Reviewer: Panzerhunter Signed [Report This]
Date: September 09 2020 4:57 AM Title: Chapter 12: Finale

Wow, that was long for only a week of writing. The nanomachines and the ending remind me of "Working for the Smiths" mixed with "Not the One", but the story itself is the kind of rampage that got me started reading this sort of material. Rampages are criminally underrepresented in today's stories.

I do sort of feel like Eirica, shouldn't have been offed immediately. Saki hated her so she should have made her endure Saki's day out. It would have been nice to read her perspective as her hard work is stolen and utilized by someone else, or her trying desperately to regain control of the situation but coming up short.

Ideas:

Switching between multiple small perspectives and one growing perspective as a woman ascends.
A reluctant giantess who slowly loses it because of the world's treatment of her.
A a couple in a relationship try to make it work as the woman goes through some changes.
A technologically advanced humanity encounters a race of giant women, the goddess at the center of the milkyway galaxy, etc
Two women trying to reach larger size/ goddesshood with buildings, cities, countries, worlds in the crossfire.

Author's Response:

Hi thanks for the review. This was a long story, true, but this was also an interesting case since I had the idea for a nanomachine-based giantess for awhile now. So, when I finally had time to write it, I already thought of a few things she might do etc. Outlines also really help for writing a story since they can keep you on track and focused.

 

That's an interesting perspective regarding Eirica. The flip-side is that Saki was also pretty gleeful to move on from the mean boss she had, I feel. At least, that's partially what I was going for. You are right in that there could be more of the whole "stolen apotheosis schadenfreude" if Eirica sticked around a bit longer, but I feel as though that might be a little more petty than Saki might be personality wise.

 

Thanks for your ideas by the way. I will keep them in mind, but I typically go with my own ideas for stuff.