Reviewer: el_rooto Signed
Date: December 03 2012
Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Alone in the Dark
Imho the story is just as good s the previous episodes, both in the story itself and how it's written. 'nuff said.
Re the sister thing, I'm quite perplexed.
Myself, I don't like the idea -- it's the very reason why I din't read the blackmail series, and by "didn't read" I don't mean "read without commenting", or "read and complained afterwards": I just din't want to read it, so I didn't.
Yet this story is not really disturbing to me(*): they haven't done anything disgusting, you wrote they wouldn't (I trust you on that!), and I can't really imagine the story making any sense using a neighbor/friend/schoolmate/whatever(*), at the _very_ least because the beginning would become absurd; and as long as the story is good enough that
- I don't know what's going to happen next ("it wasn't Maggie")
- Reading it N times is always a pleasure
I guess I can just stay focused on what's happening rather than who Maggie is.
But maybe it's just me.
PS
When you finish this story and move to something else, please consider moving to "Mommy's Time-out 5".
(*) other than the "big/little brother", but nvm
(**) Where's his girlfriend from the 1st episode btw?
Author's Response: I may take a break from the series before moving onto the 5th iteration, but it'll definitely be back since the short episodes don't take long to write, and as it happens my plan was to bring his girlfriend back from the first story to participate in the fun again. thanks for reviewing/sharing your thoughts
