Penname: Frizzle [Contact] Real name: Nick Kemper
Member Since: September 16 2015
Membership status: Member
Bio:

I write giantess stories with plots and character growth. If you like giantess stories that host not only fetish content, but an actual story that you can follow then I'm your author. I write to the best of my ability, so hopefully you enjoy reading my works. 


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Reviews by Frizzle
Summary:

Working on the summary...


Categories: Gentle
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2197 Read Count: 13723
[Report This] Published: March 10 2007 Updated: March 10 2007
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed star
Date: December 25 2017 Title: Chapter 1: A Dream Come true

I gotta be completely honest, I was about to read the story until I immediately realized the block of text was straining my eyes...

You need to create paragraphs, and learn to improve your punctuation/grammar

I recommend tuning up this story a bit, and I'll check back in a week or so. If it's fixed, great and I'd love to read the story and change my rating, but as of right now I can't even get past the first couple sentences, it's just to straining on my eyes :(

 

Summary: Julia pays revenge on his boss for humiliating her
Categories: Humiliation, Entrapment, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1993 Read Count: 5224
[Report This] Published: March 12 2007 Updated: March 12 2007
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: December 25 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Revenge is best served 'Shrunk'

The paragraphs are a wonderful improvement I see! Alot of the beginning I felt was pointless, and I'll admit I found myself skipping over stuff that seemed irrelevant to the story. 

You have the paragraphs nailed, and now you just need to work on your grammar and vocabulary. If you can improve those skills, you will no doubt be one of the better authors on this site in my opinion!

The cat scene was very hot. I'm not a fan of animal vore per say, but for some reason I have a soft spot for crow and cat vore. The thought of Julia feeding the Dr. to her cat as punishment was extremely hot, and I honestly wished you had gone into more detail with it :/

I'll admit, the scene was so great, but so anticlimactic as it passed within seconds of reading... and that's another area you need to work on. Details, give us more details in the actions of the characters. Show us what is happening to them in detail, and show us how they feel when said actions are taking place!

 

Anywho, much better story than the previous one I read of yours! I'm upping my rating to four stars only because I see an incredible improvement. This also means however, that I'll now hold you to a higher standard ;)

 

Keep writing! I enjoy your works :)

Kerry, My Owner by rodent Rated: R starhalf-star [Reviews - 6]
Summary: I am shrunk down to 3 inches tall and used as a pet for Kerry
Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Insertion
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 750 Read Count: 13494
[Report This] Published: July 02 2008 Updated: July 02 2008
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: my story

Need to proof read chapters for spelling errors, there quite a bit. Also I noticed spelling errors in the chapter titles, which is concerning. You've got a bright idea, you just need to take time to flesh it out more.

No rating, because you appear to be a novice (at the time of this story that is, I haven't read your other works)

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstar
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2:tbreakfast

Gonna be honest, I didn't read far. 

#1 - It's as if you are purposefully writing as short of a chapter as possible.. I've rarely seen chapters this short. Take. Your. Time.

#2 - <i>god she must be at least 50 feet tall</i> <---- I noticed this as I was reading, and it was quite silly.... it's almost as if you didn't... wait for it... 'proof' read your chapter. I made this mistake during the entire course of my very first story, in which I never proof read my chapters. My story still turned out great, thank god.... but it could have been better if I took my time to proof read before posting. Always. Proof. Read.

#3 - Don't be discouraged. It's very easy to be discouraged when getting critical reviews, trust me I know. Every review, even the most minute critique, and drastically alter your decisions when writing, or even destroy your will to write at all. Don't let that happen. Take your idea, mold it, shape it, and let it evolve until it's perfect. We all have great imaginations, you just need to learn your own personal technique in which to express it on paper (metaphorically speaking of course)

Do you have gmail? I suggest creating a google mail account and using their google drive. It's almost iconically similar to microsoft word, only it's free. You get 15gb of storage (for writing that's basically infinite storage) and it comes with spell check, and grammar check (very useful). It could be a powerful tool to help you solve the spelling issues you are having. 

Another great tool is dictionary.com and thesaurus.com! I always have those two sites up whenever I'm writing, that way I can learn new vocabulary and look up new words that I need to properly use or describe something in my story. This could drastically improve your writing.

 

I hope you don't discontinue this story, it has an interesting premise! Hope you continue it :D

Elizabeth by Black Neptune Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

Derrick has a fling going on behind his sister's back with her longtime friend Elizabeth. After having a dream in which he is shrunken and killed by her, he goes on to meet her for yet another sexual encounter. However, prophetic dreams do exist...


Categories: Butt, Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Feet
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: Gruesome Shorts (GTS)
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5737 Read Count: 7323
[Report This] Published: July 06 2012 Updated: July 06 2012
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: June 16 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Elizabeth

Sucks that this story never took off. It wasn't half bad :/

Summary:

Chloe wanted to spend a nice relaxing evening at the Sauna, but her plans are ruined when Lauren, the slutty cheerleader decides to stop by.

A story of lust, dwindling boyfriends, sauna wrestling, unaware exploration, revenge and a girl that is going to put everyone in their rightful place!

