Penname: Frizzle [Contact] Real name: Nick Kemper
Member Since: September 16 2015
Membership status: Member
Bio:

I write giantess stories with plots and character growth. If you like giantess stories that host not only fetish content, but an actual story that you can follow then I'm your author. I write to the best of my ability, so hopefully you enjoy reading my works. 


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Elizabeth by Black Neptune Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1]
Summary:

Derrick has a fling going on behind his sister's back with her longtime friend Elizabeth. After having a dream in which he is shrunken and killed by her, he goes on to meet her for yet another sexual encounter. However, prophetic dreams do exist...


Categories: Butt, Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Feet
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: Gruesome Shorts (GTS)
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5737 Read Count: 6812
[Report This] Published: July 06 2012 Updated: July 06 2012
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: June 16 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Elizabeth

Sucks that this story never took off. It wasn't half bad :/

Summary:

Chloe wanted to spend a nice relaxing evening at the Sauna, but her plans are ruined when Lauren, the slutty cheerleader decides to stop by.

A story of lust, dwindling boyfriends, sauna wrestling, unaware exploration, revenge and a girl that is going to put everyone in their rightful place!

This. Is Chloe's Saturday.


Categories: Violent, Butt, Crush, Feet, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2688 Read Count: 20892
[Report This] Published: January 13 2014 Updated: July 09 2016
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 09 2016 Title: Chapter 3: Hello Darkness My Old Friend

Im enjoying this story. I hope you continue it.



Author's Response:

I for the life of me, cannot understand why people enjoy this story.

Ridiculous Smut is apparently a market. :D

Summary:

Holly is a two-inch tall 19 year old attempting her first year at college. Along the way she'll have to learn how to handle her ravenous roommate and the struggles of being surrounded by new people.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Body Exploration, Entrapment, Gentle, Insertion, Lesbians, Mouth Play, BBW, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 30394 Read Count: 169697
[Report This] Published: January 15 2014 Updated: December 11 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 21 2016 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12

OH MY GOD!!!! YOU'RE BACK!!!! YESSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!! Sorry, was excited. *cough* Great to have you back! Love this story, and I honestly thought it was dead. But I checked once a month for a long time just to make sure! Glad I did, because that cliffhanger in chapter 11 KILLED me! Anyways, fuck yes, you rock, can't wait to see what you have in store!

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: November 03 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

MOOOOOORE OMG I LUV U

Reviewer: Frizzle Signed
Date: December 13 2017 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Amazing chapter. Glad you have returned... but I wish I hadn't waited almost a year for an update lol. 

I'm glad Diane feels guilt, trying to commit murder!! And as for Haley.. I nearly cried when Linsey fell into comatose...

 

Yet again another cliffhanger... I hope I don't have to wait too long for the follow up ;) 

Summary:

It was a normal day for you when your parents decided to go to London and all alone with a Maid, what could go wrong?


Categories: Vore, Butt, Crush, Feet, Legwear, Lesbians, Scat, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 878 Read Count: 7023
[Report This] Published: June 13 2016 Updated: June 13 2016
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed
Date: June 13 2016 Title: Chapter 1: The shrink

First off, good unaware topic story idea. But you need to make paragraphs. You have no paragraphs and just a wall of text. It makes it very hard to read, and kind of an eye sore. As Eternal36 suggested you should work on your punctuation as well! I hope you don't get discouraged and keep on writing the story! Just improve readability and you should be good! I hope to see where this story goes :)

Summary:

A tiny girl born from a flower sets out into the Old West to save her family farm. Her journeys bring her to the local dance hall and the towering ladies who work there. A fantasy western loosely inspired by Thumbelina.


Categories: Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Fantasy, Feet, Gentle, Legwear, Lesbians, Mouth Play, Unaware, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, FF/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 34918 Read Count: 49283
[Report This] Published: January 02 2017 Updated: June 11 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: March 28 2017 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10

Awesome!

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 19 2017 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 & Epilogue

Gotta say, aside from a fantastic and compelling story, that vore/torture scene with Diamonda was one of the best and detailed I've ever seen. It wasn't too long, it wasn't to short, and it was perfectly imaged. Great story, and it ended right about where it should have. Look forward to future stories you may write.

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 13 2017 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11

Vore with Sapphire is so fucking sexy, they way you've depicted her and the way I've imagined her in my head is just so fucking gorgeous and hot. This story is utterly fucking amazing!

 

I know you've already had a major unaware vore scene, but I'd love to see another unaware scene with Eulalia, that'd be cool!

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: February 21 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Awesome in all aspects. Please don't discontinue this masterpiece!

Summary:

Two sisters head out for a relaxing road trip, but things take a turn for the worst once their GPS stops working.


