Nigma, this was a very sexy story. I was particularly impressed by how much you were able to evoke from the characters in so little space. Plus, something about the funeral setting made it that much better. I'm not sure that I've read a GTS story quite like it. Great job!

I can only think of one piece of constructive criticism to give you, and really it isn't much, but anyway I just felt like you missed an opportunity to expand even further on the funeral setting. While I of course enjoyed Kerry's violent imaginings, I think you could have made it even more personal by introducing another character, however-so-briefly, and have that character give Kerry a hug or something, thereby increasing the tiny's suffering even further. Maybe a knowing remark from Kerry during a snippet of conversation between her and someone else could bring the horror of the situation starkly to the fore. Just a thought.

Either way, I very much enjoyed the story and I'll be going back to read the rest of your work as well. Hope to see more sexy foot action from you in future stories!

Inwiththebooks, this is a fantastic story you've written, one of those rare ones on GiantessWorld that perfectly blends porn and plot. I have to echo what others have said and heavily compliment you on the great characters you've written. Both Velia and Alatha seem like real people that I might actually meet one day. You do a great job of making their thoughts and interactions both lifelike and compelling, and that's what really drives the story. Excellent job!

The only area of improvement I can see revolves around the Super and Villain aspects of the story. Don't get me wrong, everything so far is really good, particularly the interplay between the fiery villain and our more timid heroine. The fact that Alatha is an actual criminal makes everything just a bit spicier. However, my worry is that as the plot gets more complex, things will become much more difficult to explain away. You might want to gloss over some of the details as opposed to making a patchwork of reasons and excuses for why something implausible might be the case. For instance, you were veering dangerously into the incredible (as in, breaking my suspension of disbelief) when you mentioned that Alatha didn't have any fear of police coming after her because they "had bigger fish to fry." Something about her just strutting around in broad daylight didn't ring true with me, but you only mentioned it in passing, so it didn't take me out of the story too much. Don't write yourself into a needlessly intricate plot-corner, is what I'm saying. Just something to watch out for.

All-in-all though, I can't remember the last time I was so hooked on a story here on GiantessWorld. Your prose and skill are polished enough that I feel like I'm reading a published book as opposed to some smut online. Added bonus -- I used to live in New Orleans! Knowing firsthand how hot and humid it gets in NOLA, I imagine that Alatha's feet will be quite sweaty and gross... if you catch my drift... ehehe... (Seriously, moar feet!)

Words cannot express how happy I am to see this revived. PLEASE CONTINUE!

Very cool story!! Agree with what many people said on your fantastic execution of the darker tones / subject matter. Great drama and action, and a nice twist on the bully and victim relationship... had kind of a fun and sexy anime feel to it. Hope you write more in this universe!