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Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Crush, Feet, Gentle, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
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Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4 Read Count: 55770
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This chapter definitley won me over. I was already enjoying the story, and now gentle interaction takes place.
As we're humans, it is hard not to feel any sort of disdain to the Olympians, I have to rmind myself that humans started the conflict, and have no right to be on they're grounds. Though hunting humans for fun seems to be extreme. This may be a story where the two species can co exist.
The fact that the soldier at the beginning started the fight with what he called accidental fire is realsitc, but improbable due to how he would have been carrying the weapon.
Very few spelling errors, the different perspectives get you to get inside, and feel each charchter, making the language barrier, which is usually a stigma for one sided charchter discussion, no issue. Definitley going to be reading and loving this story. A favorite for sure.
Try writing chapters ahead of time, to avoid stress. It was a fun chapter before any mayhem begins.
I used to be a space explorer like you... then I took a alien snake fang to the stomach.
Ty is in his ag class that is filled with attractive athletic girl fresh out of their athletics class. see what happens when the girls get to mess with him.
True? As in.... this happened to you?
Placement of speech in the paragraphs is my only complaint, other than the lack of a powerful intro. Hope things speed up, I'll be reading however!
When homeless young girl Carmen finds a way to make quick money as a test subject, she jumps at the chance. What she doesn't know is what is being tested.
She soon finds herself at the mercy of a teen boy as a "present" from his mother, all the while slowly changing into a small creature.
Disclaimer: It's mine. All of it. You wanna use it? Ask first.
Very few spelling errors, a good, believable character who is so normal, they are good. I hope too see dialogue, maybe a explanation of her race, and a another chapter.
Princess Gwendoline, or Goldilocks as she is known, is a spoilt girl who has too often been used to pushing her subjects around and getting her way. What she is about to realise however is that messing around with a family of Giants will never end well when a Mother's Son is put in danger...
(This is Not a furry story!!)
This is my own version of a kind of "Grimm Fairy Tale". Most of the "hardcore" (eg, violence/humiliation/vore) stuff will not be until the last couple of chapters, but the story revolves around the interaction between the Giant family and the humans and how they try to co-exist.
I have read your earlier stories. Not what I would expect. I never was a fan of fairy tales.
I did like the change on the story. Nicely done, though maybe a change of title would attract more people, and mentioning the fairy tale aspect in the summary would help.
I mentioned that it was "My own version of a kind of Grimm Fairy Tale" in the summary, its jsut after the intro :) I've always been a fan of epic style fantasy stories, the whole princess in the castle, evil dragon, knightly knight lol, but yeah, each i know not a lot of people will read this if only because it has the "Giant" tag in the description
This is only going to be one or two chapters more, normal 'modern-worldy' type vicious killing of tinies will resume shortly :P
What happens when a young Englisman on vacation finds him washed up on an island? An island containing a sexy sassy giantess to boot? Fun and adventures of likes of which Jack Erikson has never experienced before!
This is a re-write of The Escape, I'm redoing it to address plotholes and the quality of the writing, it could do with an improvement.
Credit given to fellow user vgiv, who gave me advice on character development, fact checking, someone to bounce ideas off and to critique my writing when needed!
Realistically speaking, seeing how it is Florida the first thing that old guy would have grabbed would be his gun if he heard something.
I like how Jessica takes a swim in a bayou of all places.
You see... if the assholes in Miami had been gentleman like, she would be in a Jacuzzi sipping margaritas and giggling. But chivalry is dead in the US, so welcome to America Jessica, enjoy that murky water and cops shooting you.
Hehe...I know Florida has a lot of swamps( like Singapore but on my side its mostly in the north and east) but she doesn't have a lot of choice when it comes to bath tubs or baths at all. So the murky waters of the bayou will have to do until some good samaritan offers her a better place.
I should write a scene like that, a giantess sits in a jacuzzi wearing a bikini that leaves nothing to imagination while all around her, men the size of her thumb try schmooze and suck up to her in the hopes of winning her heart but she knows who she wants so its all just harmless flirting for her.
I've been spending most of my time on Giantess Booru these days, but decided to come back to World to browse. I'll have to go through chapter by chapter. This chapter just had the best name, so I gave it a go.
Jessica's one liners are amazing. She is much more iconic, forceful, and quite frankly, a lot more lovable than the already sexy gts we all got to know before the redux. Her personality contrasts well with Jack's own personality, which lacks her charm. Verbally, she backs up her size.
I LOVE giantess versus military/army scenarios. And this chapter captured the unstoppable, goddess like power Jessica wields and combined it with a mirthful humor. Jessica could easily wipe these guys out, but chooses not to.