Categories: Instant Size Change, Giantess, Odor, Scat, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3907 Read Count: 2854
[Report This] Published: April 16 2017 Updated: April 16 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 16 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow. Certainly glad I decided to read yet another story from you. I love hard vore, in the sense of how much I love being heartbroken in a story. My heart really felt for the two poor girls as they slowly digested into nothing... and it made me wish the mysterious woman could get a good dosage of karma...

Excellent writing style, and great vocabulary used correctly. I think I'm going to add you to my favorites list... and I'll probably read more stories from you when I get the chance cause this was just great! You certainly deserve more reviews, that's for sure.

Summary:

Ashley uses a potion, found in a book that was given to her. The results end up giving Ashley an incredible ability. Her darkest wishes and desires will be brought to light.

Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.


Categories: Vore, Giantess, Breasts, Breast Enlargement, Butt, Crush, Destruction, Futanari, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Growing Woman, Humiliation, Insertion, Lesbians, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Mega (501 ft. to 5279 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 13872 Read Count: 20508
[Report This] Published: August 27 2017 Updated: December 16 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstar
Date: December 12 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Not bad. You seem to be good writing coherent sentences with detail. Your paragraphs and indenting however could use some work, so that your text doesn't look like a wall. For an example check out some of Jacksmiths storys, or I'll give you this example below.

Don't do this

"Two more drops and that should finish it." Ashley muttered to herself as she eased the small dropper over the beaker and slowly placed two drops into the green liquid. Ashley placed the dropper on the table and sat back in her chair. " There it is at last." Ashley whispered to herself. Months upon months of collecting the proper ingredients came down to the concoction that mildly bubbled before her. Months spent with many a sleepless night as she worked to find the ingredients needed for the magic potion that would make her wildest fetish come true. She could already feel her panties becoming wetter by the second as she thought about all the possibilities her hard work would bring to life.

 

Do this instead!

"Two more drops and that should finish it," Ashley muttered to herself as she eased the small dropper over the beaker and slowly placed two drops into the green liquid.

Ashley placed the dropper on the table and sat back in her chair, "There it is at last," Ashley whispered to herself. Months upon months of collecting the proper ingredients came down to the concoction that mildly bubbled before her. Months spent with many sleepless nights as she worked to find the ingredients needed for the magic potion that would make her wildest fetish come true.

She could already feel her panties becoming wetter by the second as she thought about all the possibilities her hard work would bring to life.

 

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Other than that, along with a few minor grammar and spelling errors, you got a pretty good story with a pretty good plot going! If you continue writing this story I'll probably follow it :) good luck!



Author's Response: I greatly appreciate the review, Iíll definitely be taking the time to go back and clean up the texts with proper indentation and spacing. It does make it a more difficult read without it. Thank you so much for your feedback and your following!

Lisa by The Intimidator Rated: R starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 5]
Summary:

Brad had a normal life until one day an accident shrunk him he made a decision get the help of his friend Lisa. His choices will change his life

All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.


Categories: Giantess, Breasts, Feet, Humiliation, Insertion
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Bradís Saga
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 8572 Read Count: 17734
[Report This] Published: September 14 2017 Updated: December 09 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstar
Date: November 12 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Shrunk

For your first story it's not bad. I suggest taking your time in detailing his thoughts, actions, and the enviornment around him. If you had gone into more detail, you could have added a few more pages worth of words to expand on this chapter. I agree with vgiv about quotation and structure, which you really should work on.

I suggest looking up Jacksmith, and reading a few of his stories, especially 'Julia'. He is a very good example on the way you should quotation your conversations and form your sentences/indentations.

Your chapter has intrigued me, so I'll probably end up following your future chapters if they pan out :)

 

@ilikepie

I don't understand how you could be confused? The story is titled 'Lisa', thus 'Lisa' will obviously be a main component of the story... I feel that criticism is slightly ridiculous, but I suppose that is just my opinion :/

Notified by Samuel Orona Rated: PG starstarhalf-star [Reviews - 2]
Summary:

An immoral CEO learns the errors of his ways when he gets shrunk


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Instant Size Change, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 836 Read Count: 1183
[Report This] Published: October 25 2017 Updated: October 25 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarhalf-star
Date: October 25 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Notified

There's some punctual mistakes you made that caused me to become confused whether the sentence was meant to be a statement, or a question. Also, native americans have heredity black and dark brown hair, so the only way she could be bleach blonde was if she dyed it, just something to try and go into detail a little more.

Other than that, I'm assuming this is a short one chapter story. Kinda funny, with a silly plot. Was an interesting read. 

Summary:

Denys é um cara que acabou fazendo uma escolha errada em visitar sua ex-namorada, e acabou se tornando escravo eterno de suas decisões.

