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The sexual tension is near palpable. I love the interaction between the two. he is scared and mad, yet at the same time, curious. She is playful and even nonchalant, but finds his situation absurd and something she seems to enjoy. I love it!
An 18 year old sister finds herself shrinking and must live through the embarressing trauma of shrinking smaller then her 15 year old, 12 year old, 8 year old and finally two year old sisters. suddenly she isn't the dominate one in the house and her mother just doesn't care. Can she survive her sisters as they realize the upper hand they have?
i have a few problems with this story. most of the characterrs are not really acting their age. those are some very smart little girls. too smart for their age. and the doctor? how could he simply forget about a rare disease that alters the lawsof physics and biology? that really made this a hard read for me. i understand kids can be cruel, but i didnt really see any overt cruelness from the main character that would warrent the cruel backlash. all i feel is pity for the main character and disbelief at the sisters. i cannot believe that the main character is that mind boggling dumb and the next older sisteer, i think emma, is just as dumb? then all of a sudden the next two are near geniuses? i can suspend disbelief, but not that much. and none of the sisters are afraid of catching the rare disease? the doctor has not called the cdc to say a rare disease that changes the laws of physics is now loose in the states? it seems to me like you are writing about someone you know and dont like, using the characters to get back at them. like i said, i can suspend disbleif, but not this much.... on a positive note, its a good premise. the characters are decently thought out, and your writing style is pretty good.
as this is my first story i hope you can understand that everything isn't going to be perfect. i find it hard to create 4 different personalities and keep them on track with each other, especially after the long break i took. Stacy isn't really smart, she is just manipulative and all the problems she has faced haven't been that hard to overcome. Emma is often shown to be the new "mother" of the house as Kate is now ill and so i haven't really developed her. she isn't dumb, she is just easily tricked, afterall she is 15. the doctor was just a way for me to create the scenario and so didn't put anymore thought into it. if you want i will expand on the world and explain the shrinking disease more. comment on others who have got it and explain how it isn't contagious. also, any form of shrinking or growing (which is what this website is about) would go against more than just the laws of physics. there's biology, as well. Kate isn't stupid either, but has been severely mentally damaged through her trauma with her younger sisters. this causes her to restrict her actions out of fear of punishment. if you want i will give her more of a strong will so she would be able to fight bakc or out think her sisters ... hmm, yes that does actually sound nice. and lastly, no. this story isn't some way for me to "get back at" someone. this is simply a story.
The story of how I become my friend's plaything and foot toy
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interesting. the male character seems much more mature than carol. which is odd if they are the same age. i liked the moral dilemma you put micro into and the way you played it out. it was the best written part so far. i hope you can continue in the same vein. i like carols playfulness, but micro seems like hes five years older than her, if not more.
Ironically Carol is the elder of the two, being atleast 3 months older than Micro
ohhhhh, mystery. i love it. would it be rude to ask politely for more? awesome sauce start.
hi jj. interesting start, though like wildcatman said, proofread and space. i understand the dyslexia, and this is for fun, but make it fun for us. you have a good start, but slow down. again, like wildcatman said, dont just tell us the air in the show was stale, show us. how did being in the shoe affect all five of his senses? sounds are muffled, a bad taste in his mouth, blinding light when her foot is removed. and how does kim feel about it? you said she was sadistic, which she somewhat seems to be, but why? finally, give us emotion. make us feel what jj feels, cramped in the dark, dank shoe. let us know what kim feels as she holds a full grown person in her hand like a plastic army man. she seems like this has happened before and isnt surprised. instead of any kind of acquaintence, he was in her sock and getting stroked. you have an interesting story that can be made great. just slow down, descibe and make us feel. i really hope to see more. ps, i wouldnt introduce new characters until we know the first two. im not even sure what jj or kim look like. remember, just because you can see the characters doesnt mean we can. hugs
The world's most average teenager finds himself shrinking down into the playful clutches of various gigantic women and facing sexy macrophilic doom of truly familiar proportions.
A short-ish parody of giantess fiction.
why did i just picture miley cyrus and jimmy fallon back in high school? well done.....
Thanks!
22 passengers on a bus are in for the ride of their life.
A disaster leaves one small girl straining to survive under the harsh reality of the new world she has been thrown in to.
Will update summary as story progresses :)
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very well done. emma is very relateable. i just want to hug her and take her home. she seems so fun, but so sad at the same time. more please.
I have been reading this story and didn't realize it was yours vgiv...I like the style. You give different personalities to your characters and they are believeable. Very well done!
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this is a cute little story. so far i like it. couple of issues, but nothing major or to trouble yourself about, just personal quirks. please continue
Thank you for the criticism. I'm glad that you've enjoyed everything up until now, even if some aspects weren't very appealing to you. Yes, I will be finishing this story, I just don't know how many more chapters I'll be writing before then...
this short story is adorable. very well done.
Victoria was a pretty average girl, until she was taken captive by a group of people who liked to shrink people down and pretend they were giants. She was eventually liberated by a rival group and volunteered to participate in an experimental shrinking cure. Now she has gone from being 4 inches tall to an actual giant!
But her captors are still out there, and they are very powerful.
Reminds me of Land of tne Giants. You have a nuce easy writing style but the first chapter was s bit confusing for me. Overall, a very good story.
Mike’s life turns upside down when, at age 15, he gets the incredibly rare shrinking disease. His stepsister who is 17 finds the whole thing amusing that Mike shrinks whenever he becomes sexually aroused, as small as an inch tall, lasting 24 hours before returning to normal size.
Hi jedi I really love your stories and your style. I was wondering if you would be interested in coauthoring a story with me similar to this story. Let me know! Biancamouse50@yahoo.com
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Thanks
Guy, 19, has the shrinking disease, and his sexual thoughts shrink him. His 16-year-old sister offers to seduce him to strengthen his resistance to sexual thoughts. But she has her own plans for fun after he shrinks.
Size reduction as small as 1 inch.
i really like this story so far. and its great to see you back.
Thanks for reading. And thanks a lot for your kind words.
Its like you read my mind! I would so love to do what she is doing. And yes, more mouth and breast play! I would have let him finish on my breast, maybe even kept him there a bit longer before jarring him. But your writing is such a treat!
Thanks Bi! I'm glad you relate to the story. More fun on the way. Thanks a lot!
A man wakes up to find himself the property of his coworker.
This was a well-written story, though not my cup of tea. I have issue though. In the description you have the size as 3 to 6 inches. Yet he is only an 1/8 of an inch. That set me off as 3 to 6 inches is one of my favorites. 1/8 is not. Akso, you may have been in a hurry to finish, but in the last chapter you call the woman Karen instead of Kristen.
Like I ssid, your writing is impeccable, but those two things killed the story for me. I would love to see more however.
Thanks for pointing that out! I fixed both the problems.
I've got a lot of sloppily-handwritten stuff from long hours spent bored and alone on the ocean. I never bothered to end most of it, but I'll put it up here anyway in time.
All Ellie wants is to see her boyfriend again, but when a teleport goes wrong, she may never see him again.
A shrinking woman story.
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This is a wonderful story. So dominating one moment tben gentle the next. I love it! I would love to read more of it and mote from you! I akso want go find one of those portals....
