, much more complicated than just “women playing with micros” - how will it turn out? Stay tuned for more

It’s easy to believe the world was simply women playing with micros is because aside from Kate’s chapter and the first part of chapter 5, you’ve used all the other chapters to show the “caretakers” treating the micro humans with complete disregard for their lives, treating them as slaves, imposing barbaric rules upon them, and killing them in cruel ways for simple entertainment.  

The politics of the caretakers have not been gone into depth yet. What is the 3/5th rule? How did one woman become the defacto leader among the original 5? It’s nice to see the insight of a mother but it was still just allusions to how their politics work and the animosity “caretakers” have toward each other and how they see their own children as pawns in a grand game not explained yet.

 I only know how the situation excites me a bit – especially imagining the “gratification” from the littles perspective – but I think it should be obvious and I do not need to necessarily pov it...?

You’ve been saying that we need to use our imagination to pretend how the micro humans see things from their perspective. I’m going to say this right now: I feel that is a huge cop out. You clearly can write from the micro human’s perspective. A giga giantess story primarily from the view point of the giga giantess is boring. A giga giantess is so huge that her perspective on human scale objects is very simple and leaves much to be desired. Telling people to use their imagination is a lazy way of saying you don’t want to write from a human perspective.

Personally chapter 5 is still the best chapter because it gave the most insight to how the zones work from a human perspective. As stated in the story, Kate and the others were barely educated on the inner workings of the zones and their view point is not reliable. I don’t really care if the main micro characters you make are killed in the very same chapter they’re introduced. At least they fill in the many empty blanks missing from the giantess view point.

I would like to see a recurring micro character at least interacting with Kate so she can learn more about how her own zone works. That could have been Adam if he wasn’t killed. 



Author's Response: More details to come, no worries - remember that all chapters so far were from the perspective of their children. Look, if I explained everything from the very start it would have really seemed like a documentary...

With their graduation it seems some of them may be slowly realizing there may be something more to it, but they are still bound to how they were raised. I understand that this lack of information may be frustrating - and believe me, I'd love to just write everything down and publish the remaining 45 chapters... but it takes time!

I could explain some of those things more clearly right now, but the story is about the characters finding out about them rather than "deus ex machina" providing all the solutions - not to mention the other considerations (pointed out in this chapter, details planned as well) which made even the more considerate mothers being unable to tell them everything - and are you looking how the book ends to spoil it's contents? Me neither...

For the POV - you are right, laziness is no excuse... I'll try to add some micro pov to the chapter just before adding a new one (and write about it in the pre-notes), so everybody could go back and see their view.

Well, I tried to make Lauren seem somewhat compassionate as for the littles affairs - have I failed at that so badly? But yes, the girls are so far simply unaware of their actions - so far.

Ugh, I felt that some of those characters may have been overdone for side-intrusion... apparently too many details about his life, plans and dreams died with him which leaves (at least some) Readers looking for closure - let me assure You, his death was not pointless - and it will influence the story further (at least twice with the current plan).

I simply am trying (and probably failing miserably :( ) for this story to be exciting and gripping to read - and not just "oh well, another story, another crush/gentle play/whatever"

Maybe I gave away too much with 9th... I can only hope that my promise of explanations lurking later will be enough to settle Your craving for more - for now at lears.

Please contact/review again if You feel that I misunderstood, missed, ignored or lessened any of Your points, I value everyone's opinion greatly and wish to make it help the story be better. (so if its already awful - it could become barely bad)

And finally - I had to delete your other review (sorry - it was attached to 1st chapter and had spoilers for deaths), please just repost your review on the 5th or so or contact me if you forgot it's contents.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: May 18 2013 Title: Chapter 9: Interlude immaturity and manipulation.

Well, I tried to make Lauren seem somewhat compassionate as for the littles affairs - have I failed at that so badly?

Yes Lauren is compassionate when compared to Amber and Nicole. I did notice how she tries not to kill her micros and doesn’t force them to pleasure her. I do like how she finds what they’ve done to uTopia to be sickening. The other mother perspective I’m interested in seeing is Rachel, due to what you alluded to in Chapter 9.

I simply am trying (and probably failing miserably :( ) for this story to be exciting and gripping to read - and not just "oh well, another story, another crush/gentle play/whatever"

Heh. It’s really the strength of the story concept that makes it interesting. Most giga level stories are non-stop destruction and smut with girls that have paper thin personalities. Those types of stories have their place in the community but I haven’t read many giga level stories with a real plot, like this. I don’t know if I just sound too harsh during reviews. You’re doing pretty well for your first story. 

 



Author's Response: All those mentions of her throughout the recent chapters are to create this curiosity before we start seeing her actual actions - I wish to provide something more than "Oh, the story talks from her perspective so she must be important, right?", the current brief plan states:
12 - interlude - some of the rachel's story, (spoilers...)
(with first chapter, the 0, being the intro - just like any normal, programming-like numbering...)

I went through Your other reviews and I see that You are being very generous (with average ratings of what - 1 star? 1.5?) - I only hope I do not fail Your invested curiosity (just like so many other stories failed mine - but I think I learned from that a bit).

As for an interesting story - it takes time (and chapters, words, etc - with every pov deferring the really deep parts) to build up a proper desire to know the characters more, to see what they do, what happens to them - the reason I gave so many "allusions" in 9th, was simply because I was worried that at this awkward "still introductory" point, it may seem like a sort of repetitious, giga-rampage and I wanted to suggest there is something more to it, before everybody bore themselves to death with the descriptions...

Also - I tried contacting You two times now (first with the deleted review, second after Your previous review - with some questions) - um, is Your email up-to-date in prefs? Next time I'll have to add this question about contact in the story notes or somewhere like that (perhaps the story itself, some recurring nightmares of a character being unable to contact Kazumi - along the lines of "Oh will I ever find You again?"...), so... I know I'm selfish, but if You could please find a moment of Your time to advise me on a couple things - I'd love if You contacted me back with a working address (or just sent an email on theybyinfrom shift+2 gmail).

But anyway, back to the pov+10th.

Reviewer: KazumaR1 Signed
Date: June 28 2013 Title: Chapter 23: Amber gift and aid.

I'm still reading this. Gadget pretty much explained how I was feeling regarding the last two chapters. Mainly just waiting the meat of the plot to resume.

 



Author's Response: Well, technically it never really started - Kate's discoveries and Rachel's plight are necessary building blocks in the foundation to facilitate and navigate the events to come - but so were many other things. And thanks for bearing with me - I hope You will not be disappointed in the end (I mean, when Kate turns evil and kills...).