Like so many that come here to escape, I enjoy reading these tales too. I'm trying to write some of my own, but I'm finding that it's a lot harder than it appears...
Hopefully, some of this amazing talent will rub off on me! I am trying to get better at fantasy writing, and I really appreciate getting reviews from everyone who reads.
A boy shrinks, and his sisters document the experience on YouTube.
I like the idea of the -s l o w- shrinking effect. I also like the 'text messaging' in the opening part. Lol! (Shaving his pubs) Ha! I love it, ...sounds like some of the trash talk my H.S. bud's used to talk. Also, the underlying fear that Eli feels is projected very well. And, Simultaneously, ...the way that his sister, or (step-sister) finds it thrillingly arousing that he'll become so small that she could actually pick him up, inside her hands, and play with him however she wishes...
can't wait for the next chapter...
Thanks, midnight! There are 4 chapters total at the moment (you described chapter 2 so wasn't sure if you noticed). I'll occassionally post multiple chapters at once, depending on length, story continuity, etc.
Man, if I were Eli I would be most humiliated. Measuring him so casually, and constantly reminding him that he is soon to become so tiny, he'll be totally dependent upon his family to take care of him. And, the idea of filming him, (Slowly shrinking) and putting it on social media, has to be 'completely' dehumanizing too!
I'd like to see someone leave a 'review/request' - asking for something a bit more intimidating, ...like, forcing him to climb up winters bikini-clad body, (Only when he's down to about six inches tall) Using a thin piece of string for a rope, she could tie it off around her head like a headband and let hang all the way down to her bare feet. Eli could start off climbing up onto her foot, and then begin his ascent up mount Winter!
It *is* YouTube, so I'm sure there will be all kinds of comments and suggestions. Luckily, Eli appears to have veto power, at least for now. From his perspective, he just wants enough money to get into Premoria.
Whoa, Eli's getting himself into some bad places, hanging around after school with the troubled kids. He should have kissed Zoey and rekindled that old flame, ...maybe, she really wanted him to become even smaller, ..rather than wanting a taller boyfriend like Eli first thought?
Parker's going to step into that role if Eli allows her to; she seems to be fascinated with the idea of him becoming smaller. I like the fact that he's brave enough to even venture back into the school and attempt to continue his normal routine. This is starting to become interesting now, ...nice character development.
I can't wait for Eli to get down below a foot tall, ...this is going to be a good one, I can feel it already! ;`)
Interesting thoughts on Zoey. At least she signed up to help watch him at school, so we'll probably get to see more of her intentions. As for a foot tall, that may thake a little time, but it's getting there. I'll try to make it worth the wait. :)
Oh, Eli makes such a cute little girl! I'd like to see him forced to dress up in a little pink ballerina's outfit and wear it all day long, ...and, let Winter take him to her friends Slumber party for the entire night! Ha Ha, or something like that, ...I really like the humiliation and his resistance. It's kinda erotic on some level...
Haha, a slumber party isn't a bad idea. His sisters certainly do seem to like enhancing his feminine characteristics. Thanks for the review, midnight!
It seems very plausible that someone would experience something like that. The temporary mental regression that happens, would seem like you were trying to catch up to your reversing growth, ...a backward step in your own personal evolution.
Made me think, about the actual 'realism' of this bizarre situation. One would be quite confused if this was actually happening to them, (aside from the physical shrinking) the mental shock alone would be most devastating...
Great work Spooky!
Yes indeed. Most of us read giantess stories because of the fetish factor. However it's almost equally interesting to consider the possible mental ramifications as literally everything in your world changing. Possibly no two shrunken individuals would adjust the same. It's fascinating to consider.
M,m - the way that Winter is acting now, I wonder what she'll do to him when he can sit comfortably in the palm of one of her hands? The tickle torture ended too quickly, though, I would have liked it to have lasted a bit longer...
Eli's going to have to start listening to his much BIGGER sister, (Winter) because she's simply the best 'watchdog' he could possibly have! Great Chapter!
I selected the tickle torture for the chapter image because I remembered your comment. :)
Woooo, Eli better beware of Aunt CeCe! She seems to be the type to find enjoyment with someone like him. Maybe, take advantage of the situation and make Eli into her little slave, ...or, 'Pet'?
....seriously, though he better be careful around his new babysitter!
Welcome Back! I was starting to wonder... . . .
