Date: September 19 2020 12:15 PM Title: Chapter 16 - Getting to know Loren Issakinen
Wow, that was a surprising chapter... not sure what to write here, so just a quick question: the summary says "Growh: Mega (501 ft. to 5279 ft.)" - is there really going to be something like that or is it just an oversight? (or "wait and see!" of course)
Author's Response:
Lol if you can't think of what to write, feel no obligation to comment XD
Alas there is neither an oversight nor a wait-and-see element to "growth". More like I was annoyed with the UI on this webpage and chose to be lazy and not to use a workaround to deal with it. When you are writing a story here and configuring categories, if you click any values in some of the selectboxes for configuring a story, as I did for "growth", you are compelled to select exactly one of those fields. "None" indicates the non-clicked state of the select, and is not a selectable option. So I clicked "Growth" accidentally and had no means of fixing it using the web interface itself. The workaround is to open up your browser's HTML development window, find the element in the page, and remove the "selected" attribute from the selected option, then save the story again. Seeing as how there seem to be a lot of high-quality stories which nonetheless have some minor miscategorizations, I didn't bother to do that until you mentioned it, because I figured nobody would care.
Date: September 18 2020 11:19 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Getting to know Loren Issakinen
Wow, that was really emotional and romantic , I hope them be girl and bot freind , thanks for your efforts , please more make it long
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!
But I do need to wrap this story up at some point and move on to others. I'm thinking 25 chapters tops.
Date: September 18 2020 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Getting to know Loren Issakinen
I was so eager to read this when I saw it posted, but was busy earlier and just got the chance to sit down and read through it.
This is now my favorite chapter overall!
Sexy content wise you continued the trend of great imagery and descriptive scenes, the part with Brett in her shoe was great, as was him sucking on her toes full size.
The mouth content was also really well done, and evocative.
Non-sexual content wise, you've really gone a long way in developing their relationship. Or at the very least, establishing the framework for one here.
Her treatment of him while shrunk is fully understandable, and also links with her lacking of social and personal relationship norms. She hasn't been in a loving totally consensual relationship with someone before, she doesn't know the proper etiquette, and that's without adding in Shrinkee's.
For all her intellect and tech savy, human interaction is where she she finds herself grasping for answers, and the anxiety and genuine fear here when she potentially screws up what could be a first real relationship with someone who likes her and admires her not just physically but also intellectually, is shown so well and I was feeling her anxiety and fear bleed through.
I stated before I wanted to see this relationship grow, and how I could see Brett continue it beyond their 'shrinkee training' and schooling, and this only reinforces that.
I genuinly am rooting for these too, and excited and hoping to see where their relationship goes from here, not just physically but emotionally and personally.
I have my concerns what will happen to Brett at the hands of the other teachers, or the Amber character. But I am hoping that Loren will either save him, or support him after the potential trauma or negative interactions, being there for him when he needs her, and vice versa.
(phew) sorry for the long winded rant/review there, but hopefully it gets across just how much I like these two characters together.
And that's even touching on how excited I am to see the next chapter's content XD
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks! I really appreciate your review. I am glad that you feel that the backstory adds value and that you like the characterization. Loren's character is very close to my heart.
I can't reveal how the story will end, but you'd be correct in apprehending that there are at least some figures ahead who will be of the "unchecked merciless hedonist" sort, and maybe some real malevolence, but nothing bloody or fatal.