Reviewer: VividImagination Signed
Date: April 26 2014
Title: Chapter 4: Eyes Open or Closed. Either Way There's No Escape.
Wow. This chapter is excellent...and that was my thought before he even fell asleep. I'm rally liking Ben's character, and his bravery. It feels all too real.
His relationship with his mother and sister is quite touching as well, and the fact that he didn't tell them right away what happened for the sake of sympathy or possibly protection shows even more about him.
As for the dream. His arousal is warranted because of her size, beauty, and power. But I hope it's not because she crushed him so easily. That should be the focus of his fear.
Amy's got a plan, eh? So the kidnapping might not be for a while, or not at all for that matter. This has to be public. And while she could just grab him in front of all the students and say: "He's coming with me, and you won't even recognize him when I bring him back." It feels like she's got something a bit more extravagent in store. Then again...that could totally work.
Anyways, this was my favorite chapter by far. Keep up the fantastic work. I'm eager to see more.
Author's Response: Uh...wow. Damn. Sorry it's just that when I joined this site like a week ago I didn't think anybody would enjoy my writing so much. I came just to get some ideas out of my head. The fact that you enjoy this so much really means a lot. Thank you. I'll try my hardest not to disappoint.