Thanks! CeCe seems to have her hands full with the baby at the moment, but who knows what she'll do if Eli misbehaves. ;)
Is Eli not human? - in your last response you referrenced that 'Humans' don't respect Priemies, i.e. humiliation, dominance, etc.
...or, was that just a brain fart? L.O.L. ;`)
still waiting for Premoria, ...Can't wait!
You should get to see (some of) Premoria in the next chapter. :)
As for Eli, he's a premie. Most don't consider premies to be fully human because of their biological differences (size, requiring premie powder to aid digestion, taste, susceptibility to binding, etc.). However, like any label, there are those who consider premies to be entirely human. Their voice simply isn't status quo, yet.
Wow, Premoria looks to be so awesome for a premie. I can see why Eli wanted to see it so badly. Winter will just have to get a job there... 'sorry Eli'
LOL, well so long as she doesn't try to control his life, Eli probably wouldn't mind.
As for Premoria looking awesome, we've only see a bit of it so far. There's a lot more to see.
Still with you here, Spook! Awesome personal developement within the story. So subtle, and yet, ...so powerful. I've been trying to predict what's coming - and you've thrown me a hook every time! Lol! ...been following closely though, really great writing (Professional style and quality) Hopefully, I can pick up some of your talent!!
Hey there midnight! You've got quite a lot of talent yourself, especially with your latest story, which I need to catch up on. Back in my Splinter's Edge days, I think you were one of my first reviewers, so essentially you helped push me down the path to write. Thanks!
A teenager has the ability to shrink objects and decides to use it to shrink people to use as playthings.
You use some very interesting comparisons. I like the way that Caitlin casually ponders the idea of life and death; her unrelenting tease, such a torturous predicament for her unsuspecting victims. Their fate completely unknown, this teenage girl has become their goddess and their entire world!
I'd like to see her capture an older man, maybe one of her teachers, or someone in an authority role... maybe, a police officer? Keep him in total suspense, and force him to submit to her in different ways...
I like your writing style, and it looks to be very well written too. I'll give more suggestions later, ...if you like?
Great story so far...
Thanks!! I'm more into the F/F genre tbh but I might add a shrunken man in here sometime or another to appease to a wider audience.
And yes, keep the suggestions coming! Like I said, I'll probably need some inspiration if/when I ever get writer's block lol
One suggestion: whenever you switch to a different perspective, use a bar of some type like - *** or ... or ~~~ . I order to separate the different scenes.
~ not to be a nit-picker but, just a suggestion...
Whenever I'm reading it, and I have to 'stop' to figure out where I am, it kinda interrupts the flow of things, ya know?
Great chapter, though, ...Caitlin's casual teasing might get out of control, I hope! ;`)
Can't wait for the next installment!
I might sometime in the future, thanks for the suggestion!
Trapped on an uninhabited planet, Peric survives with his Fyth, a giantess slave.
In the chapter end notes, did you mean to say 'Five' chapters? Instead of 'fyve' ? Ha!
This is really pretty cool, Spooky. The 'Other-worldly' aspect of this place is very interesting, ...I seemed to find it a slightly humorous, at first; the thought of a giantess being persuaded by this miniature humanoid-type creature. The tree names are pretty cool. And, the fact that her blood is green, too. It's easy to imagine what's taking place, even from the standpoint of an alien...
I started to take it more seriously after the 'Punishment scene' I could get into this as a much long story, ...Or, is this just testing the waters to see if people react to it?
I like it. But, It seems like a lot of work to create such an elaborate tale, and then make it so short? (Only Fyve chapters)
Lol, I noticed my first 'Fyth' story was five chapters so decided to stick with the length of 'fyve' ;)
Since I have a tendency to not finish stories, it forces me to complete the story in five chapters. Plus I made it a series, the Fyth universe so to speak. Each short story contributes to building out the universe, so extra detail I add doesn't get wasted. They can be read independently, but they're also doing a bit of world building.
Thanks for the first review!
L O L ! I nearly cracked a rib reading this! ;`) So flipping funny!
So elegantly written, so perfectly exemplified - 'POOP!' Yes, I said, 'POOP!'
Shit, Man, ...goog thing it didn't stink, huh? Would have killed him for sure! Ha Ha!
I'm starting to wish that I had a Fyth of my own, ...I'd tell her to carry me around all of the time. She would have to bath more frequently, though, and maybe wear a thong bikini, too. But, yeah, ...I could dig it!
