Date: May 15 2010 12:58 PM Title: Chapter 9: Past Revisited, Present Reunited, Future Revoked
i think the story is really good but i would really like to see this hero suffer a little, maybe some pain. I would like to see him unknown to her suffer inside her nylons or shoes while she actually is thinking about him as a 1 of past ex bf tht she liked alot. Plus i also think tht when she takes tht guy home she decides not go with him coz deep dwn she likes the hero deep down, and when he leaves she plays with herself and the hero gets trapped between her fingers and her vagina, as he suffers he could get pulled in. whatever you decide im sure your story would be great but ust passing sum grea ideas tht id like to see this story go into. ;)
Date: July 19 2008 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 1: Awake In A Nightmare
Wow! I read this excellent story a while ago, and I thought it was over. I was too lazy to review then, so I'm glad you had something in mind to continue this.
Author's Response: Yea I've actually already got the final chapter written out now it's just the battle of getting the rest of the story to lead up to it.
Date: June 25 2008 11:20 PM Title: Chapter 1: Awake In A Nightmare
Nice beginning, although you do have a formatting program in part two. Nevertheless, looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Yea I know there was something from when I copied and pasted from microsoft word that caused everything after a certain point to be italicized I tried to fix it but no luck.