[Report This]Date: August 13 2020 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 18 The Fourth The Fifth
Hmm. I just read the latest 3 chapters. A little different from the rest of the story.
First, thing I noticed was that there wasn't any Ms. Eve or Amy content in these chapters. My mind is spinning wondering what they possibly could be doing. They possibly got Archie and I'm guessing Luke is with them too. I thought Phill was inside Amy when she visited Ms. Eve's office, so I was surprised to see him chilling in the classroom.
Tom and Aliesha did basically nothing these 3 chapters either lol. They drew nothing during art class, they talked about nothing, and they did nothing while at school or in their dorm. I'm kinda impressed at how you described them doing nothing in multiple ways to show how much their relationship is being tested. I think Tom doesn't mind being alone since he was forced to lick Aliesha for the most part, so I think he is handling it better than his partner. He still kinda likes her I guess, which is why he also has a sad demeanor like his partner.
I think the star of this part of the story is Aerin. She seems to have this naive, innocence about her, which I guess makes Josh start to take care of her like a parent, but now she wants more so they are becoming sexual. Reminds me of some cute love story of two people exploring sex for the first time. Except this time, it's with 2 different species. Their drawings in art class were pretty cool. I also like medieval stuff so dragons, knights and all that would make me smile too. I agree with Jack. They are a weird couple. On the bright side, I think they are figuring it out.
Lastly, we have Jack and Kairi. They are easily the most relatable and if this story was a movie, this couple would be the love interest that the audience would love to see develop. The way they love each other seems very genuine and it doesn't feel random or forced based on the partnerships as the other couples. Also, they are working together to defeat this crazy school system and fending off Kairi's mom's antics which makes Jack and Kairi's bond even stronger. I especially love that little detail at the end where they found the tiny sleeping bag and the small bed. We all know what Ms. Eve's message was for them and Jack and Kairi was like "fuck that" and decided to sleep together, literally. At this rate, I wouldn't be surprised if Jack and Kairi run away together to start a new life together. That's how close I see them, and it's touching.
Some really good chapters here, even without Amy or Ms. Eve. However, I think this just gets me more excited to see what you have planned for both of these naughty women. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and taking the time to review as always.
The latest chapters are a bit of a detour, I wanted to give the characters some rest and also developtment before more heavy stuff hits, especially involving Ms Eve.
Tom and Aliesha had their developtment halted to focus a bit more on the two other couples and finish the chapters I had for them. Now I am focusing on them and the latest chapters deal with their issues and struggles.
Aerin and Josh are an odd couple, but they are brought together, like Kairi and Jack, because of this. And the dragon is from a show they watch in their dorm together (I plan to mention it in the future, perhaps as a little subplot). And the knight is how Aerin sees Josh, her knight who comes to her rescue (even if its just basic stuff).
Jack and Kairi 100% have the strongest connection. Being the target of Ms Eve, they bond over this struggle and this strengthens the relationship.
And glad you liked it. I do apologize slightly for the lack of Ms Eve, as mentioned, I wanted the characters to take a breather. However I have written and uploaded new chapters that 100% focus on here and shine a light more on her long term plans. I hope you enjoy it!
Thanks for your review and hope you enjoy the latest chapters!