Reviews For The Potion
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Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 17 2019 8:48 PM Title: Part III

 Very nice Vatrena. I found myself wondering what the giantess witch was really up to... leaving her door wide open, and allowing tiny Nate to return to her hut. It was a little too short and quick.

 There were a lot of room in your set-up for a multitude of different senerios... she could have had a cage with several little captives trapped inside - a reptile or two to guard her quarry. She could have kept Nate, for so much longer and slowly tortured him in various ways. Sexy ways... forced him to watch the torture of her other captives. You write very well, it just felt kinda rushed. Like you were just wanting to finish the first tale?

 Slow down and just write us a longer more involved fantasy-like story - enjoy yourself and image yourself as the giantess. Savor each moment as if it is really happening and take us for a ride... I like your discriptions and the personality created within the giantess witch.

  Look forward to your next story! 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you very much for the review!

Well, to be honest, I wasn't really rushing it as much as I just wanted to write a shorter story. I didn't want to write anything longer since I didn't want to put in a lot of time if I didn't know how it might end up.  Although I do like the creative thinking there! 

And myself was the exact person I did image in the giantess. 

And again, thank you. I might do that. Just wanted to throw something short out to see how it goes first. I might make it into a series. Maybe a universe of its own.

And I am looking forward to seeing you read the next one! 

Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2019 5:02 PM Title: Part III

Terrifyingly sadistic.  What a cold witch, though quite sexy in her indifference to Nate.

Aside from a few spelling mistakes {which we all make from time to time}, a very nicely written story.  Looking forward to your next story.

Hmmm, Goddess Vetrena, that's probably a better penname. ; ) 



Author's Response:

Well, thank you! She's done worse when she was playing with them without trying to be careful not to break them for her potion recipe.

 

Yes, I may make a spelling error from time to time seeing as i'm not native English myself. So please forgive me if there is a mistake or two.

 

Well, maybe. Although I don't need to show off Goddesshood in my name to be a Goddess. But I'll think about it.

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