[Report This]Date: May 30 2019 6:34 AM Title: ACT II: Les cadeaux du monde
Sometimes when I read a story, one that presents specific character's point of view, I wonder what makes them special and most fit to tell that particular tale. At times the answer is immediate, The Tragedienne, however, is not such a case. And so I am left with a question: what makes Summerlyn different from other highborn people who came in contact with Merphomenee? She is a princess, but so were many of M's 'pets'; she is eloquent, well-mannerd and bright, but these characteristics are also not unique to her. One might argue her being 'special' is due to her better understanding of the magical nature of the universe (multiverse?), but the existence of other worlds is presumably a common knowledge to the inhabitants of Illyrica and her injury left her a de facto disabled person, unable to perform even the least impressive acts of magic (which, if i remember correctly, is commonly used to solve day to day problems in Illyrica) - making her seem rather pathetic in the eyes of native Illyricans rather than unique.
In spite of being left with questions (or maybe due to it?), I eagerly await next chapters. At this point the plot is difficult to predict and so the story is all the more engaging. Chapter V itself kept up with my expectations and, though lacking in action, was by no means a boring read. Descriptions were as vivid as inprevious chapters (maybe even more so) and the whole experience very immersive.
Criticism: It can't be sunshine and rainbows all the time you say? Personally, I find the usage of real world names of regions slightly unnerving. It does not take anything from the story, but somehow does not fit and breaks the otherwise splendid immersion.
Author's Response: Thank you for expressing your questions! It helps me to hear what my readers wonder as they read through the chapters so I can gauge if I am spinning the impressions I want to leave. Your thoughtful critique is also gratefully received; I will try to keep it in consideration.