Reviewer: kbDArt Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2023 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

I like the story a lot. Great ending. Personally, I would prefer the tiny to be a little bigger, maybe an inch to 1.5 inches to allow their physical details to be more descriminate and their voices heard if a regular-sized person picked them up and really focused on them. In this story, the sister barely notices even when focusing, though she finally does. One thing I never figured out was how he got shrunk. Would have been a nice aside if the mother had noticed the remote and said to her daughter, "honey, you left your shrinker in the living room" which could have explained things in a nice fashion (ie, the brother thinking he was using the TV remote accidentally shrunk himself).

Reviewer: Omanahan88 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2019 4:44 PM Title: Chapter 1

Loved it!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I've really enjoyed your Losing Control story as well!