[Report This]Date: August 19 2020 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
do you take requests??? holy cow what an amazing story!! I love that you added onto this! you should make a series out of this! I'd pay good money haha it was awesome!!
-cheers
Author's Response:
Thanks, happy to hear it was enjoyed! I don't usually take requests since I can be a bit too whimsical in my writing to deliver that. People are always free to make them, but rarely gets put to paper if ever.
Date: August 14 2020 3:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
Looking forward to it. Also, I don't know if you remember, but around four years ago I gave you several story ideas on devianart. Any chance something would come up with them?
Date: August 14 2020 2:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
Always glad to see more stories from you Inwiththebooks. Vore isn't really my thing I'm more into foot crush but it was a nice follow up to the other stories nonelthess. If Julia was smart she should have attacked before monologuing. That reminds me of a scene from The Incredibbles when Bob Parr/Mr. Incredibles and Lucius Best/Frozone where making fun of a villian monologuing. By the way, will you be writing another Humanity's Downfall story anytime soon, I really like them.
Author's Response:
If she were smart is the key there haha. I always did find it silly in my tabletop experiences how the villain has all the time to monologue. When ya know, could just attack mid sentence. Fiction-isms.
As for Humanity's Downfall, I might have another short story for the setting among my list of things to write. Dunno when I'll get to it, but its in the cards for the near future.
[Report This]Date: August 08 2020 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
Yes! I was super excited as soon as I saw you'd written another story in this universe, and it absolutely didn't disappoint.
I really enjoyed the setup at the start, and general pacing. I adored the details of Julia's perspective after she dwindled down so much, as well as Rea's general reaction and dialogue.
As one small critique, I did find myself wishing that there was just a bit more of the mouth play. Relative to the rest of the story, it felt a slight bit rushed compared to the lovely build-up that preceeded it. That's a relatively minor complaint, though and it didn't impact my enjoyment of the story.
Thanks again, and I look forward to seeing what you come up with next!
-Jess
Author's Response:
Happy to hear you enjoyed it, and yeah looking back I can see how that segment would come off as rushed. Something to note down for future stories. I definitely appreciate you pointing that out!