This. Is Chloe's Saturday.


Categories: Violent, Butt, Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2688 Read Count: 22789
[Report This] Published: January 13 2014 Updated: July 09 2016
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 09 2016 Title: Chapter 3: Hello Darkness My Old Friend

Im enjoying this story. I hope you continue it.



Author's Response:

I for the life of me, cannot understand why people enjoy this story.

Ridiculous Smut is apparently a market. :D

Summary:

Holly is a two-inch tall 19 year old attempting her first year at college. Along the way she'll have to learn how to handle her ravenous roommate and the struggles of being surrounded by new people.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Body Exploration, Entrapment, Gentle, Insertion, Lesbians, Mouth Play, BBW, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 30394 Read Count: 185932
[Report This] Published: January 15 2014 Updated: December 11 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 21 2016 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

OH MY GOD!!!! YOU'RE BACK!!!! YESSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!! Sorry, was excited. *cough* Great to have you back! Love this story, and I honestly thought it was dead. But I checked once a month for a long time just to make sure! Glad I did, because that cliffhanger in chapter 11 KILLED me! Anyways, fuck yes, you rock, can't wait to see what you have in store!

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: November 03 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

MOOOOOORE OMG I LUV U

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: December 13 2017 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Amazing chapter. Glad you have returned... but I wish I hadn't waited almost a year for an update lol. 

I'm glad Diane feels guilt, trying to commit murder!! And as for Haley.. I nearly cried when Linsey fell into comatose...

 

Yet again another cliffhanger... I hope I don't have to wait too long for the follow up ;) 

Summary:

Two teenage best friends finally get to live out the fantasy of sledding down a mountain of ice cream; however, things don't go quite as planned. 


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Instant Size Change, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: M/m
Warnings: The Following story is appropriate for all audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4232 Read Count: 7668
[Report This] Published: November 28 2015 Updated: November 28 2015
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story is one of my favorite unaware vore stories on the site! The buildup was great and perfect and I loved how his little brother devoured them so mercilessy unaware! I hope to see more little sibling vore from you ^.^

Summary:

Two teens enjoy their yearly back yard campout until waking up tiny the morning after. 


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Crush, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: M/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5414 Read Count: 6256
[Report This] Published: December 11 2015 Updated: December 11 2015
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This story was amazing! Very well done! I really hope you do more like this! Simply incredible!

Summary:

It was a normal day for you when your parents decided to go to London and all alone with a Maid, what could go wrong?


Categories: Vore, Butt, Crush, Feet, Legwear, Lesbians, Scat, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 878 Read Count: 8232
[Report This] Published: June 13 2016 Updated: June 13 2016
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: June 13 2016 Title: Chapter 1: The shrink

First off, good unaware topic story idea. But you need to make paragraphs. You have no paragraphs and just a wall of text. It makes it very hard to read, and kind of an eye sore. As Eternal36 suggested you should work on your punctuation as well! I hope you don't get discouraged and keep on writing the story! Just improve readability and you should be good! I hope to see where this story goes :)

Summary:

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.

 

 

Drake Dobson stumbles onto a strange object that his best friend has found. Unfortunately for Drake, the object was not so user friendly to him.


Categories: Adult 30-39, Giantess, Adventure, Butt, Couples, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Gentle, Giant, Humiliation, Incest, Insertion, Unaware, Teenager (13-19)
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 44 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 71285 Read Count: 291743
[Report This] Published: July 07 2016 Updated: December 30 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 33: The Apple Doesn't Fall Far From the Tree

Poor drake can't catch a break 😂

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 34: Little Exercise Never Hurt Anyone

I have an issue with this chapter. Earlier in the story, Kaylee had no issue putting Drake her pocket, but all of a sudden it's a 'tight' space? It doesn't really make sense, and the excuse seems odd :/



Author's Response:

Eh I can't remember the chapter where I had Kaylee put Drake in her pocket.

I usually have Kaylee as a person who mainly wears dresses so I find it odd myself that I wrote her wearing pants.

That would have fixed the excuse issue and the plot hole issue but oh well. Shit happens during writing.

 

I don't plan ahead my chapters. I actually brainstorm them as I write with a VERY general idea of where I want to go so hopefully you can forgive me for being a little absent minded xD

 

Thanks for pointing that out though!

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 38: A Most Awaited Reunion

I wanna fuck Christine LOL 

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 02 2018 Title: Chapter 40: Dossiers

Shites boutta get realz 

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 02 2018 Title: Chapter 41: Introductions

Kaylee and Joe better fuck. That's all I gotta say 😂

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 02 2018 Title: Chapter 44: Showtime

All caught up. Shusha is hilarious. The guards screaming match with Kaylee was flipping great 😂😂😂



Author's Response:

I must admit that I was laughing the entire time I was writing it xD

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 27 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Wake up bro!

Kaylee and Drakes relationship is great! It's just how 2 siblings would act with one another imo! 

Short chapter, but entertaining! 

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 27 2017 Title: Chapter 3: The Dragons Come Out at Night

Lmao. I love how he mistakenly fucks himself over 😂👌🏼 good shite right there. Short chapters,  but certainly worth the read!