Reviewer: TheZiku6000 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24 2022 11:54 AM Title: Chapter 13, Part 2

[I'm reposting this review (AGAIN) to phrase one thing better and to correct some minor mistakes. These brackets are just in case that you looked at the website, saw my review appear, and then disappear.]

Hello again! :)

Good to see the next chapter! :)

This chapter feels like another breather before another load of brutal stuff. I wonder if what we've seen in the story so far was the most detailed and long depiction of how harsh the reality in this world can be, or I if was just the tip of the iceberg and you have something even more intense in mind.

I hope than none of the main characters die, of course, but of I had to guess which character has the greatest potential to meet that kind of fate, I'd say that Brayden is the most "qualified" person for that. As mentioned in this chapter, he's not giving up on Candice, which means that there is potential for a tragic love story where an ending that is the closest to the happy one is when they die together. In my opition, this subplot has great potential to be a "horny tearjerker" (as in, a story that moves you but also happes to have a lot of horny stuff). I'm looking forward to see where this is going.

I still wonder what kind of detention it will be. The amout of suspense rose with just one sentence from Ms. Johnson and it wasn't mentioned at all how did her voice sound like. Was it stern, or rather said in a way that doesn't give off how she perceives the situation? In any case, this definitely sounds like a subtle reminder that she remembers what kind of situation the boys were in. I think she probably has a very good guess as to how and why the boys were in that dangerous situation and no one had to tell her that.

Characters based on reviewers, you say. I'm willing to entertain the idea as long as my character won't be involved in "sexy stuff" and it isn't an ACTUAL battle royale, where it is COMPLETELY IMPOSSIBLE for more than one participant to survive. From your Chapter End Notes, I guess this is probably quite a lot to ask, but these are my conditions for a character based on me. I hope I'm not too demanding. 

As for possible role in the future of this story, I think I'll settle for being just briefly mentioned as a person who knows about tinies and has VERY negative opition on how they are treated. As a guy from the internet. I think this is the best option as not to make the story awkward, because my character is mentioned only on one or a few occasions and uses his internet nickname (because Ziku is obviously not my real name). The idea is very interesting as a whole and I can't wait to see how it will play out.

Looking forward to the next chapter of this story! :)

Have a nice week! :)

Author's Response:

I like your first point because if all goes according to plan, we’re sort of in the first of maybe three tiers of “knowing”.  We’re about to encounter the second tier in the night club. That’ll be a monster of a chapter and will probably confirm your “breather before another load of brutal stuff” thought. It should be one entertaining part after another though. I’m hoping that it’ll be a really fun read and will start to point towards where the story could be heading. That part will almost be an entire mini-story of its own. Probably longer than a lot of stories on here too. Then we’ll probably spend the rest of the story building up to the third tier that I’m hoping will land with a big “what if”. As much as this is a fun giantess story, I’d like to try and add a little bit more to the end of the story. Something that really takes the craziness up a few notches but finishes with a somewhat deeper meaning besides just being “fun”.

I’m very interested to see where Brayden’s character goes as well. We’ve got a bunch of different ideas for him that all lead down very different paths. Still working out which one is the best, but it’ll hopefully be a satisfying one at the least.

That is a good point that I didn’t comment on her tone. To be honest, it was just overlooked. But now that I’m looking back at it, I kind of like the way it sets up the unknown. My favourite books are the ones that I can’t easily predict what’s going to happen, but can still make some educated guesses on what it might be. Although I’m not a reader on this one, I might keep the vagueness of that part and let Ms. Johnson show it in the next chapter.

Haha, noted. I didn’t think your name was actually Ziku but I kinda like it. It could be a very unique name. I kinda doubt that this side “reviewer story” will ever actually take place because I have so many spinoff stories and sequel ideas in mind. One thing that I have been considering doing is starting up a spinoff story to write as Little Learning is moving along. Not that I’m necessarily feeling burnt out, but I’ve been told that writing two different stories simultaneously can actually be a good way to keep generating fresh ideas. So we’ll see if a spinoff ever comes to be. The hard part will be choosing which story to tell first lol.

Always appreciate hearing your thoughts!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 18 2022 10:58 AM Title: Chapter 13, Part 2

Whoa! This was amazing! This was a very erotic chapter, especially after the setup from the previous one. 

When Mrs. Johnson said that the class would be divided into groups, I thought Alexis would take a few groups too. But I guess this makes sense so they wouldn’t lose or crush anyone by accident. 

Also, I wasn’t expecting the groups to take turns and I imagined one group on each body part lol. But I actually liked the way you wrote it better. Each person gets their own one on one time with an intimate part of Mrs. Johnson. And lucky little Noah gets to match with her pussy right before Mrs. Johnson has her orgasm. Talk about hitting the lottery. Not only does his group make her cum, but he also gets the best seat in the house. 

