[Spoilers] Thanks for your reply. I read this again, and most of your other stuff too. I can see why you run out of steam. You're an excellent writer but you're not willing to explore dark corners. Out in the light, there's only so little to do. Your characters are witty, self-less and almost always completely moral. I say almost because Susanna tricked Vincent into her mouth that one time, abusing her power to have a laugh at his expense. But afterwards she apologized so hard that she cried. That's a reoccuring thing too. The crying. Then there is (accidental) mouth play and some body exploration, which is precisely how The Castaways is going to continue. That's sad because it is predictable.

I would so love to see you experiment and explore new things with this story. There's so many things to build upon. But I don't think you will. There is not going to be a character with impure motivations. No one is going to die ever. There is not even going to be a real bull-in-a-china-shop situation, as you were going for in chapter 1, which was absolutely brilliant right before you took all the steam out of it by going back to a safe and proven theme from your other stories: Retrieval of object from mouth or stomach. The scenario basically plays out the same way every time. If that's your cup of tea, fine. I'm only being so critical of this because you are one of the greatest writers I have ever had the pleasure of discovering for myself on this or any website (style-wise) but you fail to produce intriguing plot-lines.

You are so unfathomably good at conveying emotions that I feel as your characters do while I am reading. Now imagine the emotional rollercoaster you'd be able to send your readers on if suddenly something bad was happening. Power was being abused ever so slightly. There is an injustice. In my stories, the characters devolve into evil shadows of themsevles and it is surprising when they do not act selfishly or evil, which I absolutely hate. You are gifted with the ability to write gentle. But it will only ever carry to it's full effect if there is something in the story as a contrast to help it stand out.

Otherwise this story is going to be just like your others, when it could be one of the greatest there ever were.

...sorry, I'm really upset about this.

Great story! Emmagear uploaded a story recently around the time this got featured. So I think Emmagear can actually do that. Can't say I'm not jealous :D

Authors have precious little time to read, but I took an exception for this one. Great stuff. The satire is kinda lost on me for some reason, maybe because I don't find any of the anti-Trump comedians funny either. No, I won't get political. Not here. Again, great story.

Totally overlooked this. Great stuff, fascinating characters and development. I love Annie's ditsy character.

*urgh, that's 10 and 20 cm of course. Don't know about fingers, the system the Americans use is retarded to begin with.

Also, is your alias a hint at the condition of your soul?

Really cool story. I like it. Very believable characters that I'd love to hear more thoughts of. I don't really understand military people ever, but I guess you nailed them too. I'd love to hear more of their thoughts, understand why they do what they do.

There's a bit of an issue with formatting that you could fix. It's all squished together and hard to read and memorize. I jump lines often, even when I use the reader in Firefox. To fix it you can go double enter or something like that, but that sucks. I've found that making the format perfect in Word or Open Office Writer and then just copy-pasting is best. You can not use the preview function that way though, because it fucks up the formatting in the editor. Best of luck, can't wait for more.

you can write, man. Nice!

This is glorious. A tad long on the build-up, but that's okay. I didn't expect the puppy to be out of the bag before he would shrink, tbh. Fired-up for what's next, although that's bound to be a son of a bitch to write, plotwise. Somehow, I feel like they may have misdiagnosed him at the hospital. 

Good luck with the next chapter. I love your style. 

Great descriptions! Reading this somehow felt like watching a movie. Is it me, or was chapter 7 pasted double, though? Can't wait for it to continue. Kinda hope Sofia finds another shrinkie somewhere at some point. 

Wow, quite a ride. Mary's perspective freshened it all up. Not gonna lie, though, you took a few shortcuts earlier, with the lawyer just being too lazy for instance. You could have sold that better. Still a great read. 

Good story. I wonder what will happen if he's not dead after 60 minutes. Then again, if they can eat their 'customers' and there are no cameras, it doesn't seem like evidence of the killing is necessarily required. This could shape up to be something truly remarkable.

One sidenote, which you may or may not pick up: given the track record of courts and the death penalty in general, there is an incredibly high chance that Allison has killed innocent people before. Perhaps she'll realize that in time. Where's one, there's usually more, after all.

Cheers.