Reviewer: ephemeral Signed
Date: June 02 2013
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I really enjoy this work. It's clear, and at sometimes simplistic in description, but in all the right ways. It really shows up in your minds eye a real picture of what's going on, and in this fetish, that's incredibly important. (At least to me)
So, as a reader, I'm highly anticipating what comes next. I especially like the possible splits you end all the chapters at. A cliffhanger of sorts. For instance, one chapter ended with Claire taking notice of the truck...and you're left wondering what's going to happen next. And now, with her leaving on her mission, and those people being in 2 separate groups...I am left to imagine endless possibilities about what she might end up doing now that the next chapter will focus on her perspective.
I'm glad there's a newer writer with a foot focus, it's fresh and really keeping my interest. I'm coming back day to day to check on progress! Especially after your non-canon teaser chapter, it's clear you know how to work up a good crush scene. I cannot wait.
Looking forward to things to come!
Author's Response: Thanks for the meaty review, I appreciate it!
I hope my descriptions aren't TOO simple. Please let me know if anything seems rushed and I'll take a look and see if revisions are in order. I think Chapter 3... I think I got so carried away with descriptions back there. I don't know if I will ever be able to top that one quality-wise. I'm happy to hear you say I'm able to paint a clear picture though, that's always important to me when I'm reading something.
Cliffhanger-ish endings... I always hate when episodes of my favorite TV shows end on them, when season finales pull cliffhangers it can be infuriating. I do feel like they've been the best way to end the chapters of this story so far though. If I'm doing them right, like you said, the readers should be anxious to read what comes next and even spend a little time imagining the events that will take place in the following chpater(s). Although I suppose this could potentially be bad. You and the other readers could imagine something really brilliant will unfold in the next chapter and then when you read it you're met with disappointment, haha. Hopefully that won't be the case.
I'm really glad you mentioned the non-canon chapter. You're actually the first person to do so, out of both here and on giantesscity. I've been considering taking that chapter down and was going to do so today and maybe add it in again somewhere down the road but then I read your review.
But anyways, thanks for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you're enjoying so far and I hope you'll continue to be able to.
