Penname: Tiny_Traveler [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: May 21 2016
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Summary:

A girl awakens in her best friend's room, reduced to a small size.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Body Exploration, Butt, Couples, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Humiliation, Lesbians, Odor, Slow Size Change, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 19518 Read Count: 116935
[Report This] Published: February 20 2016 Updated: August 11 2016
Reviewer: Tiny_Traveler Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 22 2016 Title: Chapter 8: DONT CUM 2 HOUSTON

Hear are my thoughts through the first 8 chapters.

First, this is a slow roller, sort of like a freight train when it goes from a stand still to moving. It did pique my curiosity early. Some of the other reviewers have commented on the somewhat abstract interaction and personality aspects of the story, but I think you actually really make it work.

I am curious why you changed to a 2nd person point of view in chapter 7, then returned to 1st person in chapter 8.

I enjoyed 7 and 8 the most: very descriptive and evokes some reader empathy. This goes back to the freight train analogy: once it gets rolling it's going fast and heavy.

Now that I am all caught up I'll continue to read as you update.

Reviewer: Tiny_Traveler Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 23 2016 Title: Chapter 9: Wolves

Great addition, having Sofia come (cum?) back.  The sex scene with the poor tiny caught in between is a lot of fun.  A good addition to the story!  More importantly I am really curious to see how it's going to develop with Sofia in the mix again.  

Reviewer: Tiny_Traveler Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 24 2016 Title: Chapter 10: The Ride

I read the enhanced "wolves" chapter and this one.  Stylistically the conversation with another friend was a good way to go about explainging how the girl got out of her situation.  The conversation flowed well, too.  Right down to the part where her friend interupts to ask Siri a question.  

From a practical stand point the conversation rehashed a lot of what we've already read, and is a bit redundant.  Even anticlimatic.

Still, I like the story as a whole and like your style. I hope you continue to add new work.  As long as I'm around you will have an audience!

Summary:

A young girl accidentally shrinks one of her classmates with a strange machine her dad was working on. She tries to keep him safe until she can find a way to restore him to normal size but discovers the machine is not perfected and can only make things shrink.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Giantess, Breasts, Body Exploration, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4134 Read Count: 16002
[Report This] Published: July 09 2016 Updated: July 09 2016
Reviewer: Tiny_Traveler Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: July 09 2016 Title: Chapter 1: My Tiny Classmate

Fun story. i also like unaware vore but rarely write about it because I always like making it personal, good or bad.

On the comments in your end notes about the first person narrative, James Patterson has written a few books in which the perspective changes so it can be done.  The issue you raise about the victim telling the story is valid, but in my mind it works because we're already shrinking and growing people in these stories so I'm willing to break a few practical rules in the interest of style. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback. You have a valid point. Most of what we write, would be physically impossible. I guess I take the shrinking as a necessary plot device for the story but then try to apply as much actual science and human physiology to it as possible.

Feminine by Juliet Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 3]
Summary:

Otto goes too far while arguing with his girlfriend, and pays the price inside of her stomach.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Entrapment, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, Unaware, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3155 Read Count: 11628
[Report This] Published: February 14 2017 Updated: February 14 2017
Reviewer: Tiny_Traveler Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 16 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Feminine

Loved it!  I love the "punishment" angle and have used it in some of my own writing.  Specifically I like that Otto definitely deserved SOMETHING, but maybe what Ariana did to him was a bit over the top.  Did he really deserve to get eaten?

This has a lot of similarities to my story "Best Served Cold" but I won't discuss them here until I've completed that story.