I loved the part where as Noah was pulling his head out of Mrs. Johnson’s vagina, her finger just pushed his body inside her. Now that’s super hot. She must’ve been in the zone and did it by accident. But if it was on purpose….that would be even more naughty. 

Ahh detention. I’ve always loved the thought of detention with a hot teacher. Just imagining how you would get punished almost made me end up in detention a few times. Now in this story, I’m sure sure Noah probably had similar thoughts as myself, but with the locker room experience, he has conflicting feelings, and I love it. Seeing these boys in fear actually excites me. There’s a thrill to it that I can’t really explain, especially when there’s someone like Mrs. Johnson that’s going to be responsible for it. 

Then we have the conversation with the boys. But the star of this scene was Liam. I think he may have fucked up. Lol. Mrs. Johnson told him to keep that between them, but now Liam told about his adventure to the boys. Now if one of this boys accidentally mentions this while Mrs. Johnson is around, she might go after Liam for spilling that secret. Oh boy, maybe Mrs. Johnson may actually take that original offer and take him home with her. 

I loved how Noah described Liam as, well, Liam. That’s kinda how I perceived him too. Just a random guy who probably struggles with girls and to hear about his experience with Alexis would surprise me too lol. I hope Noah doesn’t let this go and maybe he is the one that brings it up accidentally. Man, this could be one crazy side plot. 

In addition, Liam’s view on it also made sense. I like how he saw himself as an easy target for Alexis when she decided to use him. Probably wanted someone who was shy or obedient and someone that she could toy with. 

This reminds me of Alexis’s personal toy that she actually doesn’t use sexually and had to trade him away. So hearing this story with Liam again makes me wonder how often Alexis has this sexual adventures. If it’s not often, then Liam is a lucky guy and it would be funny to see him back as a sex toy. I know Liam is trying to be helpful by sharing his past with Alexis, but the thought of having him regret this later sounds too good to pass up. Lol

Then we get Brayden seeing Jaimey. I totally forgot about the boys seeing the girls again. That surely has to frighten them and maybe some ptsd as they walk the same halls as their sexual tormentors. 

Brayden’s idea of using his phone to record Jaimey’s crotch as she goes up the stairs sounds like the most brilliantly stupid thing to do.  Sure, it actually worked and he figured out that Candice is stuck there, but I don’t think he could actually change anything. Maybe Brayden could offer himself and switch places with Candice. Now wouldn’t that be romantic. Idk. We shall see how far Brayden goes for Candice. 

Hmm, a new side story involved characters based on the reviewers? Now that sounds promising. Also, I think earlier you told me it wasn’t possible to add me in the main story, but if there’s some new changes, I’m definitely interested, haha. I think you already know how to involved my character into one of your stories, so I’m not too worried about that. The details could be explained later anyway if needed. But yeah, I would love to see a Tom character in one of your stories and I could already imagine myself in his shoes. 

I can’t wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

One thing that I want to do soon is get Alexis into the action. For now we’ve been pretty focused on Ms. Johnson and the group of boys. Alexis has really just been that quiet girl off in the corner who everyone wants to get to know. She’s going to be a major player in the second half of the story so she’ll be getting some more screen time soon.

Ms. Johnson does most things with a purpose, so I like to think that she pushed Noah inside on purpose too. Could be wrong though! After all, Ms. Johnson certainly has a mind of her own when she’s aroused. Just had to speed things along a little since she knew she was getting close :)

I love that the changeroom chapter continues to have implications on the story. I completely agree with your take surrounding detention. Although perhaps a fun idea given that it’s Ms. Johnson and she’s awesomely sexy, they did just do a very bad thing. So how does Ms. Johnson respond to that? One can only nervously speculate. 

I picture Alexis having an interesting fact about herself that will be revealed a little later in the story. Because, like any teenager, she’s got needs raging through her body. So she’s gotta take care of those needs somehow. But she also has personal commitments that she doesn’t want to go against either so it places her in this awkward situation. I also like the idea of her being a “very fun” character. So we’ll see if she ends up coming across that way or not. I think she’ll have her moments like in the very first lesson.

Liam kinda makes me laugh lol. I picture him as being that kid who everyone knows but nobody knows anything about him. He can be a little much at times that makes it hard for him to make friends. He’s that creepily nice kid. I feel like there’s been one like him in every class I’ve ever been in haha.

The Brayden and Candice characters are certainly interesting ones. I’ve been working with one of my peer reviewers to try and nail down their character arcs. We’ve got a few interesting ideas for where we could take them. It’s hard to choose the right one!

Glad you’re still enjoying it!