Lol, I'm glad you found it funny. And I agree, a Fyth would be awesome. I'd treat her a lot better than Peric, that's for sure.
Whoa, Spooky, ...that was incredible! I've never quite experienced anything like that! Vore usually repulses me, ...but, being a Fyth it seemed so much more acceptable. The thought of her previous owner perishing inside her stomach;after he found the skull, was a terrifying image to deal with, but, considering that he must have lost it, and went crazy in there, Peric seemed to deal with it in a more relaxed way, ...focusing on more positive images, and imagining things to pass the time away, ...I'm hoping that she eventually expelled him from her warm belly and the two of them are still carrying on together...
Onia do very GOOD! Fascinating Tale, Spooky! Loved It! ;`)
Thanks, midnight! I'm usually not a fan of vore either. In researching this, I discovered a new word: endosomatophilia. Amazing how there's a name for every fetish.
As for the previous owner going crazy, it's hard to know. I left it somewhat open ended. Peric mentioned that had her stomach been smaller (had she not evolved) he likely would've been unable to survive in there for long. So maybe Tomas went crazy, or maybe he simply drowned or died through some other method.
Best friends Matt and Lexi meet up again in college but Matt learns Lexi's secret -- that she has size changing powers.
This is an episodic series of adventures centering around that premise. It's meant to be more playful and fun than other stories of mine, with some serious elements.
Awesome start! I already feel like I can 'picture' Lexi, ...she seems pretty cool too. I like the way that she teases, (telling him that he was 'Stuck' like that and that she couldn't return him to regular size) her finger poking and blowing her breath, ...she really likes being a giantess! I love it!
...what? I get to rate a Sonic Story! Alright! ;`)
In the post-Shrinking Disease world, the biggest danger to little people isn't the things they once were able to ignore, but the relative giants they no longer can.
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Wow, I thought that he was going to get to shower w/ her, when they were in the bathroom; that would have been awesome. Based on the way that you've discribed the other events taking place - I would have liked to experience that...
...you're detailing is simply incredible! And, you know when to back off and let the readers imagination fill in the blanks. Although, I would like to see a bit more of your own, ...your writing is fantastic! ;`)
A drunk woman living in a trailer park saves the day for her neighbors.
Hm, that's just about the nastiest story that I've ever read! I assume that Tammy never really sobered up enough to fully realize what she'd actually done? Lol! Had to keep reading this, though, I almost stopped a few times, (It was like when you're passing a bad automobile accident, you just have to look at it - you can't help yourself) Nasty!
Excellent writing though, ...but, I'm glad that you wrapped this one up! ;`)
Nice Job!
There's a joke in here about nasty women, I can feel it.
Thanks for the review!
Two very different girls find themselves working together when four-inch-tall Jacob Smith attends their high school.
I found this to be very realistic. I actually found myself visualizing what was taking place. And, that doesn't happen very often... It's an extremely long chapter, and to hold my attention for that long - well, let's just say - Bravo! I really don't enjoy vore, but this was very well done. The girls weren't dominant, or careless and they both actually took their time and relaxed before hand, - which, really made this feel real!
Your writing is top quality and your skill is simply amazing! I really got into this!
Great world building, as well. Loved it.
I always have a good visualization of what the characters are doing when I write, but it's impossible for me to tell if my writing actually conveys what I'm thinking, so it's nice to hear that it was so vivid for you. If the main goal of giantess fiction is to bring an impossible fantasy to life then immersion is arguably the most important factor in any story.
Every girl you see during your day is a possibility of a future untold. Here is one of them.
So deeply thought-out; to provoke something dwelling within us all... I felt as though she, had no real idea of their minimal existence, their ultimate affection, their complete and utter sacrifice... Their unending servitude, to this magnificent being - looming above them like some Monolithic Goddess... merely seeking to use them in the most thoughtless and menial ways, to devour them without any indifference.
....makes me think of my Highschool! And, my teen years, all over again... ;`)
Great Stuff!
Thank you so much. That's exactly what I wanted to convey here, I'm really glad it's seeping through the words :).
Highschool, and teen years, are the paramount era in development. I too wrote this story remembering one of my high school crushes... Back then I viewed women as unobtainable, distant, and serene. And she was (probably is) a bookworm as well, that's where the inspiration laid. I'm thinking of raising a long-overdue request of a flat-based story from that very same cave of memories, when I finally get to it :). So, we might perhaps see more of her on this site... :).
Thank you again.