Reviewer: Kouichi Signed
Date: November 02 2013
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great story so far! After reading the first chapter, I was expecting a simple cruel story involving a sexy Flare Admin but I'm surprised at how much thought you put into the lore. The way you warped Flare's goal in X/Y into a slave/micro story is brilliant. And Chloe is magnificently dominate as per usual with the cruel woman in your stories. Keep up the great work, Kaneda.
Oh and I'm very excited to see what you do with Malva. After defeating her and seeing her personality, I knew someone was going to use her in a cruel macro story.
Author's Response: I don't know how well I got a feel for Malva's personality, but I just finished the first chapter of her interactions. Like you said, though, I found her kind of impressive when i interacted with her during the game. If anyone has the potential for violence in the game, it's her.