Date: June 24 2021 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 4
Quite an unexpected addition to the story, both in terms of content and the fact it actually happened.
When the adventure began, I immediately became invested in the story and hoped for a nice slow burner with dynamic relashionships and rich worldbuilding -- the setup was perfect. Then it abruptly came to an end, one that felt rushed and brought nothing new to the characters and an overall sense of misery. As I belive the storyline should not be influenced by anyone but the Author themselves, I grudgingly accepted the sad reality and moved on (especially having in mind your declaration concerning the length of the story).
The new chapter (epilogue part 2?) is in a way frustrating: the story is oficially over, yet some of Sona's actions indicate her attitude towards Florina is changing ever so slightly. These two have great chemistry and it just seems so wasteful to leave things the way they currently are. A new story featuring them could be an idea worth exploring.
Best regards,
C
Author's Response:
It was unexpected to have written them haha. As for the rest, yeah I can understand being disappointed there. Wasn't something I was intending to do long form. Set out with an idea in mind and then executed it. Kinda knew it wouldn't be most folk's cup of tea just due to the premise itself. Still, I'm pleased it was enough that you would want more of as that at least tells me there is something good about it!