I'm a fan of giantess stories and would like to try writing something. My email is spookytaco7@gmail.com.
Splinter's Edge can still be found here: http://tinyurl.com/npbfgzu
Chloe finally gets to use the serum, and along with Jennifer's help, two more unsupecting victims fall into the ultimate experience.
Wow, that's probably one of the longer insertion scenes I've read. Not bad. Now as for Jill's thought at the end...she's not going to make a lot of money if she doesn't get him out of there! A man can only hold his breath for so long. :)
Poor Mark. Little does he know he’s next in line for a bath.
Maybe!.... maybe not. His job might be, 'a little bit dryer' than that.. ;)
Please take my advice with a grain of salt as I’m still trying to learn the ‘art’ of writing. What editor do you use? I just use google docs at the moment but am looking for something better. However, it does have spell check. Even though many stories posted on this sight are first drafts, spell check is automatic enough nowadays that I’d recommend it. Would catch misspellings like surprizing, articals, vehicals etc. Another thing I’m trying to work on is reducing adverb usage. Words like 'nervously' are ‘telling’ the reader. Instead you can ‘show’ the reader via context. E.g., The two wild-haired boys, dusted off the their pantlegs and fidgeted, avoiding direct eye contact with the girls. Just an example. Sometimes it is possible to go overboard with ‘showing’ tho, especially if the story needs to move faster, so it’s a judgement call. As for the story, well looks like Jen and Chloe are about to have two more toys. If only it were always so easy to shrink people. :)
I was just using 'wordpad', -no spellcheck- or anything else. Although, I just downloaded 'Google Docs', I'll give it a try...
I see what you mean about the adverb useage, we should focus more on the action words, and allow for more detail...
Thanks for the info., and I'll let you know if I find something better.
Bob needs to get back to Carly! :) Noticed less spelling errors. However, I’d recommend that you use ellipses less often. They are good for hesitation or faltering speech/thoughts, but that is about it. Rather than repeatedly implying to the reader that you have more to say (when the sentence already seems fairly complete), best to just use a period.
Yeah, I guess I just like the way they tail off at the end of a sentence... Ha:) I also have a problem of 'unconsciously' tossing in apostrophes at any given time, I had to constantly focus on that to break myself of doing it. I would just 'hit 'S 'S at the end of everything with an 'S' on the end. I get so wrapped up in the content that I was just so focused on the mental image of whats taking place in the story, that those little things like that would just 'automatically' happen.
I've needed that spellcheck for a while, was just putting it off because of the distaction it would cause while writing. Although, now that Ive got it, maybe I'll get even better. :) Thanks Spooky!
Wow, wonder how hard it would really be to hang onto a waist band for that long. :)
Thanks Spooky! Yeah, I'd like to find out, too! ;)
A lot of detail in Jill’s interaction with Bobby. Very nice.
Thanks Spooky! Means a lot coming from you!
I vote for waitress.
Well, thats' two votes for the waitress. Rosanne's a big star, And, everyone want's the younger minimum wage waitress to capture him? I know, there is something vary attractive about the innocents of youth, not to mention the younger, healthier, sexier body...
Different entertwining stories from a world much like our own yet incredibly different.
Wow, how did I miss this story? How do people get elevated? The first chapter was a bit suspicious. Anytime I read something like:
'She knew in an instant. She was in love.'
I raise an eyebrow...seems contrived, too fast. Then again, I've been guilty of that.
However I loved the second chapter. I really hope to see more of Ramona!
I going to adress how elevation happens in a side story, here's a hint Sammy took a field trip in this story to a very interesting place. She's less in love with him and more with what he can give her. Liana is not a good person, she did kill a guy.
Emily is a bit mean but I still like her. She’s realistic. Very sweet that she would let Mary (you misspelled that) live with her.
I find it strange however that normals are in the minority. I feel like it would be better if they were still the majority in terms of number. Just an opinion.
It's a transition period right now there are still lots of normal but we're focusing on specific normal people who have many elevated around them. Rain is the first to elevate in her family and Dave lives in a primarly normal nieghborhood. Unfortunately elevation is inherited genetically so kids born after thier parents elevate are born elevated. Greg's parents are trying right now wish them luck!
I like Raine! How tall did she get?
Just enough for Tyler to look up at her, but if Ramona's any indication Rain could be in for a growth spurt down the line.
Favorite relationship: Rain and Tyler, and not just because of their names. :)
Second favorite is Ramona, but I’m not a huge fan of Greg for some reason.
I kind of agree with @chrlorez. After I finish reading a chapter, I’m sad because I don’t get to see those characters again for a while. I kind of want a spinoff with just Rain and Tyler (and his family).
I like Rain annd Tyler too.
Poor Greg he's trying his best.
A Rain and Tyler spin off? Hrmmm?
Alan, a recent college graduate, returns to his alma mater the next fall as a tutor for a friend of his named Sadie, who shrinks and enslaves him.
Eight years later, he tells his story through Charlotte MacBride, a police officer, and an old high school friend.
Hmm, Sadie seems nice, but is she? Interesting concept that all males of a certain age are reduced in size. There must be some rationale for society to take such drastic measures. Interesting story so far.
Thanks. Dig your style too.
With a name like Sadie, you never know if she'll be gentle or sadistic. Look above for the 'rationale' comment.
I like how you provide substantial detail, e.g., items in Sadie's pocket, lint in her sock, smells, etc. It allows the reader to sense the experience.
I don't think I've said this before, but one of the things I find most interesting/arousing (both as a writer and a reader) in these stories, isn't necessarily the gentle/violent dynamic of the giantess/shrunken (wo)man relationship -- it's making a convincing giantess or goddess out of the 'regular'/'next-door' kind of girl.
Those little details and touches (the gum wrapper, stains on the pillow, cleaning out the ears, or smacking the lips after whispering, etc.) might seem unnecessary, from place to place, but they're essential for me in getting across to the reader that this girl, in many ways, is average and could be anyone -- she has these endearing imperfections, but she's also a giantess/goddess. I love that part about this fantasy. (And I see some of that in your story, too. That's what I meant about 'intimate', by the way.)
A man comes home one lazy Thursday afternoon to find things out of the ordinary, and everything suddenly takes a turn for the bizarre!
Some scribbles by me if your into that, although I'm gonna upload a pic-less chapter to go along for people who like using only imagination.
Its is a completely new writing style for me as well as a major departure from my main story, I hope you folks dig it! This is going to be a short story, 3-4 chapters, tops, then I'll be back on WOS!
Wow, you're really talented at drawing. I've never read a story on here like this. As for the shower, how the heck did Catherine grow and manage to get out of the shower and the house before damaging anything? Guess I'll have to wait and see...
My drawings aint too special, id say the talented one here is you, I effing love your story Splinter's Edge! You dont even need pics for that story to be engaging! As for what happens next, well you'll have to stay tuned for that!
[Reviews - 35] Well, looks like Red Bear should be safe from Becky so long as he stays inside the mine. Doubtful she could fit in there!
Good thing those bullets didn’t hit her in the eye; a mosquito bite in the eye would hurt!
Poor Red Bear. He’s apparently never met Becky before.
Strange how the more I read your style of writing, the more I start to develop an odd appreciation for it. The short chapters are a nice change of pace.
Uh Red Bear, I don’t think you realize who you’re talking to! BTW, how do you know so much about guns?
Hmm, interesting. I assume all of the Varangiants can control their size, otherwise they’d constantly be hungry for food. And if they can control their size, why did it require so many cattle to feed Rachel?
Oh boy, Red Bear doesn’t realize who he’s messing with!