I'll have to review each chapter when I've the time.
Aw thanks, great to hear from you again.
Well...Jack lacks her personality for now but things may change.
It's easy for her to kill but I think deep down Jessica would want to avoid much bloodshed because she would not want to be seen as a soldier, the exact thing the government wants her to be. She's not a killer either, so she takes a measured response to armed grunts who cannot hurt her. She's not in danger at all, bullets cannot even pierce her skin so there's zero fear of someone hurting her.
Looking forward to your reviews. I may send you an email soon, when my schedule clears.
I thought of it. I get that scene. I'll add it too the list of scenes that will lead to a series.
Ps I will be writing Incorporated later tonight. Hopefully. Probably.
Okay but I might use something similar in a story, modifying it until its different enough from yours.
I look forward to the next chapter, cannot wait to see how it ends.
What a dick move. Hot girl shows up to a beach after a long swim, and no gentleman buys her a drink? The gall of people these days... making a lady go out of her way for a bite and something to wear.
Haha and they say chivalry is dead? Jessica should definitely have gotten more than being forced to change in public, wear rags for clothes, eat raw and unprocessed food and then get fired on by some ungentlemanly soldiers for it. Yeah, chivalry is dead. Although she did endanger Caitlin with her eating so Jessica isn't totally blameless.
You get bombed, shot, and destroyed by F 35's, and the first thing she does is scream over the loss of her couch. Lol, Jessica's really American to care that much about a sofa.
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Hey it was your idea XD I liked it so much I threw it in, plus its a funny scene in a very serious chapter.
@mjfan
I have other stories going, and I am not sure when I want to release them, but I want to be able to dedicate myself to a single story at a time.
Vacation Abroad: Immigration's plotline has been written, but actual chapters are yet to be written. It depends on how me and Nostory coordinate. So while I can't give a definite answer, it will come out sometime this year, but most likely during the same time the original came out in 2014. So sometime in summer, most likely. Due to me having time. But it could come out earlier, it all depends on how the two other stories go, how fast I write them, but I have not forgotten about Vacation.
Which of course I'll be more than willing to help with.
I remember North Korea's performance in the World Cup. After that, coming back home must have been a nightmare.
I sent you an email, a new thread. Not sure if you received it.
I don't really know about the North Korea thing in real life, too much mystery over there but I could buy the more unsavoury ones.
Try sending it again, I got nothing.
Yea, uh, there is a j missing in that first word?
Me and Nostory, plus a third author are working on something, it won't disappoint. Nostory don't say who it is!
I'll edit it, I kind of just copied and pasted it from Google Docs. Thanks for pointing it out.
It should be noted that any spelling mistakes are my fault, to anybody who noticed any, as I didn't get to check the chapter because something went wrong my email.
Other than that, really loved the interaction with Lauren. Intense, creepy, and had that sort of feeling you get in a movie where you feel that at any second, the whole situation can change. Especially considering just how polite Lauren is, in comparison to Jack's naivete.
Don't sweat over it, can't fault you for technical difficulties.
Thank you, I really wanted to make it feel like Lauren was a woman you wouldn't want to cross.
Ahh... the English and their massive sense of decorum. Probably why they lost in The American Revolution to farmers.
Fuschia pink luggage... ha! I do like the way he feels like she is purposefully trying to pester him. He should have known shit can happen at seas... but considering Jessica's looks? I would trade places with him.
I always chalked that up to French aid and also that British arrogance they once possessed.
Pink is actually a favourite colour of mine to be honest so I threw that one in. I would definitely trade places with Jack if he didn't want to be with Jessica, she'd be a blast to hang out with.
High school isn't easy. Being 200 feet tall in a world made for normal people is no walk in the park either. Combine those two and you get Dawn Martel's situation. Throw in bullies who want to mess with a giantess and things get interesting.
Will Dawn be able to handle them? Find out in this tale!
I planned on releasing my first two a day after Afterlife ends. Is that going to be an issue?
Shouldn't be although I might be slow on the updates for some time.
I feel like a dick. I am keeping Nostory away from this in order to get a series ready fkr release, and I don't read what I am drawing him away from. I am a bit of a douche...
Oh don't sweat althought neither of our stories are out so we still have time. I thought you weren't interested in this anyway so its no big deal.
It could have used more detail. EVERYBODY forgets to mention hair and a skin tone.
I like the concept of a blind giantess, which surprises me as unaware is a least favorite of the genre for me, behind overweight and futanari. As she detected them instead of unaware, i enjoyed it.
Unaware just lacks emotion. Overweight and futanari? Make me want to vomit...