 


Categories: Adventure, Breasts, BBW, Body Exploration, Couples, Entrapment, Humiliation, Insertion, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m, FF/m, FM/f
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3282 Read Count: 2241
[Report This] Published: October 25 2017 Updated: October 26 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed half-star
Date: October 25 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Visita

I'm not sure if you just don't speak english very well or what not, but some of your sentences make almost no sense to me. Your story is also all over the place, and I have no clue as to what's really even going on. This story needs a complete redo if you want to try and make it into something.

Summary:

After a hard night of partying, a young college student finds himself rapidly shrunk in a classroom.  He seeks out a friend to help him, but getting her attention proves more difficult than anticipated, and his dreams are crushed before he can even begin fulfilling them.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Giantess, Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Instant Size Change, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2907 Read Count: 2516
[Report This] Published: December 02 2017 Updated: December 02 2017
Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 03 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Classroom Trouble

Interesting read. Did a good job of recreating the enviornment and the actions of Julie. Was able to paint a clear image of what was going on no problem. I'd also like to add how refreshing it is to read a story with above average vocabulary, though I must admit that for a normal reader your choice of vocab could actually cause some confusion, and a trip to the dictionary, so I'd recommend toning it down just a tad, but otherwise I enjoyed the read.

 

Good work.

Summary:

Out to steal some cars, Amber got more than she bargained for when she used her shrink ray without looking.

F/f Pred POV


Categories: Mouth Play, Giantess, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1353 Read Count: 1221
[Report This] Published: December 16 2017 Updated: December 16 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 16 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Swallowed By a Sick Thief

Great story! Very unique from what I've read before, so it was definitely an enjoyable read! It was interesting to see her use her snot filled saliva as a means to try and swallow the woman, which even though I'm not a snot person, I found myself enjoying the bit anyways! 

The only critisicm I have, is that you mentioned the car was shrunk down to a few inches (which would mean around 2-3 inches typically). So in my mind, the woman should been less than two inches tall if she's gonna fit in such a vehicle. I look at my ruler, and I just get the feeling it wouldn't have been as hard to swallow something that size as much was described in the story, but then again that's just the perspective I took from it.

Great story, certainly glad that I decided to read it, and I wish other one chapter stories were as detailed as this one!

10/10



Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind praise! And with that, I just figure that some people have trouble swallowing even tiny pills, their throats close instinctively, so if this tiny woman was even slightly larger than a normal pill a more sensitive person would have a lot of trouble! Thank you for reading closely!!

Like Glass by Juliet Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1] New!
Summary:

Meenah gets eaten.


Categories: Giantess, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Lesbians, Mouth Play, Scat, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2354 Read Count: 612
[Report This] Published: December 17 2017 Updated: December 17 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 17 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Like Glass

Let me start off, by saying you have some great vocabulary use and I think you have a load of potential! 

Now then... I have a lot to cover here.

1. I found myself totally lost for the first half of this story. First I hear the name Wesley, then I hear Meenah mention a son, but never did you connect the two as one until the end of the story. I sorta figured anyways... but still, you gotta connect the dots for your readers ;)

2. If I had a penny for every time I read the name Willow or Meenah, I'd be rich. You overuse their names in areas that were totally unnecessary. After a characters name has been mentioned, particularly in one paragraph, it's safe to say that the reader can easily determine who which character is talking or acting within the writing. Of course you have to repeat the names here and there to show who is taking the spotlight, but not literally every time said person starts to talk or act right after they already did said 'thing'.

3. A lot of your sentences were written in a confusing manner, a lot. In some areas I found it hard to keep up with how fast the story was progressing. A perfect example is the transition from vaginal play, to oral play. The transition was so quick, that I actually didn't even realized Meenah had been placed in Willow's mouth till after an entire paragraph. I had to go back and re read two paragraphs to try and comprehend what even happened. I'd just say a simple solution is to draw out each act a little further, and add more explanation as to what is happening piece by piece.

4. "everything in the stomach was reduced to a much more manageable slurry" Slurry's definition doesn't fit this description, and I think 'mush' may have been a better fit.

 

On another note... I was super pleased when I read "where villi drained it of any and all nutrients" because I've never seen ANY vore story that has gone into great detail of the anatomy of the stomach and the small intestine such as you have!

 

I know it seems like I criticized your entire story... but don't let that give you the wrong impression. I sincerely enjoyed this read, and simply want to see your next piece of work come out twice as good! With your vocabulary and writing style, I'll without a doubt be keeping an eye out for your next work!

Bravo! 10/10 fo sho

Party Wiped Out by Petite Soeur Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1] New!
Summary:

English translation of a short story by RNA (あーるな).

Short parody of an orthodox RPG where a party of adventurers encounter a giant nymph sleeping in the middle of their path.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Fantasy, Growing Woman
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 730 Read Count: 372
[Report This] Published: December 17 2017 Updated: December 17 2017
Reviewer: Frizzle Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 17 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Interesting read. Was like viewing a boss battle... only in text lol. For nostalgic purposes... I'll give 10/10. Let the OG author know! :)